My Bavarian beauty sat close
Blowing her Riesling breath across my eye lids
I escorted our companion to the communion
I hoped would arouse and highlight her areolas
The peach sorbet felt cool to my lips but warm on her breast
She shuddered
As I led a trail from her nipples to her quaking
Inviting
Mound
Her fair skin fluctuated from pale to soft pastel
As her heat melted our companion within my hungry lips
Pouring a portion between navel and her flesh orchid
I pictured images of Georgia O‘keefe seductive canvases
Licking the dripping sorbet from her hips
I inhaled the scent from the tangerine body-wash
Between her crevice and her lips
I lovingly washed before laying her onto the bed of rose petals
My tongue gnawed at her labia as her thighs crushed me with pleasure
Her blond locks tickled my nostrils as I shook my head in approval
Within her
Mixing fruit with climax
My desserts lay satisfied and empty
Sticky
But satisfied
Author notes
Written April 30th, 2006 - Mykey
In a list
A contest entry
- Hott,Hott,Hott-Part 2. by Lucky-Charm.
300 points, ended May 12, 2006, 8 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Grand Theft Heartache by adsaige.
700 points, ended September 12, 2007, 9 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Calling My Erotic, Sensual, Romantic Writers of ALL times on AP by Ephiphany.
500 points, ended November 5, 2007, 11 entries
Honorable mention
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Love ur color scheme here....lovely
This very sensual has a nice flow...love the imagery here...speaks to me;
thank you and Good Luck in the contest.
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Hm...
This is absolutely erotic, yet so sensuous. I liked you word play on this and I'm adding it to the finalist list. -
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Thank U so much I appreciate the acknowledgement!!
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This is a very sensual poem that you have written, and I honestly adore (and envie - lol) the metaphor of sorbet here
I have to be honest that erotica isn't immediately my pet peeve, but if all erotic poems are written this way, I might change my mind on that
Very well done, keep it up!
Leander
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LOL!!! Thanks - Erotica doesn't need to be slutty and just in your face. I try to keep with a more sensual feel to erotica. Not just WHAM, BAM!! thank ya George. I appreciate your kind words. ~ MyKey
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Hrm interesting choice of words for describing sexual things. You know it reminds me a lot of a book I just read, The Story of O. I got some nice imagery from reading this. Kinda hot...
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Thanks ~ I started with the woman being the treat but ran to the fridge and said, "hey that would be cool"!! Thanks 4 your great comments ~MyKeY
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Maybe it's just me
I seem to be intrigued and disgusted at the same time.
Good choice of words, lovely imagery.
But the thought of having sex with sorbet as the catalyst... just grosses me out.
The only word I didn't like was when you threw in "mound." It seems so foreign and out of place to me when you have so many exotic and beautiful words in this poem.
Keep on writing.
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LOL!! aight... thanks for your honesty. I appreciate that more than general comments.
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thankful
Thank you - I try to keep the imagination with the reader with a little help. ~ peace ~ mikEEEEEEEE -
Amazingly sensual, and tenderly crafted. It was excellently put together, your use of words and imagery were both immaculate. The flow was lovely and smooth, gradual and satisfying. MAgnificent piece.
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sexy & sizzling
Ummm, totally erotic! Done in a manner of beautiful vivid words. You have given me the picture of lust. Perfect free verse. Nice flow to the read, very sweet imagination.
Write on!..............ennovy
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Excellent
You have always had a way with words, you can compose the most sensual poems in a tasteful manner, great write, thank you for sharing and keep them coming.
Edited on May 04, 8:20 p.m. because ''.
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