The hourglass is empty
The clock's stopped.
Night and day
Both cold and dark.
Why'd this have to end?
Your bitter goodbye
Rings through the silence.
As time stands still
Beside this broken girl
Lonely and shivering.
Scared to death
No one loves her.
Looking back, searching
Dwelling on the bad.
Trying to remember the
Once happy girl
Smiling in all the pictures.
Perfectly imperfect
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Written April 29th, 2006
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wow, i really like how you used the hourglass in the beginning to show that everything has stopped for her and that she is alone...or thats what i got from it. it was a really great ending and i liked how it wrapped up in the end.
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hey you know what?!
I love you
and! you used my favorite saying thinger
perfectly imperfect
actually mine is
perfect imperfection but yeah same Deal
haha
I love you Pookie -
You've managed to express a lot with just a few words. It is very effective and nicely done. Keep writing!
All the best to you...
~J. -
Very well written. Strong and emotional. A feeling I know all to well. Nice style and deep though. Keep up the good work.
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I think you've found your style there, YF. You just keep turning out these nice writes, one after another. Excellent job again.
Paul -
This reminds me of me. And thats shocking, truely is. Man this was just a bloody brillant write! Your a great poet. And i love this piece, awesome emotion...actually i can go on forever saying everything brillant about this write but hey you knwo this rawks.
Autumn
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