She tries so hard for recognition
The powers to be don’t see her ambition
A Pandora’s Box of problems launched in her path
The troublesome screams from her wayward mother
She clenches her fist and in a flurry of anger
Paints out a picture of hate and slander
ENOUGH! She cries as she hurls herself into the land of tuneful screams
Hoping the pain and anger drift away into her dreams
A last hope lies with her creativity
Art is her escape, and music is her methodology
The music flows through her head
Thoughts of her mother, lying there dead
But it’s all just a dream
Her stability still there, her smile emits a gleam
Hidden behind a shield of stubbornness
The pain and suffering won’t escape
I hold her hand, through thick and thin
I take my hand, put it under her chin
'Nothing is going to harm you my dear
Not while I’m here, not while I’m near'
A sweet kiss, a lingering hold
You will be ok, she is told
At last her gleaming smile is present
The demons plaguing her are nevermore....
Baby I love you, with all my heart
Your life is yours, I play the part
The knight, armour shiny and clean
You and me babe, compete in this world....as a team
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Written April 29th, 2006
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Sometimes it is that simple.....
I love you baby x -
this is really a great write. a little sad at first. but all in all it is full of love. a very deep love and in the end it all turns out for the best. this poem has such a nice flow to it. i loved the ending. very, very nice job.
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Wonderful
Wonderful poem, so full of pain, and yet hope. Very well written. Thank you for sharing this beautiful poem. I really like the ending so much. Good job. Keep on writing and sharing.
Jeannie D
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I think this is sweet. I think it could use a little work though. The rhyme scheme seems to be a little scattered, some lines in the stanzas rhyme, some don't. The rhyming lost me a bit. The only other suggestion I have, would be to tighten up the first and second line, try changing the words around, making it a little more powerfull. I think omitting "so" from the first line makes it that much stronger. WIthin the second line I would change
powers to be
to:
powers that be.
Just simple suggestions. I think this is a good start. keep up the good work. -
I wish it was that simple.....I love this poem.. very imaginative...
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Yes. I can feel the love tonight! Lol. Keep writing. Your still in that "teen love" era in your life but keep discovering and you'll grow into a full blown romance writer!
CARINO
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