When, in my silent reverie, I think
of consequence and death's long final sleep,
a sadness fills my mortal soul; I weep
for loss and life's decay--I see no chink
of light, or gentle balm, to ease my pain.
I know there's really nothing left to gain,
and so I am teetering on the brink
of madness: is my race then fully run,
am I a creature hidden from the sun?
Not so! There's one whose vision lingers yet,
who lifts the tiredness from my jaded eyes;
an angel captured in a silver net
of time, beyond the reach of truth or lies:
her guiding light has pierced my dim grey skies.
Author notes
Comments or critique welcomed.
Written April 29th, 2006
A contest entry
- Romance From The Heart by SorrowWithoutWords.
300 points, ended May 3, 2006, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - All Forms, All Subjects by something wicked.
600 points, ended November 24, 2007, 32 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - TEN THOUSAND POINTS OF RHYME (Now 20,000+) Part 9a Feelings by cricketjeff.
1500 points, ended January 29, 2008, 40 entries
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Perhaps the shell will perish, and I know it will, yet the spirit that is so strong within its constraints shall not. It shall carry forth into the next dimension, knowing a realm of peace. 
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Another well written entry from you Bill.
We are both looking forward to what you treat us with in round 10
Have fun and knock our socks off!
Jeff and Sue
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Very nice ...
and I'd say that whomever you wrote this for is probably mad about it. Good job all the way 'round.
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Thanks, James, for your encouraging words.
Cheers,
Bill -
Very Good
Yeah this is really good, I have had a few reads of these of the last few days, before I commented - but i really like it, like the way it reads, the words as well, really good.
James
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Many thanks, Sorrow--I'm really pleased you like my entry.
Regards,
Bad Bill -
Excellent!
BEAUTIFUL! This is one of the best I have recieved so far! great job wonderful flow, subtle rhyming, descriptive imagery! wonderful! It's early in the contest but i definately wish you the best of luck! Thank you for entering!
~Sorrow~
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