Simply the curve of the spine
on a drooping hammock,
feline in its settle on robin’s trill
is homicide for the eyes
and drain of plasma without a shred
of evidence that a lace bodice
might resonate a glimmer
of magic carpet voyage.
Men have fallen upon their sword
for such a cherry-polish sweat
as that which tests the reticent furrows
of skin well browned in shade
that has threatened to vanish.
Your leg arches over the blanket,
nails like vermilion kisses
and I am plastic, too long in the sun,
a sycophant, salivating at the metamorphosis
that one fragment of you
could evoke such hyperbole
as butter on warm pumpernickel.
I deteriorate as easily as this,
though you would inure
the empyrean thoughts
of an asphalt dreamer
who has stepped, momentarily,
into a place on the sidewalk
where he could test the surreal symptoms
caused by a stranger, lapping up the sun.
Author notes
#4. I challenged myself and used all the words on the list.
Written April 29th, 2006
In a list
A contest entry
- ...:Lost in the Translation:... CONTEST by deadcolor dreams.
300 points, ended May 10, 2006, 10 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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My words escape me but I shall return to leave a far better compliment to such a piece.
Yink
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Once I got on a roll..I could not NOT use them all. You know me...push the envelope. ty my friend.
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Bravisimo! If that's how it's spelled,not more than likely. You presented a masterful rendering of the word list in a fantastic written piece.~~Suseann
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I can so relate, but you did do a excellent job, thanks for the applause, peace!
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Thank you beautifultragedy. I find it a very worthwhile exercise to enter these types of contests. It definitely pushes the envelope.
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LOL, it is very difficult to take someone else's word list and make it pliable enough to flow smoothly without a sense of being contrived.
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Thank you for your comments. Those words were very difficult to weave into the poem, so the poem wove itself.
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The imagery is wonderful. I really felt like I could feel and see everything going on. I applaud thee.
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I'll be right back, let me grab my Random House Dictionary, lol...
It sure sounded great, but me thinks it's too early for me to make any sense out of this...For I'm a bit stupid.. But you just wait till I drink this cup of Hott 
and I'll be up to speed in no time, well, it will take some time, but not much.
Thanks for the read, seriously, it all seemed to flow very well together. Best to you in the challenge.
Much love, Timothy
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great imagary and a beautiful use of words this was a lovely poem and I thoroughly enjoyed it
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