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Blind date ♥

 

 

 

Wow, today's the day
I meet my other
My unknown beloved
My "hope-to-be" lover

I've awaited this moment
For all of my life
With everything I've heard
She'll make a good wife


I've waited eagerly
For this very day
I can't believe I'm meeting him
I have so much I want to say

We talked before for hours
I enjoyed that too much
Now I can finally
Feel his tender touch


Finally I'm going
To see her by my side
I' can't hold it in
My love for her I can't hide

Arriving at her house
I pick her up quickly
Starting to talk to her
My lines are spoken briskly


As I stare into his eyes
I can not help but blush
He is just so mesmerizing
My heart begins to rush

Where exactly we were going
I really didn't care
Just longing for him to be near me
And forever to be there

The farther we went
The more I could now see
My love for her
This was all meant to be

The car came to a stop
And we both turned to the other
My hands start shaking
And my heart starts to sputter

I started to wonder
What made the car stop?
A romantic dinner together
All my hopes dropped

So we came out of the car
And decided to have a walk
But we just stared at each other
We didn't need to talk


The sun began to fade
And minutes turned to hours
We sat by the trees
And between all the flowers

I reached for my pocket
She would never have guessed
That there was a ring
Waiting for her, in my vest

I started to get nervous
As he pulled out a gift
He asked me to marry him
In my dreams I started to drift

Impatiently, I said yes
And I saw him smile
He put the ring on my finger
And wanted to stay for a little while

We sat and waited
For the stars to shine
I am hers now
And she is mine

Together forever
Till the day that we part
Sweet dreams my darling
You are safe in my heart


And from then on
Our love story began
Making sure it never ends
We'll do the best we can

With us together
Is a dream come true
I know you truly love me
And I love you too

Author notes

This was made by me, Never Fall In Love, and my blind date, Darkend Skies
We worked together for this and we enjoyed it too
The poem was written two stanzas at a time, with his two first and then my two and his two, etc
hope you all like it!
Written April 28th, 2006

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  • Ryno
    March 1
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    hope you dont mind


  • Ryno
    March 1
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    to get away from the number


  • Ryno
    March 1
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    so, I am using this poem


  • Ryno
    March 1
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    CHANDNI MY COMMENT NUMBER IS 9666 AND I AM SUPERSTITIOUS ABOUT NUMBERS LIKE THAT

  • DarkRomantic113
    April 10, 2008
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    This was excellent. I loved the picture. Glad you won some trophies for it.

  • loving
    January 30, 2008
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    this is really good. the story is simply amazing!

  • kales4
    January 29, 2008

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    this was a very wonderful poem. I really enjoyed how it was from two diffrent perspectives

  • MxA
    October 23, 2007

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    All I can say is beautiful absolutely beautiful this indeed is one of our best entries yet. I really enjoyed this write both of you did an incredible job, the flow was fantastic and feeling in this is truly touching images are sweet and romantic. Thanks for entering and best of luck


    MxA

  • OurxBeginning
    October 23, 2007

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    I thought this was very cute. Your rhyming was done so well. I loved how it developed, and how perfect it all was. Loved the ending, summed it up. Thanks for entering and good luck.


  • Dark Whispers
    September 25, 2007

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    this is a well structured poem you two did a hell of job on this, I love the ending, great write thanks for entering


  • Loveandblessings2u gold member
    January 25, 2007

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    WoW Sweet Heart:
    I can't believe I missed this one, this has got to be the sweetest poem ever.
    I love the way you both took turns writing this, and it turned out great.
    It really is so cute, the both of you have done an exceelent job.
    I enjoyed the whole story, it sounded so real.
    You can write in many different styles, that is real talent young lady.
    You continue to make me proud.

    love you too bitzzzzzzz & pieces.
    Your Granny


  • Never Fall in Love
    June 2, 2006
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    thanx alot for ur comment
    yea, i'll check ur poetry
    no problemo
    much luv
    ~NeVeR~

  • PointShoesAndPoetry
    June 1, 2006
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    15 out of 10 stars

    Wow....this piece is beautiful. I love it. it took me a second to realize that you were reading from both of their points of views. I'm a little slow like that(lol...jk). Anyways, I really, really liked this. It was very original and unique and I very much enjoyed reading it. My favorite lines were:

    Together forever
    Till the day that we part
    Sweet dreams my darling
    You are safe in my heart

    Sorry to sound repetitive, but this piece is so beautiful. Great job. Feel free to comment on my writes.
    ~*~Brittany~*~


  • Never Fall in Love
    May 28, 2006
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    thanx, not only from me but also darkend skies
    thank u lots for ur comment!

  • Savage Pencil
    May 26, 2006
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    This is said so much, lot of depth here.


  • Never Fall in Love
    May 19, 2006
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    thanx alot
    and it is two different people
    lol , two people made this
    so yea ... will check ur poem

  • Never Fall in Love
    May 19, 2006
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    hey thanx alot for ur comment
    i'll check sum of ur poems
    and yea thats true
    just live and love
    no dissapointments
    thanx ♥


  • May 11, 2006
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    Great poem. I honestly don't see how people can go on blind dates. I would be to scared that my date would rape me, lesbians can be raped. I don't know. Great poem. I hope that you will continue writing just as I have, and that you have an absolutely, positively, wonderful, outstanding day!!!


  • May 11, 2006
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    Great peom. I honestly don't see how people can go on blind dates. I would be to scared that my date would rape me, lesbians can be raped. I don't know. Great poem. I hope that you will continue writing just as I have, and that you have an absolutely, positively, wonderful, outstanding day!!!


  • DarkWithTeardrops
    May 10, 2006
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    at first i gots a little bit confused until i noticed the little lines and such at the beginning of some stanzas and then it clicked what was going on, this just inspired me, although not to write about love, im think more along the lines of a transgender point of view.. im going to see what i can come up with.. thanks for sharing..
    =) ~toni~


  • EternitysLastWish
    May 8, 2006
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    Beautiful. A true piece of art. Wondefully written and flows like a river! Also I like the way you've made it like there's two different people talking to the reader.

    Keep up the good work!

    Jess

  • lil-ole-me
    May 7, 2006
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    it's a unique collaboration - and after reading your comments it is possible to love before seeing each other, and then to meet and care and want each other even more... if it works for you, fly with it. take love as it comes and ride the wind. don't look for disappointment, just live and love. and see what comes around.

  • Never Fall in Love
    May 4, 2006
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    yay. thanx for the comment
    yea, but in the blind date, even though we never saw each other before, we talked before
    so we pretty much know how they rly are right? and by the way, looks dont matter ^_^
    thanx for the comment ♥
    Edited on May 04, 1:29 p.m. because ''.

  • FindingFate
    May 4, 2006
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    It was unique and different. I like it but man to get married on a blind date is brave. Ty for sharing.

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