War is peace and peace is war
More surplus into destruction pour
To defend against your victory
Stagnate, your affinity
Anarchy, swastika, freedom you brand
With a gloved, un-covered hand
To fill our minds with all un-truths
Question ourselves, but believe in you
While at most you seem belligerant
Your plot is more magnificent
You must breed hate efficiently
To keep us smiling indefinitely
Author notes
Re-reading 1984, I just had to do this one. Unfortunately, by making no sense this makes perfect sense. Does it still fit the contest? I guess really what I was trying to represent with this was the society portrayed in orwell's 1984 as being a complete, nonsensical paradox only upstanding by it's ability to sustain these un-truths. Wow, I didn't mean to make so much sense, I swear! The words from the contest were victory, swastika, and belligerant "bloolooloo"
Written April 27th, 2006
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Very Nice
I like this piece. Although, I thought Orwell was denouncing Communism? Its still a really good piece. -
This was a joy to read!!! I like someone that has the intellect to draw such a REAL picture and see through the smoke and mirrors. Excellent write and will looking into some more of your writes. Take care!
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the flow was a little tough for me, mostly because the grammatical inversions used to achieve rhyme in a number of the lines.
the first line, in a way, makes me think of "Bush logic"...which of course is anything but logical.
i've listened to 1984 as a radio program, though i haven't read the book. the radio program was really, really interesting. left me feeling hopeless about life for a few days, probably because i may have noticed a few parallels between the story and 'reality'. the details of the story are a bit vague to me now, but it was clearly about a brief attempt by two people to love one another honestly within the clutches of a very effectively run totalitarian state. the effectiveness was largely due to the presence of telepaths (thought police i think it was) and omnipresent television-type devices that made privacy impossible.
there are some parallels in this regard with an 80's tv show called... i think Max Headroom.
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So this isn't a poem aboput reality TV then? Im kinda disappointed!! A good call to arms - rally the comrades of poetry in the drill instruction of sergeant stanzas! Attention!!
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Heil, Hitler!
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Great
I think it fits the contest very well, although it did have a underlining meaning I thought that parts of it were still random enough to be part of the contest. A great piece of work. Thank you for posting online so that others could apperciate your artistic talent. Please keep writing.
From the artistic genious
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You did a great job on this! Actually I could have done without the author notes. Or a much more edited version of them which might inspire those have not visited Oceana and so forth to explore further as your write is a raging commercial for the book as it stands. Hope you do well in the contest and as always, Winston Smith takes it on the jaw. RC
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rhymed well but did not make sense keep on writng
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job accomplished.
Well done for making it not make sense and good luck....this was great...thanks for sharing with me.
Good Luck in the contest.
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This poem had a nice flow, however I was slightly confused as to what the message was that you attempted to portray here. Thanks for making me think.
Charlene
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Erm I don't particularly understand this.. But I do like the stanza:
Anarchy, swastika, freedom you brand
With a gloved, un-covered hand
To fill our minds with all un-truths
Question ourselves, but believe in you
Very well written, and definitely weird enough.
Well done for making it not make sense and good luck.
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No...this was great. I see the truth, but the words really don't hold much sense...so it's all good. I think my favorite part was this stanza:
Anarchy, swastika, freedom you brand
With a gloved, un-covered hand
To fill our minds with all un-truths
Question ourselves, but believe in you
The duality of society. *Shakes head* It's sickening. This was great. One problem, though: you forgot to put "bloolooloo" in your author comment box.
Thanks for the entry and good luck.
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