I thought about you last night
I couldn't get you out of my mind
Thoughts of you kept pouring in
It was so hard for me to find
The peace and joy that I felt
When you were here with me
I now feel so empty
You are so far from me
I reminisce the times we shared
All of the fun and laughter we had
Those times meant more to me than anything
Now I am alone and I feel so bad
Loneliness encircles my heart
It is tearing me into two
If only I could see you again
I would make it all up to you
My eyes often look for you
My heart is overflowing with tears
Inside I am dying
When I think about those past years
I'll never get over you
And the role you played in my life
But, now it's too late
And it cuts me like a knife
I wanted to spend the rest of my life with you
I wanted us to be a family
I wanted you to understand and see
That there is so much more deep inside of me
So much love that I have left to give
So many emotions that still exist
Somehow I will make you see
That I want you to be a part of this
All I am asking you for is another chance
All I want to do is make you smile
I would do anything to have you back
Even for just a little while
My world is shattered
Like a glass that just hit the floor
In my mind I see you all of the time
And I long to be wherever you are
I will always love you
You will always hold a place in my heart
Even though I know it will never be the same
Because we are so far apart
Author notes
Written April 27th, 2006
I understand what you are going through and I hope
that everything works out for you and your fiance.
It's a terrible thing when family gets in the way
of your relationship. Take care and thanks a lot
for holding this contest! Good luck to the both of you!
A contest entry
- Love :) by LeilaJayne.
600 points, ended June 27, 2008, 15 entries
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Honorable mention
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Friends, I appreciate your comments and review on this write. However, please do not add my name to your comments due to the contest rules. Thank you very much!
Comments
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this is a sad and beautiful poem that you wrote I felt so sad as I was reading this poem, the emotion was very strong. I like the last two stanzas the most. you have a wonderful talent for writing and I can see that all through this poem. excellent job on writing this one.
good luck in the contest.
kat
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Sentiments well expressed in these lines - so much emotion is found in the verses - we can feel the love and the heartbreak, the regret and the longing in the poem. Well written.
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Wow, that was beautiful, as most of your poems are, all of so far, really. Gosh, the emotion felt in that was just..wow, sad. I don't get to see my girl that often, for she lives six hours away, so I understand a little how you feel. Great poetry, can't wait to read more.
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Of course it is great and filled with beautiful emotion... YOU wrote it!!! I enjoyed it although I hope you are not still this sad. You seem to have a heart of gold through all of this writing of yours. I like you alot.
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wonderfully done
well , im saddened. This was just so ... you did it again, your writes are so wonderfully written. I wish it where me, cause I surely would be running back to you. Well never ould of left in the first place. Once again well done my friend. Love ya!
God Bless
Victoria -
Wow, this is so sad and so beautiful, were I the one you were writing this for, there's no way I could not give you another chance. Such beautiful and heartfelt words. You really tugged at my heart strings with this beautiful write.
Smoosh
~Sherry~
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Thank you very much True Sorrow for your comments and for taking the time to read this. It is deeply appreciated!
Allen0826 -
This poem is sooo sweet!! it's heartbreaking, too, though. But I love it. It reminds me of an old friend I had, back in England, whom I lost contact w/ when I came to America. It's very well-written, and it's flow is good.
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Awwwwwwwwwww
this just tears at your heart reading it...so filled with raw emotions if this is you and you are going through this, i feel for ya 
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very good
time does heal my friend and in time you will be able to look back and say "I remember" with a smile even if it may be a bittersweet memory it will still always be a part of your life, for what is life but a collection of memories and pictures in our minds to bring out and enjoy, a lovely if painfull write but that is what amkes it good , the fact that it has been written with feeling. -
Thank you for your comments, I appreciate it!
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Thank you so much for your comments! It is deeply appreciated!
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aww, this is such a cute poem! All emotion from the heart, you can hear it. You have a very beautiful way with words, it's really cool! Great work!
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BAD FEELINGS!
FROM SUKRIT
I KNOW YOU FEEL BAD JEREMY,NICE WRITE,GOOD JOB I HAD FUN GOOD LUCK FOR FORTHCOMING POEMS.
WARM REGARDS,
YOURS SINCERELY
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very well done
so full of emotion and perhaps a lost love. you capture that feeling ... nice flow to your poem ... to love one who is so far away is not easy as you sum it up in your last stanza even though the love is always there it will never be the same because love like a flower needs to be weeded and watered in order to grow... such beautiful words you have penned .. i did enjoy your poem...nice write. -
Freaking sweet man I know exactly how you feel i met my one and only but i guess it wasn't the right time because i am here and she lives in germany yeah well like you she is everything to me still and it's been 3 years since i've seen here hell it's been 1 year since we've spoke but i suppose everything happens for a reason anyways it's wonderfull man keep on writting thanx
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this is so sad
your words have shown how much you can miss someone. i like how you've left the "we are so far apart" open to the reader's imagination. far apart could be taken a few ways.
very nicely done
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Oh this is how I felt when someone I loved walked out of my life I can so relate to this.
You never truly get over it but time makes it easier to cope with.
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Good Writing
I think it's fair to say that probably most of us in life have experienced what your writing about and you have described the feelings so well.Although you've probably heard it a million times but Time Does Heal.Good luck to you my friend.Keep up the good work.Kenny -
this is a very beautiful write from you. thank you for sharing this with us here on the site. hope
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This isn't exactly what I would call great poetry, but it is sincere, and sometimes it's the sincere ones that have the greatest effect. Good luck with this girl! - oce
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good stuff
I know exacly how you feel. Love...true love can be great. But to lose that love is the hardest thing ever. You keep fighting the good fight. If you do that you will find inner peace. Good Read
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