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death to a simple soul

she cant believe the darkened pain
she's forced to comprehend
the lies you have told
the truth that you bend
slowly and slowly
she comprehends the sin
faster and faster
she's driven deeper in
she trys to slowly mend her heart
suspended by the flesh
she trys to sift the good from bad
the bad air from the fresh
she's soficating
the sweet truth you have twisted
she's broken in
the tears lying on her cheek glisten
in the safety of the dark she hides
dampened by the tears she has cried
a soul cut in two and left open wide
tourtured and fried
all this has been manafest
an innocent soul has died

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Written April 26th, 2006

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  • Nyouya
    September 8, 2006
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    Just to live is a burden that everyone feels. Some of us, like you and me, have felt it more than others. I like being able to relate to someone. I say that a lot, but I'm confident when I say that I can relate to you the most. I loved the last line...it really drove everything home. The entire poem, though, is also perfect.


  • blondone
    April 27, 2006
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    deep dark poetry Love it I can relate to this one you have done a great job on this one it's well written and full of emotions thanks for posting...


  • i miss you...
    April 27, 2006
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    Bravo

    I really liked this poem, Good job, It is very dark, and filled with emotion, Bravo


  • FreeSpiritedSoul
    April 27, 2006
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    i really enjoyed reading your poem because i could relate to it and i really understood the message you were trying to send out i think that you are very good at putting emotions into poem Luved the poem alot, there has been time when i have been down and felt like the world was on my shoulders. keep up the excerlant work and never let your talent die for it open the door to a whole new world.
    xxxFreeSpiritedSoulxxx


  • bloodlustgirl
    April 27, 2006
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    i loved it your an awesome writer


  • starwing
    April 27, 2006
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    we've all had moments that rocked our worlds like this... innocence is hard to hold onto..as is water... this was a good piece..could benefit from spellcheck though..suffocating, manifest... two glaring mistakes(i'm a spelling nazi, sorry )... and feel free to tell me when I've made them also... peace to you..shzoosy

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