This incantation begins with play
Melodies invoke a charmed display
Of hopes and dreams which blend
Into a spell of change transforming my day
Tunes arise and tunes descend
My mind magical muses mend
Concealing all with an ethereal layer
Enchanting lyrics soar through the air
Them whirling ‘round, I levitate
The beat goes on banishing care
Vanishing worries, clearing my slate
With magical wand next song's spell activate
Author notes
I think we all can relate to the power music can have. I used an AABABB rhyme scheme.
A contest entry
- Be Original, more points to come by katie-jo.
700 points, ended March 15, 2008, 23 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Your Best Prewrite by Not-The-Sun.
850 points, ended August 8, 53 entries
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What did you think
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adorable poem. the last three lines are something we can call relate to. The last line in particular is terrific. I appreciate the effort you put into this rhyme scheme. The rhyme and flow work very well together for this magical creation. Thank you for entering.
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A nice poem that you have written here.
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I love music, it is to be used for inner healing, for sharing, and honoring our Father in Heaven so I see music as not just magic but a cure. Well written. Blessings.
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yay! somebody actualy put i hate feet!
anyways back to your poem! i love the fact that it is about music, music is my life and without it i would be dead. it is such an earth shattering experience to be able to listen and move with the music as we please.
constructive critism is placed below:
your rhyme seems misplaced, i thought i got the rhythm to it, then it change. rhyming poems is a very hard thing to do, it seems to me like the rhyme was forced, i love the poem, and all i would suggest is that you fix your rhyme, because the rest of it is completely beutiful, and amazingly true -
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fun write
nice and light. great way to relate the effects of good music.
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Lovely. Definitely on my finalists list.
Thank you for entering and all the best in the contest.
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Hi there,
Oh Lovely Piece
It’s always nice to find us musing suddenly getting a spark from nowhere. Our dreams, inspiration, thoughts, or continuous meditation over anything would give us a good start. I’m happy that you have come out such a nice poem that talks about where springing of Music from.
Very well written.
Thanks for sharing – Love – Kiddy
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so music is the vehicle of dreams i believe that also...i wonder what we would do without it!I LIKED IT!
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i like music so this was definitely interesting
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Wow. I like it. Ive been trying to write a poem about music but i just could find the right words. And clearly you have.I enjoyed every thing i read. I hope mine will ba as successfull as yours. Anway great right and keep it up.
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haha couldnt have thought of better words for a poem about music...deffinetly got the reader into a moos of tunes!!!!
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I really like this, I think that you could expand this and make it longer, I think that you have a great start, and I really like this because it has great flow.
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Good feeling to it.
Thank you for your entry,
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wow...this is so captivating...a combination of magic and music is so perfect...one proof is this beautiful poem of yours...you really turn the music on!!!
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A delicate blend of music and poetry..
Very nice indeed..
Best wishes with this entry..
Peace
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I like the amount of detil contained within a relatively short piece of writing. It has a great flow and rhyme which I feel adds to the overall atmosphere of the piece. Really well crafdted pice. Thank you for taking the time to enter my contest and good luck.
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this was very onteresing. this reminds me of a friend who plays an insturment. i liked how short yet discriptive it was. the was very nicely done. great wrire
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I thought this poem was so great! I absolutly love music, it's my life and for you to write a poem about it, is mindblowing for me. This poem was also great when you tied the whole magic thing into it, and yet, you made it fit so perfectly together. I love it!
Keep Writing
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Fab poem EmeraldDaze, I really liked this, a great poem for the magic of music, well done, keep it up.
good luck in the contest
best wishes as always
xElectricEyezx
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This piece was awesome, held a lot of imagery, and had a nice metaphor to the conductor's baton. I hope to be a music teacher and fell in love with this poem. The rhyming and flow were great! Keep up the great work!
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A lovely poem, it's very musically written with a good rhythm and tricks like alliteration,
"My mind magical muses mend"
I like this line but do you think it would be better as My mind's magical??? I don't know if i think this because i've missed the point of the line though.
Anyway, it's a really intelligent poem that sounds nice when i read it out loud, (i like that) and yeah, it's very musical. I'm a musician and i could almost hear the music in your words. Well done, you have a great talent,
Mim
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music will soothe the savage beast eh?.... this was a good write... keep up the good inks...peace and harmony....shzoosy
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Oh, I really love poems about music. The notes are heards through the beat of your words, a beautiful poem.
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