i see your face
within my mind
the eyes i loved
with all my life
your smile..
the dimples that i kissed
the words of bliss..
you whispered
i see us touching
in the dark
two lovers lost..
far within their hearts
and angry memories
the stubborn words
you said.. to me
and how we laughed
and loved and died
the empty feelings
left inside
my dreams..
were all encased in you
you were my life..
you were all i knew
i see you standing in the door
i should have said the words
and now you`re lost to me
my sweetest memory
if i should live a thousand years
you will always be.. within me
your smile
the dimples that i kissed
the words of bliss
you whispered
if i could live my life again
i wouldn’t change a thing
for all the words
and all the pain..
my time with you
were my greatest days
to touch you now
hold you in the night
to have you here
within my life
i would give my soul away
to spend another day
with you...
just ONE moment..
loving you
again
by Lee L.
Author notes
All of us have left behind a love we have lost and cannot forget. To this day I have pain for her. She was my dream.. and I live forever with the thought of her.. in my mind.
Written April 26th, 2006
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Great write, this piece is very different, so I sound like a good commentor (if that's even a word). These words touch the soul, and I agree 100% with your auithor's comments, we do all love and lose someone, and we always compare everyone we fall in love with to them, almot unconsciously. It's amazing.
- Cait -
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I wonder.. what type of person writes such instrements of love
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"Just One Moment With You" is probally my Best Sad Poem.
I wrote this after the lose of her pounded me in the chest -
there is an etheral tone
to this poem that is quite sad.
any moment we have; we are blessed;
to share that moment with someone
whom we adore; we are in heaven.
lovely writing; very very sad to read.
lynn
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Thank you Vic, I will give thought to your advice, Rick
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I wouldnt ask you to give your soul for another day with me lol. for in our christain life we willbe reunited in the heavens lol. OK im getting carried away haha. Dont ever sell your soul for a woman my dearest for when you allpart as christians you will meet on the glory side of heaven and reunite dtill in eachothers love. So live happy live faithfully, and that one moment will never end.
love ya
Vsutton -
Very lovely.
Aren't these the loves we live for..the ones that we can't shake or the ones that refuse to shake us...This love poem is wonderful. I enjoy love poems that speak of longevity, not new love, unless it's revisited really..I like the ones (like this) that speak of hauntedness, wear...pliable strength. Real love, hangs around..even when you don't want it to..even when it's painful, although, its moments of perfection and bliss are those that speak in the strangest hours. This poem was very evocative, powerful and wise.
Lovely.
Sedie -
Excellent
Beautifully written and very romantic
. Best of luck to you in the contest.
Cheers
Terry -
What a lucky soul to have a love like this. You are a blessing Rick and I ty for the pleasure.
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you have made it to the final rounds of this contest. i will be making more cuts tomorrow afternoon but i will let you know if you made it further
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Wonderful piece filled with love and emotion. Loved the feel and flow. Great peice of descriptive writing. Keep your pen forever flowing! Bunny
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your feelings are very deep in this peace, wonderful poem, with much love!!!
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Brilliant! This is so beautiful and I think most people can relate in a way..i know i can. You are a talented poet. Keep writing with such emotion and passion!
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anguish in your lost, one that you share with us all. recognision of your loss, that feeling.
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Great poem, it is very deep and shows a lot of feeling, and you did a great job of expressing the way that you feel, keep up the good work
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Lonely, As much a we loved each other, we fought like little children, we were toooo young to be unselfish. Thank you for your comments, Rick
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Wow this was really impressive. You hear the expression "It's better to have loved and lost than to have never loved at all", yet you hear everyone complain about how after a break up they never wanted to be with that person. Sounds like you just sort of accepted the truth and moved on which is awesome. I think everyone has that one person that they're always going to love in one way or another. You penned an awesome poem good luck in the contest!
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Di, thank you very much for your comments, as you see I changed somthings as you sugested. I too debated on EYES in caps, so you changed my thinking. I know i should be in caps, but in my love poems, I am not important, SHE is everything, and for that reason, I am just i . Thank you again, Rick
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Hi, when you wan't to write you are lost to me we write, "you're" lost to me not "your" lost, lol, seeing this is a very important comp with a lot of points at stake perhaps you might like to change it,lol, lovely lovely poem,by the way the word "I" should always be in cap, for example I will go, I love you, etc, the use of caps for example with eyes etc is not nessesary as the poem is strong enough without them,as I said a lovely poem so well worth making sure it is perfect on the grammar,all the best in the comp, a big hug Di
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such a beautiful write . . . very moving words that are like magic. well done - CJM
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Thank you for taking the time to write me on this. You may like "Forever and a Day" or "Fond Dispair" I will read you work also. The best to you, Rick
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Awesome
This is an excellent piece. The flow is very nice, and made it fun to read. I especially like the part:
for all the words
and all the pain..
my time with you
were my greatest days
to touch you now
hold you in the night
to have you here
within my life
All in all this is a very well written poem. Thanks for sharing. Keep writing. I can't wait to read more. Charlene
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Even now, when I read it, I can still feel the ache from her absence. This has been so many years now, but she was sooooo deep in me, I can not forget her even now. Thank you for your kind words, Rick
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Absolutly beautiful. How perfectly you conveyed your message here. I am heading to check out other of your writes. Ty for sharing your talent.
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beautiful, sad yet great.
This was simply amazing. Although your rhymes were simple, they still had a great meaning to them and this was a great poem. You showed great pain in this piece and as I read each line I could tell that you still have feelings for this girl and I really enjoyed this poem. Best piece I've read all week. Amazing job, well done. You deserve an applause.
♥
whitney. -
Wonderful!
Yes I understand perfectly how you feel in this poem.
I still remember that kiss, and the perfume.As though it were only yesterday!
But it was 30 years ago now. Oh how I wish I could turn back time. For the things we truly should grasp and keep a hold of! We never seem to realise at the time.
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Thank you again Linda. When I write, I focus on the feeling and just push the words to paper, and worry later about the rythem and rhyme. This woman, I loved more than I could say here. I was lost in her. Lost.... and so it was for a while. Thank you Linda, Rick
PS Nice Face -
wow this was really good! My name is Mandi by the way! Just thought i'd leave ya a comment
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Wow. I haven't much to say except: Fantastic write! You did a fabulous job and thank you for your comment on "Barbed Path"
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Rick,
You are very welcome.
I like the way it reads now that you changed it even more.
You are very talented and from what I see you have a great heart and much compassion in you, a rarity in men these days.
All my best,
~Sherry~
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Thank you so much for your kind words, and I realy did mean to say " you will always be within me" She is not "with me" she is gone, so now she is "in me" and that is just a matter of my style and meaning. Thank you for feeling the words, that is the greatest complement I can recieve, Rick
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This is absolutely devastatingly beautiful.
I still remember the one I loved like no other and lost.
I'd give all I have to give and then some to be back in his arms. This poem took me there again. Thank you for that. You really touched my heart this morning.
Smoosh
~Sherry~
P.S. Oh BTW, i noticed one small error, where you say:
'if i should live a thousand years
you always be within me'
Did you mean to say - you'll always be with me?
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Your poem hits the right spot just as u intended, babe. Your words have reached so many people, and touched their hearts.
There is always someone special to us, and we can't let go.
Bravo!
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Linda, thank you for your kind words. Sometimes, a person will come to us and without knowing, they are our wounderous match.
Just by site, by touch, they illuminate us inside, turn us on.
If, this happens in our youth, we are usually doomed, and they are lost to us. To this day, I still do not know WHY, I was so drawen to her, but I was and I am. I think it may be, because she loved me like no other. I am, to this day, still studing the mistery of a womens face, and wonderfull ways. Your power as a woman, makes "Little Boys", of us all. Can you tell I loved her?
Rick -
Beautiful, beautiful poem...I can feel the emotion, and longing in your words. Seldom do I read unique and touching love poems that reach out and grab you, but this is one of them...
Lynda
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Thank you again for your kind comment. I cried like a fool as I made the words.
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Dawn..I have read all that you have written. I believe you are ONE that can be with me in this feeling and KNOW what has been said.
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Wow!!!! It's beautiful!!!! I know this feeling. A person never forgets that one special person that the love so incredibly!!!! Much luck in the contest, this is an awesome piece!!!!
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Lee--if you had any clue as to how this just hit me, i think you would pass out. two years, one month, and twenty four days ago, terrence lee bender, the man i love with more than i knew i could love, jumped in front of a train. i have lived with these same thoughts for him every since. it is just this morning that i realized i have to let go. i was outside talking to God about this and then i came in here to your entry. you really made me shiver. he jumped on the way to go tell a girl how much he loved her and wanted to be with her no matter what. he did not know that at the same time, i was leaving to go find him. so, that is why this hit me this way. it is a good write and it goes so well with your writing name. thank you for the entry into this contest and i wish you the best of luck. viyanna
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