The walk,
hand-in-hand
along the silky sand,
completely oblivious
to the chaotic reality
surrounding them.
Two innocent minds,
not yet corrupted by
society's egregious laws
and idiosyncrasies...
only focused on
the hypnotizing beauty
before them.
But slowly,
day after day...
wave upon wave,
their innocence
will be lost,
and they will eventually
be unwillingly...
unknowingly,
transformed into
adults,
and tossed into
complete and utter chaos,
where innocence
is just a rippled memory.
Author notes
There is a picture that goes along with this poem, but I have yet to get it on here. It is a black and white picture of my two beautiful baby girls walking hand-in-hand toward the ocean. This will probably be my last poem here on AP.
Written April 26th, 2006
#4
A contest entry
- Options for everyone! (prewrites also allowed) by anoetic poet.
450 points, ended April 25, 2007, 28 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Wow! That must be a beautiful picture indeed! Lovely picture you have painted here with words too.... Thanks for the entry and good luck!
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Thanks for commenting. Still haven't completely made up my mind as to whether I am leaving or not, but it will be quite a while before I post anymore poems. Thanks, again!
--Animepoetess
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Such a shame about being the last poem, because i really enjoyed your imagery and scheme of your poem. Alot of my writing is on this topic of growing up and out of innocence, and I understand it completely. It's like you look back at what you were, and see what you are and the horrifying thing is that there's no way that you could go back...Great job on this poem man, and I hope that you at least stick around for a little while so I can look at the rwest of your stuff...take care and have a great one.
Seth -
It must be a crime for such Innocence to be lost over time. I liked your poem very much and I can relate to it in so many ways. I still look back from time to time and enjoy those precious memories, but over time somehow those wonderful times slowly got lost in the caos of the world. Why... no one really knows.. but I still look back and enjoy those memories. Maybe they are not really lost after all.
I was also saddened to hear about you leaving AP. I hope that you will return as you are a very gifted poet and possess such a sweet soul. If you ever need to talk let me know.
Take care and please be happy
Ed
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thanks for the comment
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A brilliant write!
This is the product of a beautiful mind. It is easily one of the best poems on this site... written from the heart, about the two loves in your life. The innocence you spoke of here, is a precious thing... often lost when we become adults. I guess it's just a sad fact of life, but with you in their lives... I'm sure they will turn out just fine. Hopefully, you won't let this site discourage you, and continue to share such beautiful poems with the world.
I love you!
Prince
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ummm this is beautiful....animae.....love when we are young...is so precious....we will never realize it till we see it when we are older....yet still.....you see truth before the horizons......dawning new days to come....I hope this is not your last poem..girlie......I will only say......hope your recess wont be long.....I will miss you all the same.....hugs for you....
and 
....just because....thank you for making me a fave on your list.....its an honor...you gave to me....
Luv
Mal -
You are so wrong for that...lol
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Oh by the way, 'Nice Poem'
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Now what kind of comment was that...I expected something more than "nice poem"...lol, I hate that crap...anyhow..thanks for the comment!
--Animepoetess
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This is beautiful, I love the flow, images, and the poem as a whole. Great work, your frined Jc
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