O pray come early
my dear spring.
Hearts yearn to rejoice
in what you bring.
The scented gardens
of zest and joy,
where the lover
courts a maiden coy.
Branches arch and bend
laden with ample fruit.
Nightingale sings in chorus
with the luring flute.
Tango dancing kites
fill the ballroom of the sky,
and children swim merrily
in the meadow's liquid eye.
Each kiss is drenched
in Cupid's fine wine.
Passionate lovers entwine
and clasp like vine.
The breeze dresses elegantly
in scents of alluring lavender.
Dew gently kisses the rose,
with pearly drops of nectar.
Pray come early
this year O! spring,
there are dances to dance
and songs to sing.
A nocturnal symphony
celebrates the night,
on a fidgety lake
drifts a drunken moonlight.
Twinkling beacons lend generously
their magical 'stardust sprinkles'.
Love casts a spell on aging hearts,
defying the count of wrinkles.
Sweetness fills
each fruit's chest.
Love dwells eager
in the lover's breast.
Dream weds desire,
and in hope's palanquin
bears her
to an eager heart within.
So come O gentle dreamer,
join this merry convoy.
This spring within is eternal
and everlasting is its joy!
Author notes
Hapiness is a state of mind,oblivious to the surroundings we can achieve bliss within
Written April 26th, 2006
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First- you warmed my heart because of the picture of the flower is a plumeria- my favorite flower ever! (you prob know but for those who don't- it smells so exotic and soothing as well as being lovely- it's the flower hawaiians use to make leis)
Second- I loved how you described the night in spring- twas lovely to read. Good job- thanks for entering this in the contest! -
Your welcome
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thank you for the encouragement Clovis!
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I am glad you liked it,At 17 you are very much a thing of the future.Luck and warm wishes!
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My dear lord this is... well... beautiful. It's amazing. It's fantastic. I loved your rhymes and your words. They were so well placed, well said, well read.
A nocturnal symphony
celebrates the night,
on a fidgety lake
drifts a drunken moonlight.
This part jumped from the page at me, filled with personification ready to strangle me. I love it!
Good luck in the contest.
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forgive me for the belated response,kindaa caught up in work and family issues.Thank you so much,I will strive to live up to the expectations.
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dear inder,
thank you so much for participating in my pay-it-forward-contest. I enjoyed your offering of the gifts of the eternal spring within very much, and it made my heart smile and sing. the part that resonates the most with my present moment mood and sensitivity is : Sweetness fills each fruit's chest. it has a particular effect on me right now ...
I realy like the mystical tone in your poem, and will certainly like to discover more of your inspired and inspiring work.
many blessings,
marion
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Most wonderful and sincere remark.I am pleased to hear it touched you and you enjoyed the piece.Thank you very much for the most wonderful encouraging words.
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Excellent.
The serene throughout the poem is magnificent as it sounded like a professional write.
I have certainly drunken by all of your stanzas and words used. As though this is the poem, I have forged to look forward to read on and on…You have touched my heart, and had made me wish it was spring again. It made me smile.
The most happiest thing about it is that, there were no predictable into what goes after the next. It made it, itself an original write, and made it a joy to read. The poem was also awesomely sweet, Oh such graceful imagery. I wish I could write something like this…Although I am still learning…
This is my overall of this poem...
This is pure and sweet, with the elegance of Spring spread by words. It filled me with compassion and goodness that swept me off me feet. I see it now with the future is bright and beautiful. You spread out within my night of something to dream about during the daylight. I hope one day I find someone new, who writes something different to something we might of knew. I see someone who as talent, as it’s you.
I hope you like reading this comment, as I have pleasure in reading your poem.
Take care!
An open field of roses from me…(^.^)
~ Reisha
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"in hope's palanquin bears her to an eager heart within." A fortuitous penning, inder...lovely verbiage, graceful imagery, sweet sentiments of Spring...well done, Poet... Wanda
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Wonderful imagery,great use of metaphors!--fair
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thanks for entering!
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a serenade to spring. Like it I do. Much peace and the warmth of sun, I pray for you.
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This is a beautiful springtime poem! I do love Spring so very much, it's so wonderful when it finally arrives nad the freezing grey of winter is finished until after fall once again. The imagery and the flow in your poem is great, like in this stanza:
"Branches arch and bend
laden with ample fruit.
The nightingale sings in chorus
with the luring flute."
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Inder, charming words depicting springs whiff…. This is one of your best rhymed poem I’ve read so far… well done Inder…. I agree, the eternal happiness lies within and the rest are manufactured… please count me in for the convoy
mina
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Thank you genie,for the heart warming comment.It is so nice of you to have stopped by and read so many of my poems.will try and catch up over the week end
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I think this is the first rhyming poem by you that I've read and what a joy it was. It has a lovely singing quality about it...a song that comes from deep within. I love how this poem speaks of spring as a season, but also as an inner joy and re-awakening. I especially loved the line in the meadow's liquid eye - beautiful imagery and what a wonderful metaphor. I must congratulate you on the very original rhyme - nothing predictable about it - bravo, poet! Very lovely poem, my friend - was a joy to read.
~ Nicolette
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This is a precious and beautiful write.
I love nature and all it's brilliant beauty and power (even when that power is vicious it is still awe consuming).
I think this is a rare write by you with rhyme You do both well, free verse and rhyme. You've an all around magical muse I think. Excellent writing. s ~genie~
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"lonely and free" a sigh is a perfect gift to receive for a poem.If it can evoke that then the poem's worth the while.
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A fantastic prayer to the gods of spring. Wonderful Inder made my heart smile and my soul sigh xxxxxx
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BRILLIANT!
FROM SUKRIT
I LOVE IT!I LOVE THIS PIECE,I LIKE THE FLOW-LANGUAGE-THEME AND IT SURPASSED YOU!GOOD JOB!
WARM REGARDS
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well thank you for the fragrant rose KittyBlue.the only clue to writing poetry is deep within your heart.Just dive within and you are sure to discover beautiful jewels.
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Like a spring day, this poem. Lovely. I must learn to write this kind of poem. How does one learn to do this? Very fine write!
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I am so glad you found it vivid and it brought forth some pleasing images.The kind words and encouragement is most appreciated
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yay!
What a bright and beautifully worded piece. I can really feel spring through this. It just pops off the page! Very Very well done! -
San-d i just glanced at your page and I am flattered to be encouraged with such warm words by someone like you.Will certainly read your works soon.Once again this was a much needed encouragement thank you.
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This is absolutely beautiful. Your imagery is painted in a way that makes all us readers see it very vividly...This is written in such a poetic form. Your choice of words makes it for a superb piece of art.. Wonderfully done and fine tuned. Great work!!! I applaud you on this one.
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your way >> Sandy *rose San-d
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Thank you so much Aura,I had kind of departed from this favourite style of mine off late and needed this sort of encouragement to bring me back.
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wow! Inder you have surpassed yourself too now this piece is truly amazing -I have enjoyed the flow -the theme- the language - the choice of words- all of them combined to produce a par excellance
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