Drawn to thy beauty, grace rains down;
I choose this drowning than a drought –
Where ten thousand are called mine own;
Yet, deny thee and live without.
Skilled not enough to understand;
Words unheard, find their voice through thee;
As I reach out then find thy hand;
I see light take darkness from me.
Chaos knits together unity:
Thoughts run free, once captive in chains;
Cleansed from fear in thy purity;
Would I leave, canceling such gains?
Author notes
Written April 25th, 2006
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Thanks mucho mucho mucho for the entry!!
Angie
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Ok, the only thing I've seen here that doesn't comply to my rules is: down-own... not technically a perfect rhyme. Other than that, flow is good, punctuation is great, knowledge of english language is great, rhythm is good. All in all, quite a decent write! Good luck!
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I see I've commented on this before
Good use of archaic words and the rhyming was good too.Just curious why you alternated the lines from this side to the other.Thanks for entering and best of luck 
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You asked why I indented the second and fourth lines ... I have seen classical poetry printed in the same manner and thought it had an appeal all its own .. keep in touchLarry
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You chose your words well.Thanks for entering and best of luck
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I enjoyed the olde world feel of this piece This is not always shown off to its best But you have managed to do so with this write Good luck in the contest
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Janet, thank you for such a cool review ... maybe I should have thrown some pixie dust between the lines
Larry
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Darling
Like a Renaissanc painting
such love is awaiting
trapped in eternal reverie
two hands touching gingerly.
Smoosh
Janet -
such beautiful words, thank u for entering this
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Josephine, I am honored to participate in your contest .. and I hope I win
Larry
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Thank You Smithlarryw for your most beautiful entry, Your words are just lovely, Josephine xoxo
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