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juan's lamentation

Blinding! lights of summer
Shimmering over waves of cloudless sea
Never cease enchanting
Intensifying, escalating, ascending...
The lifeless color of indecent rave

Come lay your muscled, yet dried out arms
Aching turbulent embrace
Caress the weary and limp cadaver
Of somnolent souls still finding
Wanting respite and serene abode

Never would it be easy
To calm the restless and chaos
Of parched souls and meager cry
"PENNY or FOOD or FLESH to LIVE"
All day long echo their excruciating cries

Unfortunate when they come to realize
Everything has gone
And nothing survive
Still screaming, still wanting:
"PENNY or FOOD or FLESH to LIVE"

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Written April 24th, 2006

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  • jxd gap
    August 24, 2008
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    the comments are worth grinding!!
    thanks.


  • Amunet Wolfbane Moderators member
    April 26, 2006
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    Personally I really dig this piece. The imagery is solid and I love the flow of it. GREAT piece


  • starwing
    April 25, 2006
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    interesting..liked the flow and rythm...jury's still out about conyent...but very descriptive..and content doesn't matter..it's YOUR poetry...peace to you..shzoosy


  • Blossom Fairy
    April 24, 2006
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    I'm privileged to be the first person to comment on this totally rad poem! Dang it is something to read and blink at! Sounds like zombies on the march! I love it! Thanks for posting it!