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Silver Fern

As I walk bare footed through the silver fern
The soft brisels tickel my toes
Zippitydoda I start to sing
Forgeting my troubles forgetting my lows

The song comes alive
And I see blue birds fly
The birds lift me up
Into the sky so high

I know its a dream
But I can't help but smile
My heart is now happy and
It's been a long while

Author notes

To Zippitydoda the Kewi in England From Emotions of an American Man

Written April 23rd, 2006

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  • wolfpup
    September 4, 2006
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    A pleasant piece. Thanks and good luck in the competition.


  • Cherokee
    June 29, 2006
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    I think Cupcrazy meant "It's been a long while." because along is different than a long. But I think you know that and just made a typo. Very sweet, upbeat poem.


  • JeannieD Hunter gold member
    June 29, 2006
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    Great write. I go barefoot
    all the time. Mom used
    to fuss at me all the
    time. But I hate shoes.
    Great write. Very
    enjoyable read.
    Thank you for sharing.

    Jeannie D Hunter

  • in-the-twilight
    June 29, 2006
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    This is great... life is an adventure that should be enjoyed because it only happens once... I love this!!!!!!! You put a lot of imagery into this write... and I like that in a poem... Rock On!!!!!!!
    xoxo
    Meg

  • StormyEyes
    June 29, 2006
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    Super work, this reminds me of the feeling you get when you remember to not be an adult and the world around you seems like an adventure rather than a setting. Really enjoyed reading this, thanks for sharing.
    Blessings,
    StormyEyes


  • Hellsfire02
    June 20, 2006
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    Short but sweet. I love it. Thankyou so much for sharing, the imagery in this piece was just wonderful. Keep writing!!

    ~marie lee
    xxx


  • Devil Inside Me
    June 18, 2006
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    That was a wonderful write, I found it an excellent poem and I was compelled to read it from the start all the way to the finish. It had a magnificent flow of words everything was placed in the right spot and that’s what made it a pleasant read.

    I liked this part of the poem:
    "I know its a dream
    but I can't help but smile
    my heart is now happy and
    it's been along while"
    That's a happy ending.

    Keep it up.

    Thanks for the wonderful poem to read.


  • wishintreeUK
    May 5, 2006
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    Very upbuilding and refreshing!

    A refreshing, bouncy poem... my imagination let fly when I began reading... barefoot, running through a glade, threaded fingers of sunlight shining through a canopy of green above my head, branches of old Oak creaking as they sway in a gentle breeze.

    Beautiful poem, thoroughly did enjoy reading it.

    ~Katie~


  • Cupcrazy gold member
    May 4, 2006
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    Very nicely written, the last line though I think should be "it's been a lone while", fore "It" chops of the flow of the last line bluntly. Other that that, excellent piece. Keep your pen forever flowing Bunny

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