in the purity of dreams
angels sang sweet lullabies
to hush away a child’s cries
absolving shame
inside the heavens of escape
while a demon fought and fed and raped
a child’s voice called out a name
prayers ringing strong and true
a spirit soared to a higher plane
embraced the light then returned again
upon return was devoid of pain
angels sang of resurrection
in the harshness of reality
the devil’s own vowed fealty
to ravage innocence most savagely
and without regret
a man made a vow
of his own accord
(asking forgiveness from his Lord)
to trade his soul in bitter barter
then with a blade whet with fatherly spite
he slay the monster of the night
and rid the world of it’s infection
justice led him to his cell
he braced himself for forthcoming hell
... in resignation
but before the cold light of day could break
before the condemned man was roused or waked
a small angel appeared at his location
and watched as he lay sleeping
then without further ado
and before the devil got his due
rescued his soul for safekeeping
Author notes
Written April 23rd, 2006
A contest entry
- Angels by burdened.
300 points, ended May 28, 2006, 17 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Child Abuse Awareness. by Lord Merlynn.
750 points, ended January 3, 2007, 24 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Angels [&&] The Afterlife by Death of the Author.
1200 points, ended May 19, 2007, 40 entries
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• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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great write keep up the awesome work. i wish you the best of luck in my contest.
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Very good write, I like the devil metaphor used to describe a child molestor...good luck and take care x
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No problem
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this is a wonderful write, with lovely thoughts running through it, well done and thanks for netering, good luck in my ontest and God Bless your soul for safekeeping. X
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WOW! this is such a wonderful piece with a lot to say! I think Protee summed it up very nicely!
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Wow, this is very good. You should be proud of it, cuz it's just such a perfect use of language. And it's very gothic, but in a good way. Good look in the contest.
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awesome!
to be honest, when i first started reading this poem, i wanted to stop and just go to another page. i am soo glad i did not as this was a fantastic poem...we all have problems in our life and eventually, we must face them. the man dealt with his in the only way he saw fit and hoped for the best...this was a wonderful peice and i just loved it. the flow was a bit odd yet very good at the same time...you did a great job on this and it came out amazing. keep up the great work...
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gothchyld, thank you for your words of encouragement!
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Excellent piece with intense dark imagery, I love it. Good luck in your contest!
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debsdelight,. thank you! It pleases me you understood what I was trying to express!
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What a finale
The angel rescued his soul before the demons could take him. A lovely dark poem that ended in hope and faith in our lord Thank-you so much for sharing and best of luck in my contest. God Bless. Debs x 
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creating realism, thanks for reading and for making a comment.
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there's not much i can say about this that other people haven't all ready said. i enjoyed reading it and i'm glad i clicked on it. keep on writing...
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trista, thank you for your thoughtful comments...most appreciated!
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Ahhhh, you have made me question so many things with this poem. Very powerful indeed. It seems to me the father feels some remorse, not that he killed his daughter's murderer, but that he committed such a sin in general. I am not sure I believe anyone else can save our soul, even an angel; that, to me, is between each of us and God. But, it is a very interesting concept. Wonderful work, I will be thinking about this for a very long time.
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allforlove123, thank you for reading and commenting, I really appreciate it.
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Thursday just about summed it up. It was very original and flowed and well...just plain good. Thanks for sharing it.
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Thursdaylover, thank you so much for the wonderful comment!
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touching
My lord. This poem brought me to tears. So sad but hope prevailing at the end. How this mans soul was saved by the very child who had experianced his torment. To me thats saying something to mankind.If this child could forgive this man, then we should be able to forgive one another on a day to day bases, on things that dont amount up to anything in the long run.Thank you for sharing this wondeful piece. -
DreameeDarlin2U, thank you so much for readiong and commenting. I actually intended this to be about a father who slayed the molester/murderer and thereby committed a mortal sin but his daughter, now an angel, salvaged his soul. However, I always allow the reader to have their own interpretations. That is the beauty of poetry...each person sees it slightly differently!
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I must agree this was very well penned. Dark and sad, but with a sense of some kind of false hope? If I ask myself if I could forgive such a man, the answer is no. Perhaps my beliefs are too strong. I know they say God forgives everyone.....I just don't think I could. Amazing job on this.
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robert bolin, thank you for taking the time to read and comment. I really appreciated your thoughtful comment.
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This poem this brilliantly penned dark up roaring work of art left me to question one thing how can one be forgiven for the taking of a childs innocence and yet at the same time I guess I answered my own question if I can forgive a complete stranger for drinking and driving and killing the ones I loved than anybody can be forgiven thank you for allowing me to read and comment on your work..
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