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I hate you

I hate you
That’s all I have to say
You hurt me
Burned me
Made me feel so small
When its you who should
You should feel tattered and broken
Not enough strength to stand
You broke me
You dragged me
Until my final breath escaped
My hope I held onto
You did this
You should feel it too
Insignificant
Stupid
Helpless
And a fool
Why?
Why couldn’t you love me, as I loved you?

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Written April 23rd, 2006

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  • FlawedDestiny
    August 18, 2006
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    Hate is so easy to give into. It's really hard to fight. I could feel so much anger and pain as I read this that it almost gave me pause to read it. It was very good. Full of that hate that most of encounter many times in our lives. And that, is an unfortunate truth.
    ~*destiny*~

  • Just-a-drug
    August 18, 2006
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    Good

    I like this. You really put emotion into it. I can relate to the subject, or what I percieve it to be. Thank you for posting this, and keep it up!

  • Pile of Rocks
    April 23, 2006
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    Rightous Indignation!

    I like the force of this work, and it makes me glad to see there are still people out there who can feel in unified vision. As far as critical comments, I thought that lines 6 and 12 kind of broke up the rythem a little (at least in my mind...). You have a great piece that keeps its focus and absolutely burns. It would be perfect if you could get those two lines to form up with the rest of the notion.