What I remember
of our times in bed
is how your whispered voice
roamed my body,
how your words had hands that caressed,
how your fingertips
brushed the hair from my neck
making way for your lips,
how your breath tickled
the curve of my ear
raising goose-bumps on my skin.
I remember
how you made me believe
in your divinity
when you kissed the flesh
between my shoulder blades,
when your thighs pinned my hips,
when you turned my nipples
to soft hot wax
with your textured tongue,
how the fever of your muscles
slid in my hands
drenched in prayer oil.
I remember
after ecstasy fell like sudden rain
how the sun
seeped through the window,
its magic warmth touching our nakedness,
and how your scent
remained on my pillowcase
when morning came
and you were gone,
how I sensed your lingering presence
in the wrinkles of my sheets.
I remember our love
and its music lingers in my head
like the soft gentle tinkle
of wind chimes
singing a Latin tango.
Author notes
Written April 23rd, 2006
A contest entry
- Whatever You Wish Contest~ by poeticweaver.
300 points, ended April 23, 2006, 15 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
Comments
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wow sexy
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Outrageous!
You are a gifted poet. You should feature some of these or enter them in contests so others here can see your beautiful work and perhaps learn from you.
Cris
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Its funny what we remember....and what we forget.
Love the sensuality, the sexiness of the piece just gobbled me up
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I love this piece.
al -
Ah, there, you've done it again. Your poetry edges me toward a time warp of the past. So Evocative! So sensual! So visceral!
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I see my son has good taste in poetry, this was very well written, thanks for sharing!
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Woot! Woot! I won!
What a surprise! Thank you Timothy. I really wanted a trophy for this poem, and I truly appreciate it. You've restored my faith in AllPo contests!
Femme
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Justice was done in giving you the gold for this poem. Fabulous write, Femme! Sensual and sexy with class, and much originality in imagery. It does seem to strike a softer, gentler voice than what I'm accustomed to reading from you. Your ability to adjust and change styles is intriguing. Bravo for you, and bravo to Timothy for rewarding fabulous talent!
Amy
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Love it
Very tastefully done, with a lot of deeply felt passion and simplistic honesty. The love for the subject of the work pronounces itself in the lines, while the passion wait is revealed in image the words provoke. Very good. -
sensual , very sensual and i really liked
"I remember
how you made me believe
in your divinity"
also
"how the fever of your muscles
slid in my hands
drenched in prayer oil"
i imagine that love making is some way akin to a ritual or a means of worship ,hmm awe inspiring indeed!!! -
This is a brilliant poem! I love the imagery here, it's so sensually great! Well done! Good luck to you in the contest!
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Truly deserving of that first place. Subtle and soft sensuality ( a hard thing to achieve without going overboard with the same descriptive words over and over....but you managed it Congratulations
reenie
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good images
this is the best part of the poem
when you turned my nipples
to soft hot wax
with your textured tongue,
how the fever of your muscles
slid in my hands
drenched in prayer oil.
the image of nipples as wax and the prayer oil makes some good readin. i'd like to see the rest of the poem stand out like this--use language and images differently. so far the rest of the poem reads a bit like other love/sex poems i've read. ask yourself: how can i stand out? how can i write this so someone reads it and knows it was me and not someone else? -
Sexy
Sexy and ever so tasteful at the same time.
Very sensual and enjoyable.
Beautiful and captivating.
Excellent, I see you won gold for it as well,
Very well deserved..take a bow
Keep up the amazing work.
100/100 from me
Peace
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This is everything they already said and more. What a sensuous, sexy, captivating piece. I am a fan.
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excellent
A very good write of sensual love,I do not relate as i have never been deep in love before,best of luck in the contest,
brilliant poem from tracey -
power drama
very sensual, very dramatic. The words flowed like a love song. No wonder you won gold!
I loved it and would have this framed. -
wow! what a wonderful, soulful love poem. this is top notch writing, femme.
congratulations on winning the gold. you certainly deserved it.
your imagery is magnificent, your feelings palpable.
I'm really impressed with this one.
~travis
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Well, there ya go - some 40 entries and you swept in and took the gold. Congratulations, girl!
And no surprise, with this gentle gem of a poem. A pleasure to read.
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A very well penned entry, thank you for your time, all the best in the contest, and future write, peace..Timothy
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SENSATIONAL
BRILLIANT CHOICE OF WORDS AND SMELL LOVE, PASSION AND SENSUALITY
I LOVE IT -
Whoa.
That's really so beautifully said, truly told. I enjoyed the way you expressed it, how you found the words to convey it... just wonderful art, from end to end. Thank you for sharing it. -
beautiful-
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"I remember
after ecstasy fell like sudden rain
how the sun
seeped through the window,
its magic warmth touching our nakedness,
and how your scent
remained on my pillowcase
when morning came
and you were gone,
how I sensed your lingering presence
in the wrinkles of my sheets."
here you have visuals, textures, smells...you make full use of the senses...to weave a rich and gorgeous texture...
'after ecstasy fell like sudden rain' this is a line to quote and remember....beautiful!!!
a well-penned poem by an obviously talented author. this is being book-marked...
sorry, im out of applauses....but this is certainly worthy of one
~tryst
Edited on Apr 23, 5:03 p.m. because ''. -
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Very nice, great pictures, Rick -
wow, fantastic write, the way you placed the inner feelings and turn them into pure beauty, great write my friend very well done x
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Dear poet, this is well written with wonderful descriptiveness and flows well.It is tender,sensual and tasteful.I enjoyed reading it.It allowed the reader to feel the depth of emotion.Well done indeed,good luck in the contest,love and light,Yvette
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well written
your decriptions are so real yet so full of longings.I find this one original.I loved this one it was really beautiful a pleasure to read. Thanks for sharing your talent.
Victoria -
Good
Very good write, even though it is about love, I find this one original. I can feel that it's written from the heart.
Keep it up
Greetz -
mmmmm this was utterly delicious - guess its something you could never forget - your decriptions are so real yet so full of longings - I sense a loss and a sadness deep inside this write - great work tops
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very intimate write from you. detailed without smut. that is good. thank you for allowing me to read this. Hope2MakeIt
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loved this
I loved this one it was really beautiful a pleasure to read.
Thankyou for sharing .....well done xx -
this is beautiful... so vivid.
it flows all the way through, with a lovely, haunting ending.
good luck in the contest
~Clare
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