The beauty of a wondering mind,
Where I live in a constant dream,
To look for the place I must find,
The peace of a flowing diamond stream?
To glide over those memories of life,
Those wonderful moments forever gone,
You cover those moments of strife,
And wish for those things you long,
You dive under glistening stars,
And fly on to explore another fantasy land,
But hide those painful yet distant scars,
And feel the silk touch of golden sand.
But now your mind must drift back home,
The mind is as vast and open as any world,
And imagination once again leaves you alone,
Our mind, where hopes and desires become unfurled!
Author notes
I know your contest said we could put anything in this contest but your title inspired me so here is my poem!
Written April 23rd, 2006
A contest entry
- Wondering Mind by pimp daddy satin.
300 points, ended April 29, 2006, 40 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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This is really great! I agree with jh64 on the flowing but i really like it!! It reminds me of the way you feel when you read but then you have to return back to reality! I wonder...is that what you based it on?! I loved it!!!
~Abby
But now your mind must drift back home,
The mind is as vast and open as any world,
And imagination once again leaves you alone,
Our mind, where hopes and desires become unfurled!
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wow! this is so cool, with the words and everthing i can actually see where u r going with it. just a wow! i don't think anyone would like to see in my mind it can be very confusing and a whole bunch of juggled stuff. what a lovely poem good work and i hope u do well in the contest! U HAVE MY FULL SUPPORT!
~Netta~ -
That's good. You might be able to get by without flowing but it works with it too. Good write.
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great
Ooooh! I really like this poem!!! I loved the amazingly beautiful discription that you used!!! I so liked the bit where you talked about diamond stream, and To glide over those memories of life! I think that you had really thought about this poem! Well done, plzz write more! Haylow x
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