her glossy hair was folded
into fish tail braids,
tight as a cap against skull
pale as the bones beneath
feeling seaweed on her breath,
caught between the fingers
that reached to touch skin
while tail frothed waves
of want that pulled like undertow
no Odysseus or Orpheus
could have meant more
than the fish that fed multitudes
netted under black and white skies
pinned to the pinnacle of bows,
steering would be made easier,
by such flying fish and gods
would slide down big dippers
to get to such as her
she simply waded
until the sea swallowed,
gulped at the beauty of her legs,
her thighs, the cup of her belly,
and stunned, could take no more.
Author notes
northstargallery.com/mermaids/MermaidHistory2.htm North Star Gallery
Mermaids by Arthur Rackham 33
Written April 23rd, 2006
In a list
A contest entry
- Let's Go Fishin', Melusine! by ea.
300 points, ended April 24, 2006, 10 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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hard to find anything other than -great poem- to sum this up.
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Your use of descriptive words left stunning imagery in the mind. It has a very open ended feel to this write. I am hard time finding words for it.
All I can stay it a stunning write. Great job! -
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Oh thank you for bringing this poem back up so I could read it msyelf, again. I do appreciate your comments.
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Stunning
Wonderous use of language and metaphor. I sense your writing is coming into it's own now, your hard work, dedication and passion has paid off, The beauty of this write stays with the reader and demands an encore!
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Waht a well-written comment. I do appreciate it very much. it is good to look at new themes to write about and I appreciate contests for this very thing.
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This poem is visually stunning. Your beautifully descriptive style here has added so much imagery to the write. Your words are so suggestive, they elicit the image from the reader, this is the mark of a true writer. Your poem is a credit to the legend. You have maintained all the allure and seductive prowess of the siren. Your last verse is exciting in it's relating the very essence of desire.
I too, must thank you for the wonderful link. The rich history, in word and picture is such a treat. Best of luck in the contest. -
Youa re so welcome. It is, truly a great site. How many have waded such....
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First of all, I just want to say that I LOVE this link you provided. It very respectfully lists each artist with the works of art it uses, and that is one of the main points I am trying to get across here at AP with this contest. That link is full of juicy morsels, too -- the Dorris Day photo is hailarious! I will really enjoy looking at this in detail.
You poem is stunning and I am crying right now. Will return to it later when I have calmed down but wanted you to know how very much I appreciate this on my initial read.
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