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Heavens' Little Angel

When heaven heeds and sends

you your wings, little girl.
You will know you're an angel.
A demi-god with little toes.
Laughing, playing,

and learning lifes woes.
Willing to shine if friend or foe.
The brightest light showing.

As you run.
Go, go, go

Floating..........

You brighten the sky.
Indifferent, you sigh,
you always ask why.
Your love for life

keeps me smiling.
A precious thing,

those sensational little wings.
Creating windows and doors.
with your little heart.
You'll start to feel departed.
But rewarded, by every ambition.
Just listen to your mother.
She is beauty, like no other.
She will teach you how

to flutter your wings.
Little angel.
As she sings to you "My Girl"
Your little curls
soft, they dance and swirl

upon your lovely head.
Listen to what I have said, Little angel.
Your smile is wonderous.
I think you must be a little angel.
A proper child.
Hell has no place for you.
You're heavens little angel.




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  • Antebellum
    July 5

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    Thanks so much for entering



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    Good luck.











    [if you are placed in the finalists I will leave a better comment]


  • Layne
    January 5, 2008

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    wow, this was heart wrenching, your words were making the hairs on my arms stand.........Very emotional and beautifully written piece..
    -Layne


  • Ellis gold member
    December 29, 2007
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    Excellent Writing

    So glad I found your poetry.
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  • Florida Sunshine
    December 23, 2007

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    I really enjoyed this entry more a bit more... I think your message is more toward "Baby Grace" ~ It makes me think of her.... and not necessarily who and what evil actions are done.... its a beautiful piece. Nice job ~

    Good luck to you in the contest.


  • O.o
    December 17, 2007

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    Great!

    This is so sad I could totally see the picture you painted in your hear by reading these words...well done


  • Rheea gold member
    December 17, 2007

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    when my daughter died I made sure I knew what happened to her. Why do people assume we become angels? angels are less then humans. we are made in the image of God we will be made whole in body free of sickness and pain.


  • NonAngelique
    December 16, 2007
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    this is a good one. i like it alot. keep it up


  • creationsfromheart
    December 16, 2007
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    awwww

    This is one of those writes that melt your heart, awsome write absoultly beautiful.


  • Mrs LadyEnthralling
    December 15, 2007
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    i like this i think you did a very great excellent job penning this it was a pleasure reading this


  • Asdzaa Nadleehe
    December 15, 2007

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    So very beautiful, I adore the art work used for this piece..you have penned such beautiful imagery of this tiny precious angel...
    Peace and many blessings
    ~A~


  • jcat gold member
    December 15, 2007

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    As I read this my little 23 month old daughter sits at my feet eating her "nummies" and watching a cartoon. I look down and see in her all that you wrote here and wonder how someone could possibly hurt their own small daughter. A little child that was so full of life. You are so correct in saying that Hell has no place for Riley. She sits in Heaven next to her Savior.


  • sassylilpoet silver member
    December 14, 2007

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    this is very beautiful, as I read, I feel as though you are speaking of someone who is real, or perhaps to the picture, beautiful, nonetheless " A demi-god with little toes, laughing, playing, and learning lifes woes"... thank you for this beautiful entry. I'm sure that baby Riley is an angel in heaven, as she was on earth, and I wish that she'd had a mother that would have taught her to flutter her wings instead of taking her life and tossing her away.

    May you always be blessed,
    Good Luck,
    Sincerely,
    Sassy


  • Kappa Pyua
    December 14, 2007

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    this is so sweet, I love this poem it's the perfect description of a father describing his little girl after she was born and he's imaging all the things she did in heaven and all the things she accomplish on earth. kewl. UNT


  • fallenangel671
    December 11, 2007
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    aww this was amazing and the picture gave beautiful imagery I loved this

    ~Ashley~


  • Gods-Artgal
    October 23, 2007
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    This poem just makes me want to cry. Thank you for the great write.


  • gullionmar
    June 15, 2007
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    very nice

    very well written this is a lovely poem,simple pleasure to read great talent

  • Raven Judge
    June 11, 2007

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    The part that stands out most about this piece is the line about "creating windows and doors." I liked this intresting take on the inspiration of which children are the frequent catalyst. To that degree, this piece offers a genuine insight into the innocence so starkly missing from adults, worn down and ragged by life's demands. How much sweeter life must be, it seems to us older individuals. But then, so does it seem to our children as they age out of innocence into the night of adulthood's less complicated and less virtuous desires.

    I am struck by the awe of what is left behind in this transition and can't help but wonder what simular choices have crept up on me as I have aged. Any piece that makes the reader become reflective has achieved merit in at least that regard.

    While the images and feelings that this piece conjures are valuable, they are so almost entirely because of the subject matter involved. You have managed to shift it to suit your purposes, but its intent inherent is always going to be an unavoidable aspect when it becomes time for critical review.

    Thank you for your entry.

    ~Das

  • Poetryintheblood gold member
    May 12, 2007
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    Thank you for your beautiful entry, Josephine


  • I will stand by you
    May 8, 2007
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    very good.


  • jackie08
    April 16, 2007
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    This is so lovely. I loved it! I am peechless


  • borron555
    April 16, 2007

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    i have the distinct feeling this is about a daughter or a newborn relative. It is very beautiful and not over done, small words can show love too =]

  • mama-drama
    April 16, 2007
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    This is lovely. Children are the best angels alive. Your poem is so sweet! I love the picture, it speaks volumes, and your words describe the sweet little ones so well, I can picture the tender curls and beautiful white dresses and big white innocent eyes, very unspoilt and naive. I love heaven's little angels.

  • pruedence
    April 16, 2007

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    Cute...I love angels...they are real...your poem proves it..nicely written..flows well, thanks for sharing


  • Viyanna Rosemarie silver member
    April 16, 2007
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    i wish my son had listened to this:
    Just listen to your mother.
    She is beauty, like no other.
    She will teach you how to flutter your wings.


    {my phone just died. i am trying to call you back but it is going to voice mail. yikes!}

    this is awesome. the picture made me smile as it reminded me of my granddaughter. viyanna rosemarie


  • fallenangel671
    April 7, 2007
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    awesomeness!!!!! i love it!!!! nice picture to go with it! keep penning!!!
    ~Ashley~


  • Viyanna Rosemarie silver member
    March 19, 2007

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    oh my goodness! this is precious. it seems everything i am reading tonight is about angels, death, suicide, etc... this one was not so depressing to me for some reason. you made me smile with the beauty. if that can make sense. sorry, i am just in a bad space at the moment. this is beuatifully done and i wish you the best of luck in this contest. viyanna rosemarie


  • B Chandler
    March 19, 2007

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    now this is just darlingly good. It holds that sweet and innocent side while allowing the the mind to be submerge. keep penning


  • Asdzaa Nadleehe
    March 15, 2007
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    aww this so sweet..and very nicely done..you have painted a perfect picture for all to see


  • magloveschrist
    March 15, 2007

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    great job

    loved your poem you are obviously writting more poems so i won't inerupt that so keep up the good work

  • magloveschrist
    March 15, 2007
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    great

    that was inspiring keep up the good work


  • Angels Delight
    May 10, 2006
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    Excellent

    This was absolutely amazing...I really loved this poem and I am bookmarking it...I am looking forward to reading more of your work...Hugs Tessa


  • masterblaster gold member
    May 6, 2006
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    Hi ,a very sweet write totaly charming, listen to your mum, this made me smile, I enjoyed this soft gentle write and needed to read something like this today,all the best, hugs Di


  • May 5, 2006
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    loved it

    wonderful writing. what a sweet soul you have. keep up the good work.


  • Hope2MakeIt
    April 23, 2006
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    how very beautiful this write is from you. an even more beautiful little angel i am sure. thank you for allowing me to read this. Hope2MakeIt


  • almost-choked-up
    April 23, 2006
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    This is a wonderful and beautiful poem, as many other people have told you. My favorite lines were: Indifferent, you sigh,/
    and you always ask why. I think when everyone is young, they just want to know all the answers. I'm still like that. ^_^ This poem made me smile, just knowing how much one father cares for his daughter. Thanks for sharing and brightening my day. =)

  • mindi38
    April 23, 2006
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    a very beautifull warm and tender poem , i loved it, felt like id said those words over and over many times before about my little angels , well done great piece , x


  • real irish rose
    April 23, 2006
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    beautiful

    Oh I really love this it is really beautiful and shows a mothers bond perfectly.
    Nicely written and a pleasure to read.
    Thankyou for sharing this with us xx


  • PassionsPromise gold member
    April 23, 2006
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    Absolutely well done

    WOnderful absolutely wonderful. I too have 3 precious angels. I can relate to this write in so many ways. So precious and innocent. I hope your angel realizes how much she is loved by you. Keep up the good work. This is a job well done and deserve of a mmighty applause.
    Victoria


  • Cherokee
    April 23, 2006
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    This is so sweet. I don't know what is in the air but I just wrote one about my daughter too. Precious.


  • Poetic-Dreamer
    April 23, 2006
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    Beautiful. I loved it because I could picture a little girl much like sherly temple with the curls and smile. And Now I have the song My Girl stuck in my head. I enjoyed how you made her and angel with out killing her and having her be dead in heaven and how you kept her in a real world way with school. Bravo this is perfect for children and families.

    NoL

  • hislittleannie
    April 23, 2006
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    Splendid, write, sweet, beautiful poem for your little girl. I have all boys so, I missed out on the ribbons, and bows. We had ballcaps, skinned knees, and baseball bats. Children no matter boy or girl are all blessings. Enjoy them while they are little because in a blink of an eye they are grown and headed out your door on their own.


  • sunnystar
    April 23, 2006
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    best part of the verse is
    the Little angel
    As she sings to you "My Girl"
    Your little curls
    soft, they dance and swirl upon your lovely head
    Listen to what I have said, Little angel
    nice write its also very inspiring to me i m going to write something on the same topic and see howw i do it..............pl do read and comment on my work i ll surely appreciate your comment on them ......


  • Rosalie M
    April 23, 2006
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    Awwww. It sounds like you have a very special "angel" here, and it sounds like she's lucky to have you! The rhyme did seem a little forced in places, but it flowed wonderfully nonetheless, very nice write!

    God bless, Rose


  • rosepoet
    April 23, 2006
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    This is a beautiful write, a very sweet poem a with a wonderful flow
    keep up the good work
    Thanks for the read


  • PureAmethyst
    April 23, 2006
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    This is so very beautiful. I love it It's great you feel so much towards someone. I agreewith allforlove. I hope she knows how special she is. Well sone, don't stop writing!

    xXxPurexXx

  • crysalot14
    April 23, 2006
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    good

  • FindingFate
    April 23, 2006
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    Very nice flow of beauty here. Great job. I hope this little angel knows how special she is. Thank you for sharing.

  • ocerus
    April 23, 2006
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    This is an interesting poem. It kind of reminds me of the song "Stardust;" the rhyme is all over the place, but the narration stays true to the story and is quite pretty. This poem is a little rough at times, but the sincerity and whimsical beauty make it worth reading. Not bad! - oce


  • April 23, 2006
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    Sweet poem. Nice work. It would have been alot better if you had taken care to seperate the poem into a few verses though.


  • Lady Malcontent
    April 23, 2006
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    This was magnificent! I read this and could find no better poem to describe my own daughter. This was a beautifully written piece. All of our children are heaven's little angels with wings guiding us through out life making us better and thankful that we have them. Thank you for the read!


  • martinezjjoe
    April 23, 2006
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    sweet

    a very sweet poem an excellent flow


  • real irish rose
    April 23, 2006
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    beautiful

    WOW This is indeed a very pretty little poem it was truly beautiful and a pleasure to read.
    It flowed brillantly and your use of words made it fantastic.
    Well done xx


  • naked roots
    April 23, 2006
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    Wow, this is so sweet, a lovely write...She does indeed sound like Heavens little angel You have a really nice flow to your words as well. Great job

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