Shadows dance in the pale moonlight,
Demons awaken from Hell tonight.
Ghosts appear to haunt your soul,
The crows look on with eyes of coal.
No one stops your tears;
No one calms your fears.
Hush baby girl forever more,
There are no monsters behind your closet door.
Dark slowly envelopes light,
Fear knowingly wins its fight.
Sleep hesitantly closes eyes,
Pays no attention to children's cries.
No fear little one; Nothing to dread,
There are no monsters under your bed.
Sleep in tight parents assure,
Then lights go out; Begins the horror.
Childhood fears quietly scare,
Parents forgot how it was to be there.
Fear is winning its gruesome race,
To put terror on the young ones face...
Author notes
this is about childhood fears hope you like it!
Written April 22nd, 2006
A contest entry
- For those with no trophies!!! by KnightRhymer.
400 points, ended April 30, 2006, 5 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Fear by Passionate Singe.
600 points, ended April 7, 2007, 24 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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Wonderfully penned. It has a great flow to it and the images is solid. Bravo
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forgot to applaud...
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Sorrow. This is perfectly worded. I am flabergasted at the skill you show at writing gems such as this poem.
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I'm finding with great difficulty
merely to pick a line as my favorite.
Everytime I find one..another catches my eye..
But I can't very well
copy your work in its entirety, Dear Poet.
"Dark slowly envelopes light,
Fear knowingly wins its fight."
Perfect word usage..wonderful rhyme..
(even keeping to seven syllables per line
to make these thoughts mesh flawlessly!).
This is a write to be proud of, Dear Poet, truly.
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Yeah it is kind of like my poem Creeps in the Night. Haha.. Great. I liked this one, particularly the wording. It flowed nicely and demonstrated the terror that young children feel when they have a nightmare. Wonderful, just wonderful! Great write. Good luck to you with future writes.
<3 Christina
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Wonderful expression of a childs nightmares. I think most of us had monsters to hide from as children. You have turned the lights on mine. Excellent piece of poetry.
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This is very good. This is like something I would write. Excellent work, Sorrow.
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I particularly liked "Crows look on with eyes of coal." I thought this was a very well writen peice. I search for something to yell at but I come up empty. Still- there is no such thing as a perfect write but this is pretty good. Oh! The last stanza- maybe needs a bit of changing to flow more smoothly.
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Great write powerfully expressed...
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I really do like this poem a lot. There is one word I think could be changed though, on the line where it says:
'Pays no attention to child's cries.'
I think child's should be children's.
Anyway, the poem is excellent.
Well done
xXx
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Amba is awesome! with a capital P!
ohmygosh!! this was awesome!! fantasteric!!!! omg!!! it was amazing!! i loved itt!!! and considering theres a ghost in my room, makes me giggle. hahaha. omg. wow. amba im hyper. this was great. fantastic!!!! your so good<333 i loved it!!!
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Great job i wish i had of wrote it! great job It reminds me off my devil poem you should check it out
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