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Molded Image

Vacant eyes,
Vegetate state.
Emptiness within.
Hollowed out soul,
From incessant carving.
Created a cutout shape.
Molded to your ideal image...
And I am expected to be grateful of my paralysis?

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Written April 22nd, 2006

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  • gemini420
    April 24, 2006
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    thanks

  • pozo
    April 23, 2006
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    A powerful and dark short poem Good use of internal rhyme in the second line. I liked your use of alliteration: 'created...cutout'. Keep writing, this was a dark write which I liked a lot- I hope it isn't personal
    Thanks for your comment
    All the best
    Pozo