Dandelion with yellow head between the green grass
like a gold crown covered with springtime touch
is dancing invisible dance in it's natures class
breathing soft morning air, not asking too much.
Between golden petals full of sun and dew,
breathing soft morning air, not asking too much,
under our sight, flying smell, brightness in hue,
always are here like a modest everlasting duch.
How come I can't explain, this magic beauty
is dancing invisible dance in it's nature class,
without any order it comes with natures duty
to live close or between concrete and glass.
Petals smile and gentle leaves wave for goodbye
like a gold crown covered with springtime touch
soon will turn into the soft white blowball,
each one will fly with it's own clutch.
Come with me, in your eyes I'll see
dandelion with yellow head between the green grass.
This beauty is here still growing for thee
my dear, and me, your own loving lass.
Author notes
Sonja 52
Sonaline rhyme style:allpoetry.com/Column/1963216
line 4 from first becomes second in second stazna
line 3 from first becomes second in third stanza
line 2 from first becomes second in fourth stanza
line 1 from first becomes second in fifht stanza
GT: allpoetry.com/Contest/1962970
Written April 22nd, 2006
In a list
A contest entry
- Earth Day ROUND 2! (invite only) by HannahBrookeXD.
300 points, ended May 11, 2006, 2 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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oh wow, this is wonderful! And it must have been hard to write in that style. It looks that way at least! Great job with thins! Really reminded me of spring. sorry about the judging, i had a musical. good luck and thanks for entering my contest!
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What a great prediction James! Please do not make me to
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Anyhow, thank you for your nice, uplifting words, and enjoy my poetry springtime breeze.
~Sonja~ -
I dare to say that one day your name will be on the top with all other the best poet on this World. Your imagination and love for nature is much more than one ever could be able to see without your included feelings. Your poetry is living and breathing with readers hearts. I dare to compare this poem with Wortsworth's Daffodiles.
I can feel soft and fresh springtime breeze on my face coming out within your lines. My applause.
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Thank you Katie. I just want to show my feelings (my bliss) because we are all part of this nature. It is very important to all of us to think about this "little" fact. Yes, I have the same questions, and only reason what could be that dandelions are treated like a weed is just because it is not "usual" for human beings to eat flowers, but to eat weed is mostly ok. Hmmm...
~Sonja~ -
Beautiful Poem!
This is a beautiful piece of work Sonja, I feel as if I am standing in a field full of wonderful Spring Flowers all blooming and dancing in the fresh, new, green grass of Spring. I will never understand why the dandilion is classed as a weed, it is one of the brighest yellow flowers we can ever see.
Well Done your imagery is very vivid making your words come alive in the mind
~Katie~
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Thank you wtchr. I love nature and I like to write about a nature. From my home window I can see uncounted dandelions crowns and I feel myself blessed because of this nature's beauty.
~Sonja~ -
Dear Sonja;
I really like the regal touch you have given the lowly dandelion. Likening the flower to a crown is very lovely. I like the style you have developed. Your poems read so very well. I read in anticipation of the "blowball", I KNEW you would not dissappoint me. Your last verse is a treasure. It sounds as if it is spoken just for the reader. It sounds as if it is spoken softly, sincerely and ever so sweet. -
Thank you. I am glad you like it.
~Sonja~ -
excellent
Beautiful Poem ,a true picture in words. Very talented. -
Thank you Elizabeth for your deep and wise rewiev. You are right. This poem could be read as a metaphor for, as you said - truly beautiful people of pure heart who often get lost in the crowd. I am so happy with readers like you are.
~Sonja~ -
Close Observation.
Very pretty observation of a flower that is taken for granted,flourishes everywhere and sometimes its beauty might be missed.Swaying soft imagery makes this a lovely Poem'
It reminds me of all the truly beautiful people of pure heart who often get lost in the crowd.
Good luck in the Contest,Sonja.
Take care.Elizabeth. -
April 22 is very important day, but unfortunately ony a day, one day between 365. Like a cath 22. I am glad you like my verses. I like nature very much and I like to write a poetry about natures beauty we still have.
~Sonja~ -
This is Wonderful! I love Earth day, dont you?! My fav part was-
Dandelion with yellow head between the green grass
like a gold crown covered with springtime touch
is dancing invisible dance in it's natures class
breathing soft morning air, not asking too much.
good luck and thanks for entering my contest! ~hAnNaH~ -
Your good wishes makes my day brighter
and each burden on my soul lighter.
I am always happy, I must to confess
to see you here first, my dear Princess.
~Sonja~
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wow..a new form?
A very beautiful piece my dear queen.
I'm the first one again.
Love you,
The best luck in the contest.
Shahrzad
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