I slip outside into the night
The world is bathed in silver light
Shadows flitter ‘cross the ground
Though not a soul is to be found
The wind stirs gently in the trees
A whisper sings upon the breeze
The stars glitter with icy light
The full moon beams its silver-white
This feeling that comes over me
A silver song of ecstasy
A silent, ghostly fantasy
Revives my soul and sets me free
The moon has caught me in its trance
My restless soul begins its dance
Excited by these ghostly hues
Of silver-whites and purple-blues
Into the woods I disappear
My needs have never been this clear
Through the trees I weave and wind
While brilliance pulses in my mind
This feeling that comes over me
A joyful burst of energy
A gust of creativity
Revives my soul and sets me free
Dancing in the sparkling dew
I feel my spirits born anew
The air I breathe is crisp and sweet
The grass is plush beneath my feet
I lie upon the grassy loam
I close my eyes and know I’m home
For nothing ever felt so right
As dancing in the silver night
This feeling that comes over me
A passionate tranquility
A beautiful insanity
Revives my soul and sets me free
Author notes
Written April 22nd, 2006
A contest entry
- Inspire Me! Earth/Nature Poetry by iamlost.
600 points, ended April 22, 2007, 39 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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Gorgeous.
This poem is quite honestly one of the best I've ever read. At not one place does the poem's rhyming flow fall out of place, not one place is it even slightly awkward. You really paint a picture with your words and that's not always as well done with poetry, but you certainly did it here. Wonderful, wonderful, wonderful piece!
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I love the feeling and pagan atmosphere in this poem, you have truly captured the night and the feelings that come when bathed in moonlight. Thank you for inspiring me!
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Oh! Thank you so much for your comment, but I must say, this is beautiful, as well! I'm usually not much on ryhme patterns such as this because they are often childish and vague, but this was put together so well that the rhyming seemed to be perfect for the message you wanted to convey. Good work, and thanks again for choosing to look at my work.
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outstanding work of excellence
This is such a beautiful and lush image with a very intense feeling of liberation and freedom. i love the way the words are so descriptive giving me a real vision of the experience being portray within the poem. this truely is a work of excellence, it made me feel like i wanted to join you as itworked up to the ending with such a powerful yet relaxing sense of extacy. exceptionaly well written and structured poetry with very rich descriptive language. i love this -
This was honestly at the top of my best poems ever list. I swear I was entranced within this piece. I could not stop reading. The middle verses about the feeling coming over you were my favorite.. such beautiful wording, yet I found it hard to pick a favorite because this whole poem was magnetic. OMG!!! I am so so happy to have read this piece. I am in love with the night, and you have just brought to life the majestic beauty I find beneath a star-lit sky. I have never been able to capture the night this vividly and flawlessly, and I applaud this outstanding work of art.. I will definetly read so much more by you, and I think you have just made it into my favorites list.
Amy -
Just love your work
his is an amazing write and I am truly overwhelmed by your depth of emotion and wonderful descriptions. Thnk you also for commenting on my poem "Into the Light" I think that you have incredibly talent, so keep at it!!! -
this is awesome, and how I feel as well.
I feel my spirits born anew
The air I breathe is crisp and sweet
The grass is plush beneath my feet
I lie upon the grassy loam
I close my eyes and know I’m home
For nothing ever felt so right
As dancing in the silver night
those were the lines that I liked the most...especially the last three. The night does seem comforting sometimes, doesn't it? Great poem! -
Thumbs up, four stars
This poem made me feel strangely refreshed. The imagery is so vivid and clear. I love it. -
A deep thinking spirited poem
I liked it, it really captures night-times feeling in the way the spirits are born anew and how you can feel relief in the air. -
WOW! That was amazing. You painted a very vivid picture. It was also really complete.. you hit every aspect of night. The words flowed together beautifully! I got lost in the third stanza, so i started over... and it just got better.
I really loved this poem. I love the night time, and this was one of the most beautiful poems ive ever read about it. You couldnt have done any better. ... ... Im gonna go read it again. Just beautiful! -
this is simply amazing. I appreciate all the work that you put into this poem by making sure that each line rhymed and that each line had exactly eight syllables. It flowed perfectly and if you read it out loud, all the words seem to wash together and become almost like a song. I dunno...maybe it's just one of my queer imaginings.
Anyways, I also loved the imagery in this piece. As I was reading through this piece, I could imagine the scene you were describing through the great adjectives that you used.
However, I felt the two lines that really spoke to me were "A passionate tranquility/A beautiful insanity". Not only do they have repeating patterns in the structure of the phrase, I also thought these two lines also had a lot of meaning that linked to the poem.
All in all, I absolutely loved this poem.
Thank you so much for the great read and keep it up!
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Magical and beautiful. I love this poem.
the rhythm and rhyme in this is sublime. I also love the repeating stanza with the center lines changing O' so fantastically. Amazing write here. Bravo!
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beautiful
This is a beautifully written piece!I love the imagery it creates,it's definately one of the best things I've read in a long time. I see colors flying through a forest,and it somehow reminds me of a tim burton movie..?Anyway,I love the rhyming,it's so perfect and you really trigger the senses.Wonderul write on
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Wow. This is incredibly beautiful! The words that you used are filled with such grace and wonderful emotion! The flow was perfect and the rhyming was excellent!!!! What a soothing poem to read! I really enjoyed this!!! Fantastic work!
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9!
intense! love it great work! wow! okkaaa i dont no another word!
well obviously i know ova words its just this was fab! and i cant do it justice so ..... right
luv laura xxxxxxxxxx dead ens wishes xHxExAxRxtx xxxxxx -
This is great, reminds us of the beauty of the nighttime. You have great rhythm and lovely descriptions. I loved reading it-keep up the good work!
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From start to finish - you kept such perfect rhyme and flow. Very deep and poignantly penned; seldom do I find such beautiful imagery accompaning sincere depth of whimsical curiousity... Thank you for entering - Best wishes!
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magical, mystical
Absolutely loved this piece, the imagery is so powerful and the flow is just amazing, It really is just brillant and something that just has to be bookmarked. my only suggestion though is in the second till last verse where your write:
"For nothing every felt so right"
Could it be that you meant ever not every, sorry if I'm wrong but thought I'd ask I do things like it all the time and never notice till someone points it out. Again brillant piece looking forward to reading more of your work. -
Excellent. You might like to read this. Robert Louis Stevenson loved the moon, too:
The Moon
The moon has a face like the clock in the hall;
She shines on thieves on the garden wall,
On streets and fields and harbour quays,
And birdies asleep in the forks of the trees.
The squalling cat and the squeaking mouse,
The howling dog by the door of the house,
The bat that lies in bed at noon,
All love to be out by the light of the moon.
But all of the things that belong to the day
Cuddle to sleep to be out of her way;
And flowers and children close their eyes
Till up in the morning the sun shall arise.
Keep up the good work.
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I love the way the tone changed throughout the piece- it started very dark and mysterious, but then changed without the reader even realizing it. By the time you get to the end, it's almost a different poem, yet it feels united throughout.
Lovely write!
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O I liked this. For some reason it made me think of the color palette from a Tim Burton movie...which is good! I enjoyed this. Well done.
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Wow, this is something else
It plays out like a Danny Elfman song, absolutely brilliant
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A really wonderful piece with such a smooth flow even the change in pace and rhyme pattern adds to the pleasure of this read A joy to click on to and read Excellent
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LOVE IT!
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Excellent
This is eerie, magical and absolutely breath-taking, glistwolven. Also very well-rhymed. A delight to read.
Regards,
Bad Bill
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