^ Her tiny
finger
at the
earth
swirls
as she
twirls
and starts ~ in
motion. For what or
whom ~ ~ when ~
she ~ ~ unfurls ~
powers ~ ~ that bring ~
despair and ~ ~ destruction. ~
Warmth she desires, but no man is her ~
mister. This Storm Goddess her face ~
we never see. Susceptible on land by ~
tornado or twister, hurricane or cyclone
is the calamity on the sea. To enter ~
her vortex looking to her heavenly ~
eye, hot lightening blasts clap ~
as my name she calls. A ~
fury of ecstasy is mine ~
until the day I die, yet ~
peace abounds within ~
her towering walls. ~
Men want to bring ~
her into their ~
submission ~
reduce her
power and
make her fold.
But all I want
now is your
permission
to never ~
allow ~
you ~
to get ~
cold. ~
Author notes
Give me an inch - I'll give you a figural
I dedicate this poem to StormGoddess her wish is my command. I hope you like your figural.
I do think that all women should use and keep their power!
Written April 21st, 2006
Option #4 Nature
In a list
A contest entry
- Love by AudreyTyler.
300 points, ended October 26, 2006, 39 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Strange Love by FelineMuse.
600 points, ended May 28, 2007, 9 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Give me something beautiful to put on my wall by Wrozes Thorne.
450 points, ended October 3, 2007, 17 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
Comments
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Sigh...
Though I have this plastered on my page, with pride I might add, I so enjoy coming back here to read it as well. I love to see other's comments on your outstanding work.
I love this as much today as the day you created it for me and I will never tire of her.
Thanks again darlin'!
Storm -
This is such a cool form of poetry! I've never had any entries like this before and it's so cool looking! The poem itself was well written and I loved reading it. Thank you for entering my contest! Good luck!
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Visually and poetically stunning!
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Interesting. I like the idea and feeling of. This is nicely written and well done. Thanks for entering!
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angelic imagery throughout....
Wow! It sure is a delight to have come across this stunning piece. I really enjoyed the creative look to this figural. I'll bet Storm Goddess just adored this piece as much as I did.
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This was awesome! Love the shiney's! This is a wonderful entry! Good luck to you in the contest and this was my pleasure to read
~Tia
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this was great. i'm wondering if the misteer in the poem is supposed to be master. it works either way. i also liked how you made the poetry into a trom. i liked the rythem of this and especially the lines where u ask for permison to malesure she never gets cold? i think that was it. anyways. interesing and orignal. never read anything like this before.
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Thank you!
So glad you enjoyed my figural (shaped poem) I did mean for the Mister part - That way she would be single (no man is her mister) In real tornados it is the heat rising up to the clouds that cause the storms - so if they do cool down - they expire. So it was lol technically correct too! I appreciate your great comment!
Tang
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Very turbulent poem, much like the subject. Yes. Just... yes.
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SICK! this must've took long!!!!!!!!!11
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A gr8 piece my dear!!! I like the style of your writing here...You are a talented writer, honestly I love it!
Especially on htis part:
To enter ~
her vortex looking to her heavenly ~
eye, hot lightening blasts clap ~
as my name she calls. A ~
fury of ecstasy is mine ~
until the day I die, yet ~
peace abounds within ~
her towering walls
Thanks for entering my first contest!
GRACE -
Dear heartnsoul,
I meant mister aka: Mr.
Thanks for the compliment!
Tang -
First..desires, but no man is her ~
mister. (do you mean master?) this is how it reads in my head.
Ah...like a storm goddess, once inside the tranquil eye, you are trapped! Very creative! You show great strength of character and self in your work. A pleasure to read. Good luck in the contest!
~Michelle~
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Dear rejected xox love,
Thanks for your wonderful compliment!
Tang -
loved it! this was great. nothing here to critique.
good luck in the contest!
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Dear FlurryOfDancingFire,
Glad you both enjoyed the figural (concrete) poem. They are my favorite to create.
Tang -
Wowness
Flurry: Wow, awesome concrete poem! It was amazing how it even rhymed at some points! I really liked this one. And do you wanna know something funny? I've actually read this before, just never commented. Heheh, ironic. Good luck!
Darkest: Whoa! This was so good. I really enjoyed reading it, and it was such a wonderfully worded piece. Flurry had to tell me how to read it at first, just because I can be blonde like that, and at some points it was a little bit hard to understand, but all the same it was very good and the format was just WICKED COOL!!!!! -
Dear Shainas man,
Thanks for enjoying my figural poem - and I appreciate your help!
Tang -
Dear Shaina Bird,
Thanks for enjoying my figural poem & for the heads up for qualifying.
Tang -
wow this is very neat....You wrote this in a very odd way....Yea you need to read the rules.....Good luck in our contest
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This was very creative and unique. You did a wonderful job with this piece. I bet it took alot of time and effort. Dont forget to read the rules please. We wish you the best of luck in our contest.
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I love the beautiful shape of this poem, I can tell that you have spent a lot of time thinking of the form and how it should relate to the subject of the poem. The imagery that is depicted is amazing and gives of this undertone of erotic meaning behind the poem. I also love how the speaker in this poem has a different view to other men rather force her to his submission he would prefer to admire her. This is a beautiful piece well done.
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Dear Sandwich Massacre,
Thanks for catching my error, yes, I meant fury! (shakes his head) the things that spell check won't quite catch.
I'll really glad you had fun reading the figural poem. I do enjoy the creating of them.
Tang -
this is so much fun! first off, the shape is magnificent. and the worlds are so energetic and mystical and... like painting almost. a roller coaster of this personified manifestation. absolutely so much fun to read. my only thing is... does furry=fury? just wondering. the contest seems to be critical of grammar...
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Dear Nanette,
I've got a secret recipe, actually the truth be known I just sleep on it and the inspiration comes from different places.
Thanks for your very kind words.
Tang -
Wow!!! Well done!! This is amazing, how on earth did you get this structured like this?! Brilliant and a well deserved trophy! Congratulations!
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Thanks for stopping Ted and glad you liked the figural.
Especially since you think it is a masterpiece - (feels head to make sure it isn't growing bigger - nope still good)
I appreciate your comments,
Tang -
I know this wasn't the one you were talking about, but glad I came in here anyway. Very creative! Good luck in the contest and I had to applaud this masterpiece!
Prince Ted E -
My Dearest StormGoddess,
It was my pleasure to grant your request. Yes, you may use this poem on your page, I was hoping you would. (Please don't forget to do a credit line)
I am please that you thought she was erotic, I was wanting something subtle that would hint at the pleasure, yet would be suitable for all viewers.
May you never tire of her beauty,
Tang
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Dear Pamela,
I stand humbly before you smiling I'm especially glad that you did consider it erotic. I did want to fit into the contest well - without the banishment of the young authors.
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OMG, Intanglio, when I had asked if you take requests, I was hardly expecting you to actually write a poem for me. I love it. It is beautiful, and more erotic than you know. Just not graphic. So much of it is true too. Thank you so much. Can I put it on my page please?
Thank you again and for entering it.
Storm -
Bravo! Standing in applause
OMG!! Your work is truly amazing. So impressive and strong. Words mixed with form. There are not many who can do this so creatively or so well. Impressive is an understatment. I stand, awed......now that's erotic!!
These lines here -
To enter ~
her vortex looking to her heavenly ~
eye, hot lightening blasts clap ~
as my name she calls
simply say it all. Wonderful work. ~Pam
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My Dearest muse GodeSsOfTemPtatiOn,
Thank you for your most kind words, and appreciation of my figurals. My hope is that StormGoddess will enjoy it for her very own.
Your Lio -
indeed good when it comes to those kinda fancy shaped poems. well the poem it self is nice
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