In this dream of mine I see some
Things I want to be
In reality, I see some
Things that I’ll never be
Oh, I think behind the
Optimistic glasses
Are a million other people
Looking for stuff other than trash
Chorus:
Who said this would be a happy life;
A perfect world
Nobody told me anything
Of what to expect
Who told me that I
Would be the girl
The girl to face the world
From what I can tell, I need some
Time to make up my mind
I have a few tools, and a big
Treasure to find
And I know that I have got to find it
Cause when I do, I’m not going to hide it
Chorus:
Who said this would be a happy life;
A perfect world
Nobody told me anything
Of what to expect
Who told me that I
Would be the girl
The girl to face the world
Bridge:
Turn this way and that in me dreams
Treasure’s not as heavy
As I thought it would seem
I now realize the treasure is the real me
I know I won’t live in
A perfect world
I know I’ll face those challenges
By myself every time
Got to remember not to have ideas
Of what to expect
I’m very sure now
That every girl
Takes a turn to face the world
Oh, I know I won’t live in
A perfect world
I know I’ll face those challenges
By myself every time
Got to remember not to have ideas
Of what to expect
I’m very sure now
That every girl
Takes a turn to face the world
Oh, in that dream of mine…
Author notes
The poem is taking place while a girl is in a dream and she is ‘scavenging’ for treasure. She’s at that age at about where I am, 12,11,13, somewhere in there. She has all these questions about life, and about herself, you know, usual stuff, and she’s looking for answers. She finds the treasure, an her questions are answered (for now) and she realizes that life isn’t meant to be perfect, but she should take on those challenges and have a ball anyway. Then, at the end, she wakes up to better outlook on life, and she knows she’s not the only one who goes through it, so she’s not that worried anymore. Okay, I know, totally lame and cheesy, but hey, I haven’t gotten anything in a while, so give me a break! Now get to commenting! Option 4.
Written April 16th, 2006
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Comments
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This poem/song says lots about every young girl in this world. The line that stands out to me is... 'I now realize the treasure is the real me'.
This line says it all... Good write! Thanks for sharing. Keep the ink flowing and good luck!
~Donna~
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Wow that is so true,I think every girl would feel that way about the world.
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Ooooo thanks kimmie! :-)
the title says it all! thank you i was just inspired out of the blue to write it so i did and i am very happy you liked it and i will now be replying to your comment on don't do no drugs bye-bye!
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(thank you!) noooooooooo i thought you we're gone! (and thumbs up for applause!) i didn't know you'd come back to haunt me! )i'm glad you liked it!) i had almost thought i had got rid of you! (come again soon!
) and don't bother me! (thanks again for reading.) and i will be spamming your author page! but right now, dinner's ready, and i love spagetti! so i will get you tommorrow my pretty, and your author page too! 
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This is awesome. I love the idea for a poem. SO is it my tuern to annoy you? hahahhahahahahahahhahahahahahahhahahahahahahhahahahahahahhahahahahahahha
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aw, that's so sweet! thank you! that made my day, i didn't think anyone else would comment, thank you!
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woohoo this rox
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good job I love songs especially ones written by you dear. good job and hope to read more soon ... you need to write more often
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aw, thanks sis! sry i don't have ur newer username on my bio, but it won't let me edit it and so i can't post or unpost ANYTHING! i gotta find out what's wrong! oh well... i'll figure it out...eventually.
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aw, thanks and no need to thank me! i just summed up ur initials, anyone could do it! yay! i'm worthy! lol
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WOW GURLIE!!!! Great write!! Love ya sissy! Britt
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Yes you are worthy of it and thanks for the new name.
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thanks DOW! i truly honestly appreciate your comment! i don't deserve your applause... BUT I'LL TAKE IT!
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this is a great song. kkep up yhe work
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OMG i'm sooo happy to hear from you! lins, where on earth have you been!? i'm gald to hear from you! aw, thanks for your comment i soo appreciate your comment! you may not realize it, but that's what help a me write, so THANKS! BE WELL, linz! Lynne
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i totally get it, miss Molly Mormon, thanks, and no one has ever really responded like that, they usually go through this whole thing of, 'well, the first line is sooooo...' and 'this is soo different and interesting...' and usually won't just say what they think of it and be done. thanks! Lynne
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aw, thanks, how thoughtful! yeah yeah yeah! you understood what i was trying to accomplish writing in this poem! but i don't want to change it, because i want to remember if i ever become a famous author, i want to remember and be able to tell people 'i'm not perfect! you can even see that at alppoetry.com!' and i want to learn from my mistakes, (and remember to use spellcheck ) i bet you were more talented than i at my age.
THANK YOU! Lynne
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bl00dy brilli@nt
This is a very good song expressing alot of emotion. I really like it alot.
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Can I say that I like it...or is that just the usual your getting from people?? Well anyway keep up the good job.
DANI
p.s. I changed my name used to be mistymormon. Do you get my new name?? -
Awesomeness!
This is not cheesy, but a great little song. It builds confidence in the person starting as a teenager....just walking into life's struggle. I loved this song, but found one problem. In the first line of the bridge, I think you meant "my" instead of "me". Otherwise, all was perfect. I only wish that I could have been as talented as you when I was your age. Keep up the great work!
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thanks, i didn't put that much into it, but it mean a lot you commented!
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great
wow this is great and long
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