Whenever I needed you, you were there
with a gentle hug and comforting words
Despite everything you would always care
listening to my cries no one else heard
You picked me up when I fell down
despite all that I still couldn't see
How I was happy when you were around
then I realized what you mean to me
Tired of running, tired of hiding
wanting to stay in just one place
You saw my fears slowly subsiding
Rewarded with the smile on your face
You and me, who would have thought?
Apparently you knew all along
I can't believe all the joy you've brought
how you stayed to keep me strong
And now I watch you slowly fall
turn to black, pitch as night
I'm not going to let you give up your all
you're not going down without a fight
It's my turn to do the same for you
hold you tightly in my arms
Because I've decided payback is due
now its my turn to keep you from harm
Author notes
Written April 21st, 2006
In a list
A contest entry
- Inspire Me, Please... by poet2angels.
325 points, ended April 22, 2006, 12 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Awwww thanks for the compliment hun
It made my day. By the way thanks for telling my you changed your name 
~Lonely~ -
Whatever you so do not have a black vampiric heart!! It's so soft like a black fuzzy pillow
Thanks for the comment hun you've been around most of my little AP poetic career THanks hun!
~Lonely~ -
This piece is beautiful and sweet. It contains some imagery, a lot of emotion, and a lot more. The flow is great, as is the rhyming scheme. The person who you fall in love with will be quite lucky to have a girl like you. Keep up the great work sister!(was Arielle...was ask261...)
Good luck in the contest!
-♥->Arielle
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this was a very sweet write with a beautiful message about the give and take that is necessary in relationships. You have really caught the essence of what love needs to be like, the supportive aspect of it, the nurturing and strengthening that makes it such a pillar in life. awesome job!
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This is simple, direct, heart felt, and very, very powerful. Sometimes letting your heart speak freely allows your spirit to be heard loud and clear. You have stated perfectly what love, relationship and friendship mean all in one. I am not prone to superlatives, but I would stand on your doorstep for ever to have you as my friend. Love, Tom B.
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This was a sweet piece. It was so fragile like soft baby skin. It made me happy. It made me feel warm and fuzzy within my black vampiric heart I loved how this piece weaved in and out of my heart with thick laces of love. It made me feel good, like there was some form of hope in me. Thank you for the write, it was inspiring.
Always and Forever,
~Kendal -
Unreal...what a GIFT.
Poetic precision...you have an amazing gifte precious one. Just amazing.
No more words. It's perfect.
S-DAD!!!!!!!!!
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Edited on Apr 22, 4:52 because 'Because I OWN YOU AND YOUR MAMA TOO!'. -
Excellent
This is wonderful. I would be inspired by this peice definitely. Thank you so much for writing this poem. I am impressed.
Because He Lives,
Beka -
This is such an inspiring and human poem...It shows your compassion and love in every line...Good luck in the contest...
Lynda
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Wow, this is an awesome write, you did an amazing job on this, it's well worded, and you seriously put alot of emotion in it.
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if that someone has the power to hear the cries no one else can, than he/she is someone you should hold dear. He seems to have touched your heart, and stood with you (if not a personal poem...replace "you" with "the speake" lol) through hard times showing love and care...and you finally saw it. i like the turn of the events, how you take the strong role, and help him through hard times. very nicely done.this poem almost put me in tears.
it is so well written, and it flows so well. great rhym, the words are just write. a pleasure to read.
best wishes,
looking -
Very sweet - is that not the essence of loving someone, being there for them, a supporter and encourager, a shield and sword against the dark, in those times when the one for whom we feel so strongly cannot carry on alone?
Well writ, truly.
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