Have you ever heard of the Gremlygroo?
He lives amongst garbage left by me and by you,
He picks and he seeks, he looks and he finds,
To clutter his home with his Gremly grime!
When he's hungry he feeds on the daily news,
And he has a real passion for old leather shoes,
He boils them in water and flavors them then,
With an old sardine tin, and a dried up ink pen!
He is hairy and fat with a very sad face,
And he ducks, and he dives, from the human race,
His feet are as big and as round as plates!
But he lives all alone for he has not a mate!
He only goes out in the dead of the night,
For if anyone saw him,
He would them to fright!!
So sorry I am for the Gremlygroo,
So sorry I am I am!
Aren't you?
He has lived amongst garbage for a hundred years,
And has been all alone in his sadness and tears,
He has searched, and has searched for a Gremlywife,
But no one did he find to share of his sad life,
So clutter he does and clutter he must,
Searching through rubbish to find him a crust,
And Smelling of garbage of our yesterdays,
He works and he feeds but he never does play!
So when next you throw all your garbage away,
Have a thought for the Gremlygroo, that day,
Just add the odd pen or a sardine tin?
For the Gremlygroo to find again!
Author notes
Keith Drew.I here by allow this poem to be used to cheer a sick little boys day.
In a list
A contest entry
- Sick Young Boy Needs a Poem! by mackereth.
2500 points, ended March 31, 2008, 41 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Children's Writes by Viyanna Rosemarie.
500 points, ended March 20, 22 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
Comments
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thank you for this very cute entry into the contest for my grandson. i wish you well in the judging process. viyanna rosemarie
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Great poem and illustration! I would have loved this when I was in second grade!
Grammar crits:
V1L1: No comma needed.
V1L2: The first comma is not needed. Use a period at the end.
V1L3: Change the first comma to a semicolon.
V2L1: The first comma is not needed.
V2L2: The first comma is not needed. Change the comma at the end to a period.
V2L3: No commas needed.
V2L4: No comma needed.
V3L1: Fine
V3L2: The second comma is not needed. Change the end comma to a period.
V3L3: No comma needed.
V3L4: Insert a comma between 'alone' and 'for.'
V4L3: Maybe change to 'He would give them a fright!'
V5L1 and 2: Change the ending commas to periods.
V6L1: The commas are not needed.
V6L2: Change the comma to a period.
V6L3: The first two commas are not needed.
V6L4: 'Of' is not needed.
V7L1: Insert a comma between 'does' and 'and.'
V7L2: The commas are not needed.
V7L3: I'd remove 'And.' 'Smelling' does not need to be capitalized.
V7L4: Fine
V8L1: I'd remove 'to.'
V8L2: The first comma is not needed. Change the end comma to a period.
V8L3: The comma is not needed. Change the question mark to a period. I know you're trying to indicate a rise in vocal inflection at the end of line three, but in written English, the question mark isn't right.
V8L4: Fine
Comma help: When the words after 'and' form a complete sentence, that's when you insert a comma before 'and.' For this reason,
...with a very sad face, and he ducks, and he dives... is correct, needs the comma before 'and he ducks,' but
...and has been all alone... does not need a comma before the 'and.'
'He ducks' and 'He dives' stand alone as sentences, but 'Has been all alone' does not.
I hope that helps. Good luck in the contest!
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Thanks Aerden.
I do't suppose you could proof read all of my stuff before I post it can you.
Your a sweetheart! -
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Keith--I'd be glad to!
Chantal
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I'm sure this young man will get a hige kick out of this. Sure to bring a smile! It did for me! Your compassion is wodnerful! Thanks for sharing and best wishes,
Frogz~
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I like it alot
Great kids poem.
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First of all i would like to thank you for entering my contest, just by doing so you are giving hope to all that this has affected. I love how your poem seems to read like Dr. Seus, and the background looks like it is right out of a Dr. Seus book too. The picture was great, i really think this would cheer him up. Thanks for entering and good luck in the contest.
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hi keith my momma is helping me to tyype. wonderful, i like it.
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Hi lil bird of love.
You look after your mummy for me will you?
Give her a big kiss,because she is a Princess!
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Very funny little poem, but it amkes me want to give him a hug that poor littl ecreature. Nicely written.
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Wow..
Grand Pops.. I have only these words for this poem of yours:
EXCELLENT, WONDERFUL, FANTASTIC, BRILLIANT!
**$h@Mz**
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This is so sweet- made me feel bad for him and smile at the same time. I'm going ot go through out a whole lot of sardine tins- hate the nasty things and my dad keeps tins all over my shelf! Now when he comes and asks what happened, I just say I gave them to the Gremlygroo.
The poem itslef is wonderful too...
(does the poor hairy thing want a hug?
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This is very funny and you are very creative too. "The Gremlygroo" I that that was the name of an ogre or something lol. This really made me smile. You are an excellent rhymer I must say (because I am a failer when it comes to rhyming so most of my work is free verse)
Back to you
You write amazing children's poetry and your endings are all surprising .. not the usual stuff! Keep on writing.. I'll go check out your other poem now.
Nooni
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this was very well written. I could feel myself wrapped up in this poem.
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wow, this is unique, but wonderful! I have never heard of My Gremlygroo before, but he sounds very lonely. It would be horrible to live taht way. The next time a pen runs out, or I see sardines, I'll throw them away for him so he will be able to have his "treasures"
*God Bless You*
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Wonderful!!
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This is a lovely poem. I am really curious about that Gremlygroo. He must be a bit like ET, scary appearance but at the same time very sweet. I am sorry for the Gremlygroo too, that he has to live this way... among the garbage, hiding from the people, no wife. Nice of you though to leave him a crust, a pen and a sardine tin sometimes. I am sure you make him very happy. This poem was meant for children and I am sure they love it. So do I! Very well done. Anna.
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