My Valentine's Day
One Fine day,
The fifth of March that fell
On a Friday,
I stopped feeling astray,
Because I reached my bay,
They say,
The fourteenth of February is
Valentine's Day,
But my Celebration day
Falls on March fifth
And it's a Spring Day.
The phone rang so piercingly
His voice sounded so sexy
I wore a burgundy silk jammy
I rested on my bed comfortably
And felt terribly hungry
I asked where we were to go for lunch
The answer was as such
Only Ala Turka was our choice.
Long distance sizzling sex was plush
It seems on him I had a crush
I wasn’t aware it was as strong as much
I blurted my desires and emotions
Which caused my feelings to be
In total commotion,
Willingly I was subdued by his
Desires and virility
Surprisingly I answered back vehemently
Amused at myself and my response
I became totally his,
Starting that day without remorse
It was a fine spring day
The fifth of March that fell on a Friday
The beginning of an amazing day
And I loved his way
That brought me a long way
To find my bay
On which I safely prefer to lie.
Author notes
#Written April 20th, 2006
A contest entry
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This is a very good poem, i know how it feels to be on the phone and all of a sudden just blurt out how you feel...but in the end...it was the perfect moment to do it
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Thank you for your kind encouraging words. and thank you for allowing me into your contest.
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Wow... very hot. Just... whew. I like the way that you were tasteful with it, without making the reader cringe if they aren't used to erotic poetry. I really enjoyed reading your entry! And thank you so much for entering my contest!
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You are a MANY faceted poet! -
Ah Charlene dear, I thank you from all my heart. I am glad that you liked it. this is giving me so much encouragement my dear. Thank you for reading it. thank you
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awesome
This is an excellent piece. The flow is very nice, and made it fun to read. I especially like the part:
I asked where we were to go for lunch
The answer was as such
Only Ala Turka was our choice.
Long distance sizzling sex was plush
It seems on him I had a crush
I wasn’t aware it was as strong as much
I blurted my desires and emotions
Which caused my feelings to be
In total commotion,
Willingly I was subdued by his
Desires and virility
Surprisingly I answered back vehemently
Amused at myself and my response
All in all this is a very well written poem. Thanks for sharing. Keep writing. I can't wait to read more.
Charlene
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I love this, and I feel you my vallentines day is May 19th , the happiest day of my life , i met my soulmate ...And i hope you did to kelly
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AWESOME
yes i do agree it should just be natural, man you made me feel like someone out there loves me and i also can connect with this poem man this is great stuff you definately gotta keep writing. -
Sensually Sensational
Beautifully penned Nermin, and so tastefully sensual
Valentine's Day shouldn't be forced on us for a particular day. It should happen naturally as you describe in your beautiful poem. Thank you for sharing.
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oh no honey, Egypt's Valentine's Day is on the 14th of Feb. it is the Saint Valentine, so they dont come up with their own dates, but to me that date felt like a valentine. i am glad you like it.
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I'll say 1st really fell into this one such warm and cozy feelings some true love going on huh but I'm confused was this day, just a felt like valentine Day or is it's Egypt's Valentine Day? I'm so silly some times...
have a great evening!!! P.S. good luck in this contest
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a7a ya benti, it was hot. real good...
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