A huge pillar of rock
walking on the street
in the middle of the traffic,
surrounded by the hurting noises
ignoring the heat of sun rays,
accepting the calls of survival
walking proudly like a soldier
protected by the shields of wisdom
provided by the king of time
in the form of a thousand wrinkles
all around her body
stretching her long hands
which holds a number of leather straps
attached to a lot of golden watches
with out loosing her firm smile
in the struggles of her old age;
a true warrior.
I had to look back for a second glimpse
before the traffic lights turned green.
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Written April 20th, 2006
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Hi Raja..I am really thankful for your wonderful comments.
I just try to interpret some incidents of day to day life through my own eyes, and I consider myself just like any other human being with some qualities and some weaknesses. Really thankful to you for pouring so much nice words on me.
All well wishes to you, dear friend.
~shaitus.
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Fantastic!!!
As is your usual regal style, Shaitus, you bring the scene before our eyes and give us a feast of respectful oldage, that shines proudly, brilliantly.
Your imagery and the way you look at things that seem so mundane and finding a gem in them is a great gift. You are certainly a pride to our nation.
Love and blessings from Coimbatore - Joel - -
grat work.they are our country's pride.so lets respect them. thats not we're all supposed to do..it's what they truly deserve.
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an evocative read.
On the second reading I formed a picture of this woman in my mind. I am impressed by the dignity bestowed on her by the title and of course the poem itself. A lovely piece thank you. -
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Oh i didnt expect this. Well written my friend, I so much liked "protected by the shields of wisdon", keep up the good writing -
a beautiful write.. so well written... lovely
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Hey ,This is really amazing.The images are rocksolid and hit me like whoosh.This is so profound and extremely endearing.The old person or senior citizen could be someone as beautiful as one of us parents or any other hardworking indian senior citizen,fighting through all the ups and downs of life....Wonderful!!!
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Dear Hislittleannie
thanks for your commnts...I will see your works sometimes..
All well wishes.
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Dear Advena ..Thanks for your comments.
It is just a sudden reaction towards a real incident.
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Lovely read, not at all what I was expecting with the title. The imagery was awesome..."protected by the shields of wisdom
provided of the king of time in the form of a thousand wrinkles
all around her body" Lovely
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Lovely read, not at all what I was expecting with the title. The imagery was awesome..."protected by the shields of wisdom
provided of the king of time in the form of a thousand wrinkles
all around her body" Lovely
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young future..thanks for your comments.
Actually she was selling watches for her survival..
Nd I just got a glimpse as I was waiting for my traffic signal. -
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Very nice message to this poem. You seem like a person that would respect the wisdom of age as compared to the youth obsessed culture of our time. You presented it in a very appealing way. I wasn't expecting to read what I did based off of the title, however, it was a pleasant surprise. ^_^ -
Now this poem is clearly about an senior citizen as she crosses the street i hope. I like the concrete imagery used to give the reader to picture in his mind. And it's almost as if you wanted to give the answer away and at the same time you don't want them to konw
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