If...
you will
love me forever
and give me the blessing
of your gentle heart
i will keep you
to cherish endlessly
and treat you...
as if made of fine glass
and make a promise
to the heavens above
to love your precious soul
and want and waste not
your body in lust..
but, take you in my arms
to Love You as a woman
and thrill in your softness
to touch your inner soul
and delight in your beauty
far within
flexing... as lovers
for loves sake
and if...
the morning shall come
before we have found our way
completely
we will close our eyes
and send away the day
to keep the dream
from leaving us
and once...
for a moment in time
the heavens will open
and we will be one..
together
then...
having loved you
i will kneel at your feet
and bathe you by hand
and kiss away the pain
of your former life
and if...
you pledge me your love
and whisper these words
as i take you..
and make this
a part of your heart
i will serve you
and love you as my own
endlessly...
without fail...
forever and a day
By
Lee L.
Author notes
I give this to my Love,
for your thoughts of me, to know how I believe in acts of care
I am a male in my fifties who loves the sound of wonderfull words being spoken. I have finally published my book "Words of Love for Woman"
http://www.lulu.com/content/1267905
Inspiration:
Who of us that write, have not been moved to the edge of our existence, by Love
I seek a great woman as a partner. I am like my words.
Written April 20th, 2005 on IM
A contest entry
- Drown me with romance! by The Vulture.
540 points, ended February 1, 2007, 40 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - MY FIRST CONTEST: I WANT LOVE RIGHT NOW. PREWRITES ALLOWED...COME IN AND CHECK OUT by the-gifted.
600 points, ended September 26, 2007, 108 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - I Found It! Have you? by Nicole Cudworth.
900 points, ended November 6, 2007, 27 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Your Absolute Best Prewrite by Heavens Child.
800 points, ended April 25, 2008, 48 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
Comments
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Like every other comment on this page.. you've left me without words. Aside from being beautiful, the words feel so supportive. Its not the typical love poem for me.. I feel more in this one. congratulations on publishing your book. I'm sure its filled with beautiful pieces. You've found a calling. thanks for sharing!
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lovestinks
Thank you for your kind thoughts on my writing
I was very pleased to have my book published
Thank you for reading me
Rick
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Wow...I'm quite speechless, I wish I have a man like that in the future, this poem is much loved and cherished in my heart.
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Lauras
I hope you do have someone that will write for you
The verses made for me have become a pricless gift
Thank you for the Smilies
pleased you liked my thoughts
Rick
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this has got to be the most loving and beautiful
piece of poetry that i have ever read, she must have been
a very specail lady.
justgot2loveme
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What a nice comment
Thank you for reading me
Rick
PS: Thank you for the three smilies
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This is like marriage vows. This is just simply amazing. One day I hope to find love like this!!
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Rosita
In a way, you are very right
I have been told, it is like a pritty agreement
IF... you love me
this is how I will love you
Thank you for the blessing, Rick
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Again, another beautiful write. You have much talent and your poems are a joy to read.
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stiljnxd
If you wrote just a little more
I could give you ten points... lol
Thank you for reading me
Rick
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more than excellent
this is again a peice that i remember i have read , it is so sweet , so intense , so heartfelt , you have such elegance and grace within your style of poetry. words are so soft sweet as usual and somehow a bit of sadness in dreaming and in supposing .. the use of the if , made the poem more touching.. bravo fo this.
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lake of dreams
Nice that you came back and read several more
Your very kind, as is your comment
I thank you
Rick
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Yes, I see
This is a very well written poem. I can see what you meant on your reflective style of writing. However, I saw this potential in the first writing of yours I read, so there was no need for a confirmation of my thoughts, although it is nice.
I thank you for sharing this piece.
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Adsaige
Nice of you to read me
I don`t remember what elce you read
but i don`t remember much anyway... lol
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You are most welcomed.
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This is incredible! If my Ex were like this he wouldn't be my Ex! LOL Are you for real?
then...
having loved you
i will kneel at your feet
and bathe you by hand
and kiss away the pain
of your former life
Knowing that men like this exist may help restore my belief in love again.
I'd give you 3 of those smile things, but I don't have any yet! Sorry!
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Hi Jet
Sorry I misseds your comment
I try to keep up with everything
Thank you for quoting me, I`m honered
Love is all in our minds, and we make it so by what is felt
I hope you will read other thoughts by me
Rick
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oooh! this is a very touching and sensous celebration of love. How wonderful to be the subject of such a heartfelt and romantic piece. I can imagine it being such a complement. Not surprised again this has won trophies. I don't normally do such romanticism being a bit of a cynic sometimes but it's writes like this that can occasionally restore one's faith in human nature.
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My dearest friend, shared lover of the poetic word, you are a inspiration in your own right your words of truth and eternal love are evident throughout the write and (I must say too bad I'm not single as yes would be an answer - lol lol J/K {been with my spouse almost 19 yrs})your words of love shine as to what true love is and should be about in every pathway and journey our written, spoken, unspoken words and emotions take us. I am truly blessed to have you share this with me not only as a fellow poet but as a close friend. much love and hugsss always and many blessings evermore. xoxoxx Star
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Hi Star
As a creator of words
it is always nice to have another writer
care for the feelings we write to express
This verse was written on IM as my love read the words
She cried as I made them
She inspired me greatly
Thank you for your thoughtful comment
Rick
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Amazing. I love it! If you were 30 years younger
lol You are a great writer! Very, very talented Rick. I'm definitely impressed. Keep it up! You have definitely got what it takes 
~Jess
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Hi Lynn
Amazing is a good word
If I wake up tomorrow 30 years younger
I will let you know
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i would love it if you did!
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I like this very much. It's so pure... so sweet. It would be nice if every man could love a woman like that, but if that were so, no one would really appreciate it. The woman you find to spend the rest of your life with is very, very lucky.
~Eva
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Hi Eva
We say by who we are
how deeply we may care, for another
I believe poets breathe deeper, each breath
because they have the sprirt of life in them
We feel more in our awareness
we still believe in love
Thank you for reading a favorite of mine
Try, "My Secret Heaven"
Rick
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This is so wonderfully written. I can see why you've gotten so many trophies for it. It is almost tragic it's so lonely and solemn.
This is absolutely beautiful.
Congrats on the trophies
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P.S. Great job!!!
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Beautiful, yet sad and lonely...
I loved reading this poem, but I felt as though I were sneeking and peering into someone's painfully writhing, yet hopefully longing, eternally waiting soul... Thank you for sharing your hauntingly beautiful words. Best of luck in this contest, and write on, Poet!!! Peace, Cyn
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Hi Rose
So nice to have you read me again
What a great picture you have
I think you saw farther into my writing
then most of the readers do
There are maney levels to these thoughts
RIck
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This is a beautiful write I am sure she had tears of joy and tears of a love being poured out to her, this is amazing, I would not change a thing as it shows a write straight from your heart this is beautiful...
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Hi My Friend
Thank you for reading one of my personel favorites
This is an early write
that I hold onto very closely
Thank you for saying Beautiful
Rick
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As beautiful as I remember Rick...congrats!!!
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Thank you so much Sue
Rick
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This is truly beautiful. It moved me to tears, because I long to experience a love like this. If only every woman could find a man that not only could write words so beautiful and profound, but to actually have a man that believed them in his heart. Thank you for entering my contest.
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Heavens Child
Thank you for seeing the words so clearly,
and feeling them so deeply.
This is a personel favorite of mine,
I always believed it was better than an HM
Thank you so much for the Gold
I am honered
Rick
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Heavens Child
Thank you for feeling my words so well
I truly believe that is a gift in it`s self
My wish for you would be deep overwelming love
Thank you for caring for my words
Rick
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I don't think I've ever read love poems so tender and profound from a male poet before. You not only give the reader a look into a love, that is so warm and perfect, but you also present the feeling of certainty AND uncertainy. Strange, yes, but I felt both, and I love that, because what would love be without a little uncertainty and certainty?
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Snow White
I realy liked you comment on this write
I think you realy felt the words very well
I promised everything on one contingency... IF
Thank you for reading me
Rick
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Well spoken indeed!
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Wow, this is really beautiful, passionate and emotion filled. I can feel the fire behind the words you've written. Even the color, font and background work with it. Thanks so much for sharing this beautiful write and good luck!
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Hi Ann
Thank you for reading me
Your comment was very appreated
Rick
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you know how much I love this one! Your new lady is truley blessed and I must say a little lucky in love!
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Genevieve3
I don`t know if we can love our own words
but this is a verse who`s message I dream to live in life
I write of ideal love and devotion to a woman
I truly believe it can exisist if we love without compermise
Thank you for your thoughts from my words
Rick
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Simply Amazing.
This is by far; the most beautiful 'love' poem, i have ever read. It makes me realize how and what true love could potentially be, and how it should be. Your work is absolutely amazing. Keep up the good work! i also hope to see more of this wonderful poetry!
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Morning Sparky
That is realy a wonderful comment to me.
I hope you will experance this sometime in your life.
I thank you for reading my thoughts.
Richie
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I had forgotten how lovely and romantic this write is. perhaps one of the best love poems. I am in awe of how well you believe, I believe in it all, but the forever and day...I have seen very few have this...I think it is rare...but I also believe to feel this for even one day is a beautiful blessing.
Beautiful verse Rick.
Michelle
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Most beautiful, my dear friend!
Your words of love and endless devotion make me smile for this is how love should be
Thank you so much for sharing this; I loved it
All the best! -
tears falling, can love be so?
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Yes
It is all in the choosing
Rick
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Rick I am also amazed at the tenderness in your poetry! I can tell somewhat by your poems that you're not like most guys, and that's cool! I'm getting the vibe that you're not into treating girls like objects or pieces of meat if you know what i mean. I think you're the kind of guy that would treat women with respect! I love your poems, you are amazing at expressing yourself (also not a usual quality of guys), and I'm definately adding you to my favorites.
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Hi Chrissy
Thank you for reading me
Love is always volentary and given
For that, we create a debt of care
I am humbled to be loved by a woman
It is a great gift
Rick
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Rick I am amazed by the tenderness in your writes. The thoughtfulness for the one you love and the willingness to commit to the two of you. I look forward to more of your excellent writes!!!
GBY
SilverButterfly
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this one is better than the other. it seems less forced and it seems to me this one came to you easier than the other.... i know it probably seems annoying to have a 17 year old telling you their thoughts on writing, but just to go ahead and say it, don't force your poetry. don't schedule a time to sit down and write (not that you do, because i wouldn't know), just let the words come out as they come to your head, then if it doesn't make sense, modify it so it does. that's what i do sometimes. lol. and if that's your method as well, then just put it as it is. chances are, if it sounds stupid to you, its not. at least thats what people tell me. although yes i do realize i myself have written some ignorant materials. but i blame being a teenager for that one. haha.
but anyway. i like this write. it makes way more sense to me than the other.
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Walnut
You can say anything you like
we all have a free voice in our thoughts
This is the oppisit of forced
This was written to a woman I love on IM as she read the words
The thoughts just came to me from our love
Thank you for carring for my thoughts here
Rick
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delightfully written. real love is always happiness and joy of heart. success in the contest.
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Lonewolf
Pleased you liked my words
This reads best for women
Nice contest, Rick
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Brings to mind wedding vows. I can see these words being spoken to the one you love on the alter pledging to love this person endlessly. You capture the hearts of women everywhere as you write. Beautiful... for lack of a better word.
Love and luck in all you endeavor!
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Hi Nicole
Like your new picture
Thank you for caring for my words
Thank you for saying beautiful
Rick
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Again Beautiful!!
Love is on your mind. The part that reads:then...having loved you i will kneel at your feet and bathe you by hand and kiss away the pain of your former life" To me this sounds like you are speaking of a woman who has been hurt in love and you want to comfort her and show her want love is suppose to be like. There is kindness and care in your words! Great Job!!
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Darlintic
You read my thoughts with great insite
The words were made for a woman that was damaged deeply
Sadely, I could not save her from herself
Rick
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You once again have given words to the woman that could be in your life. Whether or not there is a real woman or not you have shown that there could be. Your words speak volumes for all the women out there who wish that their husbands or boyfriends could speak the words that you do. Your friend in Poetry, Sylvia, aka Mysty Rain
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Hi Sylvia
I seldom just write to the heavens
This was written on IM to a woman I loved deeply, as she read the words. She cried
Sadely, her hert was like an onion, layer upon layer
In time, we parted in tears
Rick
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aww this is so sweet and very emotional. great write and thanks for entering.
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This is a truly beautiful poem; I can feel your love and hope, desperation and sense of forgiveness in every word! Thank you for entering and good luck!
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Hi Daizy
Thank you for your carefull reading of my words
All you sited is true, and more. The verse is layered, like her
Rick
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Sigh
Very beautiful words you have penned. So passionate and invitingly seductive. So very soft spoken and tender. The love simply pours from the page as your words are read in a soft caress. Wonderful. Love it. Thank you for sharing.
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Soft as a feather.
Well lee,
i have to thank you for sharing this with me,
i found it tranquil and senual if i may.
Your vocabulary is that of true love, it's passionate and inviting to say the least. I bet every woman that
reads this wee gem of love will wish it was written for her. Men forget to continue to say sweet things to women after they marry, Don't ask me why but it happens a lot.
This was my fav verse...
"we will close our eyes
and send away the day
to keep the dream
from leaving us"
Brilliant, i'll leave now with a *Sigh!*
Slán Dolores x
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My lady
Thank you for your wonderfull comment to me
To most men I would say
If your woman is beautiful and adores you,
Never stop the persute, never stop courting
Men seem to love, from the outside in
Women always love from the inside, out
I believe it is inate in us
Thank you for your thoughtfull reading
Rick
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This was just breathtaking, all a woman wants is to be someone queen, whoever that someone is, to have someone light up when she enters the room and to know she is the most important person there... sounds like your muse has all that and so much more... pure beauty in these words
Karen
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Karen
We believe the same
You were kind to say pure bueaty
I appreate you reading me so extensivly
Rick
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Wonderful
Beautiful write of unconditional love! It took my breathe away! Forever In A Day is a perfect title and the first line If you will love me forever with a gentle heart and then at the end I will serve you and love you as my own endlessly without fail. I see it as a increadible relationship with our savior but it also is a romantic poem with another gentle spirit! Excellent write again, thank you for recommending this poem I thoroughly enjoyed it! stavykm
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Hi Stavykm
I thought you may like this after the other verse
It is almost anti trama...lol
I believe our God and Human Love are intertwined
Pleased that you liked my words here
Rick
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This took my breath away and it is a very vunerable state to be in when you love someone this much. I should know, I am obsessively in love with my husband.
You have a fantastic elegance in your words that leaves me feeling like I have just read the entirety of your soul. An astounding piece of writing and this is now one of my most favorite. I will have to come back and read it again. -
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Tinydarkgoddess
Thank you for reading this writing
I wrote this for a woman on IM as she read the words
She cried
Obsessivly can be wonderfull, he is blessed
Rick
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breaks thru the mask
this poem breaks through the mask of unveiling love, in
a world that markets intimacy. This is a refreshing
poem inspiring to the soul. Can you imagine if we all
were vulnerable enough to write this in the singles
profiles and columns.
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Hi my friend
I was writing what I felt at the time
That is how I write the best
I hold little back
Thank you for carring for my words
Rick
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I like the imagery of this poem, and the following is genius:
and if...
the morning shall come
before we have found our way
completely
we will close our eyes
and send away the day
to keep the dream
from leaving us
It is a very classical way of conveying the loathing of day from night, which Lucrece mourns in Shakespeare's The Rape of Lucrece, or most especially in his Sonnet X, "When most I wink, then do mine eyes best see." The genius of using the imagery of eye closing to represent the night shows much talent and intellect on your part.
In terms of the ideal of the poem, perhaps it is my own rejected heart speaking, but I take it as a poem reaching out to a rejecting loving, offering your promises. I was wanting to weep as I read and sang the words of Greensleeves tonight, and like Greensleeves, I take this as mouring rejected loving and telling what tenderness you would give. Oh that there were no rejected love, then there would be no poetry, alack! -
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Thank you for quoting me
The end of the verse facinates me
This was made on IM as my love read the words
I will say to you somthing I don`t disclose
I never read the classics now
or the noted authors of poetry
I don`t want my mind tainted by what HAS been written by the greats
I am trying my best to perserve my style while I can
If I ever loose my burn, I am doomed... lol
Almost all I write is from life
I have no other way
Thank you for you kind words
Rick
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That was Sonnet XLIII by the way, not X.
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This is great. Oh my you know you softly aroused me with your words this time. I really need to take a look at this book. Blessed Be! ~~Shannon~~
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Shannon
My friend
Softly aroused is perfect
I want the words to masage the reader
If you read again, you will find more
Enough of this
Rick
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Words so sensual and soft. To offer the reality of complete and total love and trust. Very nice and so romantic. Flair for the soft touches of passion!
Blessings,
Azlyn
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Suzan
Pleased you like my words
This is a favorite of mine
The woman the words were made for was amazing
A red head I had to run from
Rick
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Amazing poem
This is the most romantic poem I have read in a long time...What a treasure to find your poetry, the words so beautiful, filled with gentleness and love.
moon2u
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Moon2
What a great comment
I am very greatfull you felt my words
Thank you for saying treasure
Rick
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enchanting!
Romantic and so well said in such lovely words that I could feel your kind and beautiful spirit. The woman you wrote this for is forever blessed to have such a deep love as your love.
Soon you shall become a writer of books!
Smile,
Judy
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Hi Judy
In these words
I tried to bless her
She was beyound my skill in damage
I gave her away with tears
in "my Secret Heaven"
Rick
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Hi Judy
In these words
I tried to bless her
She was beyound my skill in damage
I gave her away with tears
in "my Secret Heaven"
Rick
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Exquisite
First, thank you for recommending this poem to read.
You express very well the epitome of what most women hope to find in a man...a heart and soul that understands the needs of her own. It is sensative, and full of gentleness, yet passionate as well.
Again, I see why this won gold twice.
Book marking this. No doubt your Love found this greatly to her liking. She has found a treasure, and
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Dear Lady
For a year I would not read my own words
The woman I made these thoughts for is gone
We lasted a short while, fought like children, and loved like animals
I made these words for her, on IM, at Two AM in the morning.
She cried as she read the words.
Even now, I avoid her name and the thought of her
Some we meet, are irreplaceble
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Irreplaceable? I understand that so very well. I will read more.
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Your words take my mind on a journey through another's heart...thank you for inviting me to listen to the beat of yours.
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Pearl
Your comment is almost poetic
Thank you for listning to my heart
Rick
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sigh...so very, very lovely! If this is how you are in love then you are a King among men! Beautiful indeed!
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Hi Sandy
Thank you for saying lovely
Some say I am a good man, in matters of love. The rest can not be said in words
You are kind, Rick
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Hi Meygen
Thank you so much for reading this
I love your comment to me on this work
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hey wats up? i just now seen your note
~maygen~
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Beautiful
You are right. This is a personal favorite. Now one of mine =] It was definately a joy to read! Thanks for sharing with me=]
Jasmine
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< Jasmine
I am pleased you care for my words
Thank you for reading me
Rick
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Amazing
This is a beautiful piece,
& I love how these words are spoken,
It's all beautiful...
Great Job,
& I'm goin' to look forward into readin' your new book,
Just Let me know when It get's published ok?
~Breanna
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< Breanna
Thank you so much for reading me
Your comment to me was lovely
I will let you know
Rick
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