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Missing you

I remember your touch and it soothes me
Your soft caress sets me free
Your gentle kisses still call me
Without air a voice like a dream

I remember the last time I saw you
Like it was just yesterday
I just wish I could hold you
And these oceans would fade

Oh, how I long to be near you
Hold you close, watch you beam
What I’m trying to say is: I love you
And I can’t wait to get home

Author notes

TO all the ladies that have given my their sweet time.
Written April 20th, 2006

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  • JeannieD Hunter gold member
    June 25, 2006
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    Everything you write
    comes from your heart.
    Very well written.
    Thank you for sharing.
    I know being away
    from home is very hard.

    Jeannie D Hunter


  • Devil Inside Me
    June 18, 2006
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    Wonderful

    I like your short poems because you make them say more then what is shown in your poems. Brilliant use of words.


  • --Bitten-By-Love--
    June 18, 2006
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    I love it! So beautiful, short and to the point. I felt it could of been missing a partner for any reason at the top but the last line made it clear about the distance. Re-reading it made me find bits that symbolised distance for instance -

    And these oceans would fade

    Its such a great write! I can relate to the first parts, as that's how i feel about my ex, but i won't be returning to him....

    I also love this part, its so sweet! -

    Oh, how I long to be near you
    Hold you close, watch you beam
    What I’m trying to say is: I love you
    And I can’t wait to get home

    Keep up the good work!

    ~Bitten~


  • gullionmar
    June 6, 2006
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    VERY LOVELY POETRY FULL OF EMOTION KEEP UP THE GREAT WORK


  • Broken-Rickie
    May 6, 2006
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    Awwwww...Very touching. It's really good and I like reading your writings.


  • Cupcrazy gold member
    May 4, 2006
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    Lovely piece soft and captivating. Great job! Keep your pen forever flowing. Bunny


  • blueyez
    May 2, 2006
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    awwwwwwwwwww how sad! may God bring you home because we all know Bush ain't gonna do it!


  • zillion
    April 21, 2006
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    could I ask what quote this is off of? lol umm....very sweet and calming. I love the relationship you made between time/distance and the oceans. Not sure if you meant it literally or not. The only line I stumbled upon was:

    "Without ere a voice like a dream" ere, is that a word? or do you mean error? Not sure. Anyways, thanks for your entry. It was very nicely written.

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