I wake up every morning
open my eyes and think of you,
I know your ready waiting
the love between us two
Mouth hot and wide open
your shaft gently within,
lost in all emotion
life's pleasurable morning thing
Starting very slowly
as gentle as can be,
tongue around the edges
worked up to a frenzy
Your taste is so amazing
white and creamy oozing stuff,
Will i spit or swallow ?
I've really had enough
I walk away now smiling
confident for just today
Knowing there is tomorrow
again the game we'll play
I know what you are thinking
I sense it from within
but this is how i brush my teeth
my love, my morning thing
Author notes
You are a pretty princess.
A contest entry
- quickie contest for those with no trophies! by Floorboards.
300 points, ended June 25, 2006, 9 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - #47 Something to laugh about by daviscth.
475 points, ended February 27, 2008, 28 entries
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What did you think
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haha this is so wrong on so many levels. i like it tho. at first i thought it was an erotic entry and was like wtf? lol good job
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Oh very well done and so worthy of that gold; you certainly had me fooled. I wrote a similar one called " Sweet, dark desire" Your humour, as you say is very much like mine! Carry on the good work.
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Thanks so much for posting in my contest.
Cathy
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LOL. Well, I can see why this won a gold!!! Thanks so much for posting it in my contest. I really enjoyed this.
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LMAO!! This is HILARIOUS!! you so desereved to win the gold! great job! I am definetly going to book mark this one!!
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Ok these are my favorite type of love poems too. you are funny girl. we have a lot of writing likes. This made me laugh so frickin hard. I have to get wife and have her read this. ROFLMAO
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Thank you for your comments. Lol I hope your wife enjoys reading this
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LOL!!! I saw it coming but I wanted to see how you closed it out. This was good. Now I have to tell you. There sooooooo many people that love erotic or any type of similies to sex. So it wins almost everytime But write what you like then perfect it. I write sensual not sexual so it comes out very well. Sexual usually doesn't sound right for me some times. With that sad. keep writing what you enjoy. Thanks for the suggestion and Congrats on the Trophy
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heheheh, fab and funny write, congratulations on the trophy, very well deserved. Great job. sj
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hahaha!!!nice one,caught me by surprise there!
thanks for entering and good luck,
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OMG heheh had me going as well....hmm well I loved the twist, made the poem even better for it! I still am in love with your poetry! LOL off to read more!!
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Funny as the dickens! You had me going. Great writing. Super poem. I have written a few like this. They are such fun! Very well written. Thank you for the comment on mine Jeannie
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really cute
Oh my! What a luvly joke hun! So glad you weren't talking about...well...any way...ya know what I mean, right? Great write hun! Really cute and original! I luv these kind of writes that fool people!
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A Job well done. I liked this one. It really epitomizes the intimacy that can be found in relationships. I think that you are doing a great job. Very descriptive and I must say that I liked the imagery that you used (gustatory, tactile, visual, auditory). Great job. The imagery contained in this really lovely syle of writing was so refreshing. I like the pattern of the stanzas. i think you did an outstanding job on this poem. Another magnificent poem to your collection. thanks for sharing. Keep up the great work. Best of wishes to you. good luck in all that you do....peace always in all ways.
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LOL. Now that shows how dirty our minds are. It got me for sure! But then I'm a dirty minded old gal anyways. Hmmmm good work or was it fun?
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Excellently written, I love a good twist to a poem, and I didn't expect this ending, just one comment, verse 5, "again the game well play", change well to we'll, otherwise brilliant.
Jacqui -
I know what you are thinking
I sense it from within
but this is how i brush my teeth
my love, my morning thing
so simple..so complex..so universal..so pleasant..souniversal..so eternal as well..amen
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OMG!! the ending hit me hard!! did not expect that
rolling on the floor laughing I love what you did with this, very creative, love the twist!
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very good...very funny
Very funny poem. Very well written. LUKE(love struck dude) -
Excellent
lol,Lovely poem and very well written,you've got me laughing here.Keep up the excellent work.Kenny -
You really had me going there for a while. Very funny, I like it.
~*APIRL*~
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