Our dirty little secret we can't say
Our dirty little secret nobody can know
Our dirty little secret we both enjoyed
Our dirty little secret would make our parents frown
Our dirty little secret was worth every second
Our dirty little secret we will never forget
Our dirty little secret caused us to show lots of love
Our dirty little secret we will take to our graves
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Written April 19th, 2006
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i wonder what ur dirty little secret is lol jk i really liked it.
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Very interesting, I personally think the repitition is a bit worn-out from the repeating of it... but, overall, it's very capturing...and like Tyler said, you said everything except what it was.....like it's a SECRET...
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thanks dude
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I thought the repetition was rather... cliche' or... overused... Annoying. I can't decide. It was simple. But good for a free write. You could expand this into a bigger poem with more rhyme/sequential syllable count/sequential lines per stanza order... Make it more organized. Not that this wasn't organized, but I thought it was just random, and just there. I like how everyone knows what you are talking about and you didn't even mention sex.
Overall this was ok for me. On an entertainment aspect, this was good. On a technical level, just average. I know you can do better than this dude.
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wow, babe you did get alot of coments about it didnt ya. well, our dirty lil secret is something our parents might get angry over but oh well. love you lots!
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I'm-- well can't decide if whether or not the emotional aspects are strong or weak however the uniqueness of this was thought out with repetition. If you failed to notice or not, but you need to reevaluate the conjunction(just a minor typo error)
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Truly sweet and true
You delightful person, confessing to doorbell ditching Valentine cookies at your neighbor's house! Such a sweet tale!
waaaaa! I didn't get any cookies! waaaaaaaa! gimme some cookies! Oh my gosh, you silly crybaby, you just wait your turn! 
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Ohhh...this has to do with the three letter word - sex! I like the words that repeat and the feelings this poem puts forth of guilt, shame, fear, embarassment, misery, etc. Infact, I just finished watching a soap on the television which has to do with the same thing...so this couldn't have come at a better time. Very well written. All the best.
Charishma
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Your poem shows a lot of emotion...I like the title. I like the song with the same title..I think you should really concentrate on your emotion when writing because you are good at that....When you write, dig deep inside and let your deep feelings spill onto the page...Great job!
Lynda
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Thank you and American Reject are pretty good but ive never heard that song by them honestly
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Well,needs work. And I can't say I think your dirty little secret is original. Tyson Ritter killed it for you. But it's pretty good.
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i am glad you enjoyed it and i hope who ever it is eases up and understands you better (the assumed parent) great poem....
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great!
No rhyme....but it was a really loverly free write! i love the repitition! great job with this one! really heart felt.....is this from true life stephen??!! lol this was good!
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Very interesting!
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