this is to you
who was always there
when i needed you
or tried to push you away
this is to you
who knew what was best for me
and made me stick it out
because you knew i would thank you in the long run
and i always did
this is to you
who never gave up on me
whether or not
i was already giving up on myself
this is to you
who paid for pom soccer
baseball basketball
and all those movies that i never the you go to with me
this is to you
who let me make mistakes
not to show me you were right
but to show me that what i did was wrong
this is to you
who read me stories
to help me sleep
and let me come into your room
when i couldnt
this is to you
because i love you
Author notes
Written April 19th, 2006
A contest entry
- People who you love!! by xDemonicxAngelx.
300 points, ended April 25, 2006, 11 entries
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Hmm, so let me tell you something since I know you never log on anymore, : (
(you know what this is for)
Anyways, so poem, nice and all.
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So, there is that kid Tyler, and I've decided, depsite his horrible name, he is my new best friend, but apparantly this is that one kid you said something about who you called YOUR best friend. Well I'm stealing him from you. Except probably not, BUT I GET AUGUST!!!
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This comment is getting very long, which is good I guess, now I"ll comment on the poem.
I hope your mommy or daddy liked this very much, because it is a wonderful thankful poem. Like thanksgiving. You are giving them your thanks in form of a poem I bet they never saw. Ironic, 'eh? -
this is great and i can relate to it. i love this poem soo much. the only thing is this line
"and all those movies that i never the you go to with me"
you might want to change it because it doesnt make sense. this poem is lovely. i cant tell you how much i love it. great job with it. i only thought that i should point out that mistake. we all make em. hehe. well i hope you win! -
technical first:
proofread! the flow is lost when a word is wrong because of a missed letter or something. Just go through it once, it should be fine.
I love the poem though, I like how at the beginning it sounds like it's a cheesey love poem, but it turns out to be your mom. I'm not sure you need to give that away at the end, you could avoid saying mom and I think it would still give the same feel.
keep writing.
-S
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