Standing on a silky smooth beach
My toes curling around the sand
Colors of the sun reflected off the water
True peace and love bathes everyone
Fire painted into the sky along with God’s glory
A yellow ball resting silently onto the water top
The outline of a ship seen in the distance
A heavenly paradise on this rugged earth
Yet even as I dwell in this glorious place
I know it would be nothing without you there
Your breathless beauty is reflected in this place
Realizing that your beauty is far greater than this
Staring into your deep eyes, looking for your soul
Being lost within your beauty, indescribable beauty
The warm breeze blows slowly through your hair
Falling deeper and deeper into love with you
Author notes
Picture was designed by me: allpoetry.com/
Poem was inspired by the picture.
"Beauty is only a concept of the mind that expands on each new horizon. Each day brings about a new perspective of beauty." --Tim
Poem won gold in the following contest:
allpoetry.com/
Written April 18th, 2006
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very personal. Sometimes you have to be in a place you really love to realize it would be so much better to have the person you love w/ you, to enjoy as well. Your love will contrast w/ eachothers once you mold your souls in the place you both adore. Excellent writing my fellow poet and friend.
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Very vividly written... Intense. I felt your emotion with your words. Excellant!!
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This is beautiful I enjoyed it immensley and wish all the luck in my contest. Well done and thank you for sharing it.
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Hey tim this is good also, but I like your other one better. Great luck in this contest, with either poem.
Your friend
Kimberly
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Exquisit work! I truly loved reading it!!! Your work is so beautifully romantic. This was really well written!! I like the imagery you used. The line "Fire painted into the sky along with God’s glory" it was MARVOULOUS!!!! I loved this it was beautiful, it had imagery and it was just oh so good! I dont know what else to say about it! EXCELLENT WORK1!!!! BRAVO!
LoveDroveMeCRazy4u
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This is one of my favorite love poems that I've written. Maybe I'll rewrite it one day to see if I can get it to be better. I wrote this for my girlfriend when we were still together, but now I still find it to be a good poem. Thanks for commenting
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i like this one as well. it reminds me of my girlfriend a lot. you did a good job at wording it and the backround fits the poem so well. you painted a picture in my mind i soon wont forget. keep up the writing.
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I really liked this poem, I think it gives hope to those who are sad and think that they'll never find that special someone. Good job
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This is so beautiful. The imagery you speak with your words is truly that of the lovely picture. It is as if the reader is lying there on the beach taking in the glorious beauty. A wonderful piece, my dear. Hugs, Patricia
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This is beautiful Tim...both the picture, and your words. Sarah is a blessed woman to have you in her life. Simply beauitful.
A pleasure to read.
Sam
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This was so beautiful. I love how it has two meanings, about the picture, (which is beautiful by the way.) And your girlfriend. That is so sweet! She's a very lucky girl!
Well... all in all I loved it. Very lovely write!
amanda -
Tim how dare you say theres a lot you cant do!
nothing is impossible my friend, and as long as you have your mind set and stay focused there isnt anything you cant do. just as long as you dont give up. its hard at times and i know. trust me i have thought i couldnt do a lot and i just tried anyway and i proved others wrong, and myself at times wrong. so dont say theres a lot you cant do because you are only limiting yourself. Peace to ya
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wow..thats awesome imagery.. its like i can visulaize what you're saying..i love the flow to the poem its really soothing..i like how you've portrayed your self with strong words..very captivating.. good job!keep them coming!cheers!rock on!
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I didn't even notice that
Neither did the other people who commented on this poem so far. 
Thanks for the help! I really appreciate it
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Gorgeous poem, Tim.
My only constructive comment concerns the last line in the third stanza:
"Realizing that your beauty far is far greater then this"
Is it supposed to be "far is far"? And should "then" be "than"?
Go for the gold!
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Thank you, Chelsea... Your sweet, kind words always brighten my spirit and I greatly appreciate it. God bless you.
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Hey there!
Thanks so much for your comment, Jason. I really appreciate it. If you ever want to talk, send me a message sometime
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Wow Tim, this was awesome and really sweet! Your words were so descriptive, it was beautiful! IT sounds so peacful, and the picture really ties this all up together wonderfully! Well, good luck in the contest!
*God Bless*
~*Chelsea*~
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Tim! Hey, I was getting back to you on the piece you commented me on, and when I got here I read this. It mas SUPER great! I liked it alot and that I would like to read more of this love these two share!
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This is beautiful! I really enjoyed reading this. As always, your poem was graceful and it was such a joy to read. Thank you for entering my contest! Best of luck to you!
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Thank you so much, Beth I really appreciate your constructive feedback on this piece. I don't know if I'll change it, but I'll keep that in mind for next time. Thanks again
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heylo dude.. your poems are amazing.. and thanks for commenting mine teehee... =]
lauren xXx
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Beautiful, Timothy, absolutely beautiful... wow, yes, and I do hope one day we can look at His amazing work and admire it together. And then I can push you in the water and get you sandy. Hey, a girl's gotta dream, ya know. I love you and I love this, it was so descriptive. The way you described the picture so clearly put a perfect image in my head. Great, great job, I hope you do well in the contest (which, of course, means you should get gold. )
*God Bless*
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Tim-
This was a wonderful write, and you always do an amazing job (I am not gonna stop saying that) unless there is something that i can suggest to change something. but there never is!
you are an amamzing writer and this was a wonderful write. keep it up. and btw that was a good place to stop but yet you also could have kept going.
However it might just have dragged it out a bit more and such and might not have made it as strong but i think either way its great and I really dont know what to say though i have said a lot. anyway i think i should go now i think i gave you enough to read. this was a wonderful write! keep it up!
Peace to ya
~ Beth
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