I Wish It Would Rain
I wish it would rain
and wash off these layers of dust
and years, and years of hurt and rust.
I wish heaven would kiss my skin.
Heal all of these doubts I hold within.
That all the tenderness of angelic tears
would rinse away the painful years,
I just wish it would rain.
(chorus)
I can see the clouds forming in the distance,
but they never come my way,
what can I say?
They just drift ahead on the horizon.
Call my name, point cumulus fingers of blame.
And oh, how I can almost feel the rain.
Oh how I wish it would pour,
Then I could dance in those sweet drops.
And this dissidence would stop.
That your moisture would kiss my soul.
Then for just a few moments, again, I'd be whole.
And I could touch you without the fear
of dirtying the one I hold dear.
I just wish it would rain.
(chorus)
I can see the clouds forming in the distance,
but they never come my way,
what can I say?
They just drift ahead on the horizon.
Call my name, point cumulus fingers of blame.
And oh, how I can almost feel the rain.
But it never does.
And I am trapped in the pain,
of never seeing you again.
and it never rains,
no,
it never rains.
Author notes
Just feeling it all. Even Atlas felt like collapsing at times.
Written April 18th, 2006
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EXCELLENT. This is so amazing. I can feel the emotions....great job!
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Thank you so much. One of my rare attempts at lyrics. I am glad you liked it.
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very well done. sometimes many of us have the desire to be cleansed by different things and in different ways, be it spiritual, emotional,mental even physical. i enjoyed this with it sadness and defeat. thanx, conni
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Sean,
If only I could get the music from in my wee brain onto paper, then it would be great! You need not envy my talent, you have your own. Thanks for such sweet words.
Oh...BTW....I want a wonder woman shirt too! LOL. Hugs
Billie Jean
Edited on May 09, 2:55 p.m. because 'bad fingers...bad!'. -
Then you call and say.. We shall run off.. and do this and this and that..
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I give up! I will just never be this good! lol A gorgeous piece and I so want to hear the music this will be accompanied by. Phil Collins' similar title is a favorite of mine, but this will always have so much more heart and emotion in it for me. Wonderfully done, Poetess.
Slyder
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excellent
This is a glorious poem. I was attracted to your title, thinking maybe it had been a while since the land had benefited... But as it was a personal request, it was even better! You have a gift with words and I am grateful you have shared this with us. I hope it does rain for you soon. I bet there are a few people out there who feel the same way, myself included. You couldn't have put it better! -
yeah all those years....i wish it would rain...this one is being bookmarked. absolutely beautiful...atmosphere drips from it...brought tears to my eyes.
thanks for this...oh, one thing..in the chorus i think you could remove the word "points" to make the line read, "call my name, cumulus fingers of blame" ...the point is implied, and it flows a bit better i think...just a suggestion
beautifully penned poem
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Wow... A most masterful write, my friend, by a very skilled hand. I am incredibly impressed just by the beauty of your words, so full of passion. Your picture as well is a lovely addition to the overall imagery of the piece. Also, I love the rain, and this song made me wish that it would rain soon, in both ways. A job well done... Take care, my dear Poet, and fare thee well.
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Good god...powerful write you have mustered. I loved the title (which drew me in initially). The words bred images of pristine brillance..."I wish it would rain". Good god, pure bliss within my fingertips. All praise to you...but you have been outdone by one (do not take it personally). There still lingers - having passed so many years - the ever-glistening; the tempt; of the Temptations. Well penned. -
Wonderful lyrics you have created here - rain and freshness, but nothing for you in these lines - only dust, rust and dryness. Interesting metaphor throughout the lines.
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This is a very insperational song you have penned here, It has hit several nerves with me on something that is affecting me in life at this very moment every word making me wish it would rain
And flood my heart of all the hurt I have caused my friend recently do to my job and having to leave town and not being around for over a week to say what was going on thank you for letting me get lost in your beautifully penned words and helping
Me realise that I was blind and wrong .. -
Beautiful!
I love this! I think that you did a wonderful job here. Very beautiful and well thought out. You are very creative and have a lot of talent. Keep up the great work! -
loved it! Absolutely beautiful. You did an excellent job. I especially liked the beginning verse. The chorus was good, but i think i liked the verses better
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Beautifully sad yet beautiful all the same.
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Wonderful! personally i think it should end with the chorus but thats just me, lol i even found myself 'singing' the chorus after the last word was read. It simply sang to me as i read. I love music. i listen to it all the time, as i read and write poetry even. your song pushed the music i have playing aside and demanded to be sung. You're one 'bad' lady! Always a pleasure,
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P.S. the picture is Awesome!
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This is beautiful!! I am not sure where to begin withthe comments, I love the rain, it is cleansing and beautiful and this really puts a great light on the rain. We all have felt like this at times, you are right, even the mighty Atlas, and luckily eventually the rain does come, or whatever the person is looking for, and we get our fresh start. Hang in there, those clouds will head your way. I really liked the sound and flow of the words, I would love to hear it put to music. I am not sure what type of music you have in mind for it, but it reminds me of the song from The Crow, "It Can't Rain All the Time", or maybe a metal ballad. Either way it is beautiful!
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