Lonely street, dark and cold
She ran so fast and hard
Waiting there, watching her
He dragged her in a yard
She tried to fight, scratched his eyes
Screaming cries of pain
Some one saw, some one heard
Yet no-one never came
Torn to pieces, ripped to shreds
Spat on, kicked and bruised
Broken nose, shattered limbs
A heart that she once used
Pupils fixed, eyes are still
Lifeless, cold and grey
Single girl, all alone
Her life did end today
Author notes
Pretty morbid but I tried for something different
Written April 18th, 2006
A contest entry
- P.A.I.N. by PoEtS-bLeEd-InK.
375 points, ended April 15, 2007, 26 entries
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525 points, ended August 13, 2007, 13 entries
Gold trophy winner
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1090 points, ended March 6, 2008, 45 entries
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600 points, ended July 9, 2008, 31 entries
Silver trophy winner
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700 points, ended October 31, 2008, 49 entries
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What did you think
Comments
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You did make this different. I could really feel the anger and sadness within the poem. I enjoyed being able to feel the same emotions. Thanks for entering my contest
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this is so horribly sad and dark. to think someone saw but no one came to help, just horrible! thank you so much for entering my contest and best of luck.
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I don't really know what to say. It is amazing none the less. It brilliantly comes to life as you read it, I wish you luck.
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this is really nice..great imagery!
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whoa! finalist list... i would like if you separated it into stazes for the final judging
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I love it well done
All the best
Nightmare xx
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Ah, yeah I see that you did try something different, and it's great. You could have used with maybe a thesaurus here and there, but I think it's good. :]
However, it wasn't quite what I was looking for this contest. I wanted an introspective look at death, rather than just a description of a death.
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Wow very sad and graphic, I liked how you wrote it, I am single again after a long marriage and am secretly afraid of my life ending similarly whilst looking for new love.
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how very tragic and intense. the passion in this piece is excellent, as is the flow and the imagery. it's a shame that these things do, in fact, occur everyday. and to think that someone could have prevented it....so sad, yet an excellent write, very nicely done!
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We understand the ending from the way you have written the previous lines - it makes so much sense- easy to read and understand.
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Very sad write!! Exellent imagery and rhythm here...exellent flow as well..Yet another GREAT write!!
I'm glad I came across your write's!!
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