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A Blood Rendition

Here is a new affliction
instilling hate and deadly ambition
Here is our new affliction
Fifty thousand years old

Red sunset on the ground
A red blood shot eye
A red sunset in the sky
A blade of bullets to slice

Here is a new affliction
Our children search for glory
Here is our new affliction
Their murder by deadly ambition

Sol eclipses the ground
A shadow falls around
The grace and glory found
floating through the tunnel of light

Here is our new affliction
Instilled with blood and dying children
Here is our new affliction
Fifty thousand years old.

Author notes

And the rockets' red glare, the bombs bursting in air...

They forgot to mention the countless dead human beings.

I would have a picture of G.W.B to the left, but this was the most accurate default.
Written April 17th, 2006

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  • Stix
    April 17, 2006
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    Thanks alot glad you liked it!

  • AngelicRose
    April 17, 2006
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    this was a cool lyrical pice
    well done and well written
    I did enjoy reading this one !
    Rose