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I Will


From this time
and thru all time
i will love you

in every peril
with every fear
i will comfort you

against all odds
and without thought
i will defend you

in every season
throughout the years
i will care for you

and in the end
when the rapture
shall come
and we state our names

i will claim you
as my own to God

and if all shall fail
and we are cast apart
i will find you 

then in the end
when time is gone
and all the lovely
moments have past

i will remember... you

all we lived

and all we dreamed

 

and our love

forever





By
Lee L.

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Devotion to Another

Who of us, has not loved to the edge of our existance

Written April 17th, 2006

A contest entry

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  • trista gold member
    March 27

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    Hi Rick,

    Your wife and friendly spelling fairy have returned (at least temporarily, lol)

    "in every season
    thought the years
    i will care for you"

    I think you mean "throughout" or "through"...or "thru"...instead of "thought"? There is kind of an overabundance of "and"s, but these are beautiful words that always make me think of wedding vows. Best of luck in the contest Hon!

    Love and s
    ~J.


  • StarEyes
    January 22

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    Ohhh, I really like this one! I will send them each the link! This is great! If I decide to do pre-writes in the next contest, please be sure to enter this one!

    and love

    Nyetta


    • Endeavor gold member
      January 22
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      Hi Nyetta


      Nice you like this
      Someday I will use this myself
      I just love the thought of the words

      Rick


  • Expression
    January 29, 2008

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    thanks for entering...i had to have this in my contest its so beautiful...i think many women would love to hear this
    Thanks again1


    • Endeavor gold member
      January 29, 2008
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      Tempestuous


      What a wonderfull comment
      A poet loves when their words are felt
      I think you felt it all

      Rick


  • sassylibra0074
    January 29, 2008

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    beautifully written

    Beautiful words for a lucky woman, I especially was touched by the last few lines.. When the rapture shallcome... and if we part, I shall find you..thanks for sharing and best of luck!

    • Endeavor gold member
      January 29, 2008
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      Sassy


      Thank you for carring for my words

      I love the ending too

      Rick


  • Expression
    January 29, 2008
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    this really is beautiful....and i knoi said i wont allow prewrites...but i will make an exception for YOU


    • Endeavor gold member
      January 29, 2008
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      Tempestuous


      I am very honered

      I intend to use these words for my own marrage someday

      Rick


  • pinkhawk
    January 26, 2008

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    ...this is really inspiring and touches my heart! a poem full of love and care, more than 100 percent!


  • Aussie Gypsy gold member
    September 8, 2007

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    I feel this one in my heart, this is how I love the man in my life, he has been beside me through times no one could imagine and yes he is the love of my life and when our time comes, we will meet on the other side to continue what we may not have the chance to finish... beautiful hun

    Karen


    • Endeavor gold member
      September 8, 2007
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      Hi Karen


      You are blessed to love this way

      You saw the seemles movement from earth to heaven in love

      I applaud you, Rick


  • SummerlandRayne gold member
    August 13, 2007

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    Nice Rick...so many comments it is almost futile to say more. So I will say...loved the words...
    Love~
    Az


  • Dragons Lady
    June 14, 2007

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    Such beautiful words of love. They could melt a lovers heart to know that she is truly loved for all time. Simply, marvelously wonderful.


  • tara wilson gold member
    May 18, 2007
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    SO beautiful...sigh

  • Sam Is I
    April 23, 2007

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    That is a deep kind of love. your work is just so beautiful. I feel as though it should be a sin to create such beauty.


  • Viyanna Rosemarie silver member
    March 29, 2007

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    how very precious these vows are. one would be so blessed to have them written to them. thank you for sharing this with me today and congratulations on the gold. viyanna rosemarie.


  • MysticAngelEyes
    March 23, 2007
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    Wow such lovly vows, it brougth happy tears to eyes. Very nicely written.


  • Lady Ireland gold member
    March 10, 2007
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    Very fitting and a true honest vow!
    Good luck.
    Slan Dolores. x

    • Endeavor gold member
      March 23, 2007
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      Lady Ireland

      I know of you

      Thank you for reading my writing

      Rick


    • Endeavor gold member
      March 10, 2007
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      Lady Ireland

      Nice name
      I am Irish, McCarthy, Quigley, O`Casey and Moran

      Thank you for your kind comment on this

      I personally love the thought of the words

      Rick


  • DenyMyLove
    March 10, 2007

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    Awwwwwwwwwwwwwwww!!!! This one leaves me almost speechless!!!! It brought tears to my eyes!!!! Thank you so much for entering it and good luck!!!!
    ~DAWN


    • Endeavor gold member
      March 10, 2007
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      Hi Dawn

      Thank you for your emotional responce to my words

      I know you truly felt them
      These words I love so much can be easly remembered

      I see them as a deep affermation for life
      Knowing your trama of last year, I am so very happy for you

      Sometimes dreams do come true
      and we are blessed

      Rick


  • Jeremy0826 silver member
    March 10, 2007

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    Beautiful piece here my friend.
    Good luck to you in the contest!
    Always a pleasure to read your work.
    Thanks for sharing this one here!



    Jeremy0826

    • Endeavor gold member
      March 10, 2007
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      Jeremy

      Thank you for reading my words

      It is always nice to have you read me

      Rick


  • thankful4theSuNsEt
    March 1, 2007

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    this is so beautiful...i can really feel the devotion and love in this just pouring out from your heart...it was like reading the vows of matrimony in a different way. absolutely lovely write!


    • Endeavor gold member
      March 10, 2007
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      Dear Dot

      I thank you for your words

      It was your comment to me that made me to enter this into this contest

      Thank you for feeling my words

      Rick


  • galfalfa gold member
    February 27, 2007

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    A beauty of a vow that any woman would love to hear from her man - had to come check this out after you shared this with me through im - nothing more touching then when a person lays his love, his soul and his promise at your feet,

    Very well penned, adore this,

    galf


    • Endeavor gold member
      February 27, 2007
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      Gal

      Nice you came to the source to read this

      The words flow better when ordered as written

      I thank you for caring for my words

      Rick


  • Deedeedeedee
    February 25, 2007

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    Another Beautiful Write

    Thank you for the invite Rick, I am glad not to have missed from this one ~ it read like wedding vows and beautiful ones too...who would not be completely taken
    with such promises ~ I can only imagine her joy....Blessings to you both...Dee


    • Endeavor gold member
      February 25, 2007
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      Hi Dee

      Since you read my other
      I wanted you to at lease get the points on this

      I appreate your kind thoughts
      I made the words for a woman I loved 25 years, Mary

      Thank you
      Rick


  • DarkestAngel68
    February 25, 2007
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    Pretty and deep

    You just have very deepeyes. Full of love and emotion.


  • DarkestAngel68
    February 25, 2007
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    AwwwwwThank you

    You too have a very kind face. I like your eyes. The eyes are the window into the soul.

  • DarkestAngel68
    February 25, 2007
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    I believe

    I can't wait to read your book. It will be astounding.


  • DarkestAngel68
    February 25, 2007

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    That was absolutely wonderful

    That wasawonderful poem. I thought that I might cry. I have lost my best friend last year and, that was just fantastic! Very well written. Bravo!


    • Endeavor gold member
      February 25, 2007
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      Angel

      Thank you for reading this

      What is lost today, will be found tomorrow

      If we believe

      Rick


  • panegyric ink
    January 27, 2007
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    I'll Be very unnerved if you don't trophy with your thoughts of caring love on this one.

    Far beyond what I would normally refer to as amazing!!!

    • Endeavor gold member
      January 27, 2007
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      Hi Follower

      I agree

      The contest is long over

      Thank you for saying Amazing

      Rick


  • Whoochi gold member
    January 25, 2007

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    vows...

    these are truly inspiring words from you...I believe they should be wedding vows.....etched in my mind, I thank you!!


    • Endeavor gold member
      January 25, 2007
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      Julie

      Thank you for reading

      These are words I said to a woman
      I loved as an act of commitment

      Rick


  • musical-psycho
    January 18, 2007
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    This was so pretty and elegant. It touched my heart. You have such a way with words, and I am very glad you are my AP dad. Now as for spending points applauding, don't worry about it, I don't mind, you earn them.

    - Cait -


    • Endeavor gold member
      February 25, 2007
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      Cait

      You have read so much of me
      I never reliezed you had read this

      Sorry for the delayed responce
      I appreate you a lot

      Dad


  • Loveandblessings2u gold member
    October 2, 2006
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    wow when you love, you really love.
    must be nice.
    your poem is simply wonderful.
    i enjoyed every word.
    thanks for sharing.
    joyce


  • July 14, 2006
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    breathtaking.
    your words of love from your
    heart are so eloquently written
    it is lovely to visualize these
    words whispered to one another,
    barefoot, on a tropical island
    for two amidst the beauty of nature.
    a poem of love in it's most purest form.
    lynn



  • PassionsPromise gold member
    July 12, 2006
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    Breathtaking and full of love and devotion. well done. I cant say more.
    vsutton


  • luckynsincere
    July 2, 2006
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    -stands up and claps like crazy-

    This was breathtaking. I loved it..

    The "I will" lines add so much heart into your lines. This my friend is very very beautiful... though I have yet to read anything by you that was not
    Always,
    Melanie


  • -LilacThOughts- gold member
    June 8, 2006
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    pure love

    The devotion to love in this poem is hauntingly beautiful...I cannot stop reading it, I will never tire of it...I get a thump in my chest and a lump in my throat each time I do read it...

    It is an outstanding piece and deserves a million applauds, if I could I would give them to you...I love every stanza and can't pick out one above the other, they flow into each other so smoothly...a beautiful show of love for the woman in your heart...

    I picked up on one word and wondered if it should be 'throughout' in the forth stanza, forgive me if I'm wrong though lol...

    I shall be reading many more of your poems...take care...

    ~Lilac~


  • EmsandAbs
    June 5, 2006
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    I liked the first stanza most...very lovley work you write... seeing as I'm being slow person i'll comment on other poems later... But this is very woonderfulyl written.

    -Pinky


  • Vickie J
    May 31, 2006
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    I loved the line "I'll claim you to God" and then again the promised assurance that you will find her if circumstances cause you to be separated. Your love story seems like a perfect fit for one of those reunion love stories that Ophrah or Montel feature on their shows every so often.
    You words mesmorize me, for want of a better description.
    Beautiful~vj


  • trista gold member
    May 21, 2006
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    My last read for the day, and perfect words to go to sleep with. Even more beautiful each time I read it. Thank you, Rick

    ~J.

  • Endeavor gold member
    May 21, 2006
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    Thank you for doing as I asked, Rick 3:50am


  • spamwitch
    May 16, 2006
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    That is truly beautiful, thanks for recommending it. Not many can honestly say this from the heart, refreshing some still can.


  • Amber Silverhair
    May 14, 2006
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    Only too happy to. As I said, a lovely poem.


  • Endeavor gold member
    May 13, 2006
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    Thank you for your corrections, I am a non speller, Will you read it again, without the flaws, Rick

  • Endeavor gold member
    May 13, 2006
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    Thank you Trina, I could have not loved this women more, Rick


  • Amber Silverhair
    May 13, 2006
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    This is a lovely poem but it is spoilt for me by the few spelling errors. It is like a beautiful rose with mould on the petals. Thur should be Thru, confert should be comfort, clame should be claim.

  • rainbow tears
    May 11, 2006
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    I LOVES YOU TOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO ur poetry is love no words

  • FindingFate
    May 8, 2006
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    See this is what I love about you...

    against all odds
    and without thought
    i will defend you

    and in the end
    when the rapture
    shall come
    and we state our names

    i will clame you
    as my own to God

    and if all shall fail
    and we are cast apart
    i will find you

    i will remember
    YOU

    all we lived and dreamed
    and our love

    forever


    This is one of my favorites by you.I enjoyed each line..Trina.


  • tears.of.silence
    April 25, 2006
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    Awww this is so beautiful. You have done an amazing job on this poem. The flow and the whole sincerity of it is amazing. Keep up the great work, welcome to my family, and good luck in the contest. Kahy


  • Endeavor gold member
    April 19, 2006
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    I try to be happy in love. It is the most difficult thing to do from time to time. The thought of love, just looking at a lovely face, is easy. Being in love, can be trying. I seldom write about the dispair. Mostly, I write about the happyness.

    Rick

  • poetsoul
    April 18, 2006
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    What inside your heart about life, and what inside of you about love? I am asking comes in heart. Be care and strive to be happy.


  • JeannieD Hunter gold member
    April 17, 2006
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    Good

    Good poem. Well written. Very heartfelt.

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