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Bare

Lying underneath rapture
awaiting for bliss to ensnare...

Motionlessness beginning something
not yet to be described but another
part of reasoning hasn't proved to
be confirmed

Rippled sheets and this
symphony we've made--
emotions running fevered pitch
but neither one of our bodies
has touched skin to skin

Departures of rhythmic breathing
soon ensue a battle beyond all
comprehensions; just momentarily,
our eyes wager a price

Here we are once again...

...two chairs: both occupied

Soon you and I strip the other of
prideful needs with the utmost of
becoming a wanton

The lights play a song alongside
its shadow; underneath, the floor
beckons warmth onto nudity's violin

...and all we've done so far was
rid ourselves of these barriers and kissed

Author notes

Picture: Rhapsody In a Natural Seduction
Artist: Jeffery Scott

Sidenote: My erotic/seduction bone has been lost for some time now only to have revived itself long enough for me to write this piece so hopifully some justice has been done. Also, if this is a featured item, please do try and comment
Written April 17th, 2006

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  • SarahD
    April 17, 2006
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    This was excellent - flowed really well and the descriptions throughout were excellent! I wouldn't change anything! Good luck!
    Sarah Louise Hudson


  • B Chandler
    April 17, 2006
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    Rose,
    thanks for commenting on my piece and i will try my best to return the favor soon

    Rae

  • B Chandler
    April 17, 2006
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    caballero,
    ty for commenting and Ill try my best to return the favor


  • PrincessOfFire
    April 17, 2006
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    This is a beautiful piece of erotica. It's done very tastely full of metaphors nad reads with ellagance and grace. Good luck in the contest. God bless you. Rose


  • Ninth-Poet
    April 17, 2006
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    Very good

    A very good piece of poetry! I like the choice of words and its flow! I felt every passionate feeling flowing through your words
    -Keep the ink flowing!
    -Dave

    P.S. Best of luck for the contest

  • B Chandler
    April 17, 2006
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    DarkerKnight,
    thank you for commenting. Have fun judging


  • KnightRhymer
    April 17, 2006
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    Yes Ayizan, justice has been done. The emotions you have shared are ones hardly ever spoken of. The first time just before. Good luck in the contest.

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