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My Secret Heaven

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If...

 

i could have you 
to keep you as my own
i would cherish the hour...
and the moment i found you 

and give a blessing
to our God above,
for your precious presences 

and cast my soul
upon your own,
and weep in great joy
for having found you

i would make a bond
and keep a prayer
to guide me,
in your lasting love

and search the stars
that dwell above us all
for our destiny

i would walk with you
in my mind
knowing,
the heavens cover you too 

and look into the sky
hoping you are seeing
the same stars
... the same destiny


then, in the evening
in the darkening twilight
of a day gone by

i would find you
in my dreams,
and bring you close in the dark
to have you as my own

in secret 

and if the golden glow
of a wondrous day
shall turn to rain, 
or strife should touch
your precious heart

i would stay with you 
to kiss away your tears
and walk with you,
laughing within the storm

together

then... by your words
and with your love
i will be found again
in your heart 

and every pain
upon my broken soul
shall pass away,
with the thought of you


then someday
in the evening of my life
as the sun falls away
and blankets the trees
in a final amber glow

i will pass in happiness
knowing...

you have loved me completely

i will remember every season
with all that will have been
and hold your gentle touch
within my mind

 

for all time

and welcome in...
the end
to dream of you forever

in my secret heaven



Lee

Author notes

My faithful readers
lovers of the spoken word

Sometimes love is beyond overwhelming... it makes us want to have them, love them, today... and for an eternity.

These are thoughts that I have professed, and have believed in
As many times as I have read this, I still often cry

After I lost my hardness from Nam
I was the origional senstive guy, before it was popular... lol

A good woman inspired these words
I wrote this to her on IM, she cried as she read the words
that became our love over time, I was touched

Love, is lifes greatest blessing
our comfort, within this world
a relief from the work of living

Mr. Chavaly used to say
"Thank heven for little girls"

I agree,
Endeavor

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  • BigSpiral
    November 26
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    cliffhanger

    I really like your poetry. i think that there is a real genuine quality in you that comes through. you are bold with words and ideas, i wonder if you are ever more subtle? this poem starts out a cliffhanger which i liked if. . . . in my mind, however, the poem keeps that cliffhanger feel, but is a long poem. not a shorter work. i like it though. well done.


  • Mary Ann Love
    November 26
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    A lovely form and beautiful flow. I think the suggestion of "precious presences" is most intriguing.
    Thank you for the read - I enjoyed very much.


  • Nature Song silver member
    November 26
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    Awesome write it left me speechless! Wow!! To have a love such as this anyone would be touched. Love it...~Sie

  • knestrip
    November 26
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    you seem to be in very much in love


  • Wade Wise
    November 26
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    It is wonderfully clear that you are a man of love. I cant recall the last time anyone has so captured the essence of all that it means to be in love. Not just to love but to be IN love, suffused with it, breathing its vaporous light, swimming in its currents of giving. Well done.


  • angel-lover
    November 20
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    Beautiful

  • lilwildflower
    November 20
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    Beautiful, just that

  • saint1103
    November 20
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    i really enjoyed reading it i give u 5 stars : )

  • this is the most beautiful poem I have ever read! you are such a talented poet and I really enjoyed reading this poem, made me feel all warm inside, really well done!!

    • Endeavor gold member
      November 23
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      XMysticalNightma


      The most beautiful is quite nice
      Pleased you liked my words

      Rick

  • sussac coir
    November 11

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    Really beautifull, i love it, the words are so meaningfull, my wife has just lost her father, this poem seems very fitting. Well done.

    Regards Sussac coi


    • Endeavor gold member
      November 11
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      sussac coir


      We never know who we will touch with our thoughts
      Perhaps you will share it with her sometime
      It is about my own... someday, anchient life to come

      I thank you

      Rick


  • PassionsPromise gold member
    November 11

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    Wonderful..as always

    tears fall rapidly
    for I agree with every word


    exceptional piece


    • Endeavor gold member
      November 11
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      Hi Passion


      Hi Victoria

      Thank you for caring for my words
      you have a gift for feeling my thoughts

      Exceptional is good
      Thank you,
      Rick


  • lovestinks
    November 11

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    I love the hope thats in between all these lines. Very heartfelt emotion... warms you up just reading it

    "and look into the sky
    hoping you are seeing
    the same stars
    .... the same destiny"

    What a powerful ending. great job here.. keep penning!


    • Endeavor gold member
      November 11
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      lovestinks


      Your name belies your heart
      What a lovely comment to me

      Pleased you liked this
      Rick


  • Tzipora
    November 11
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    beautiful. oh so beautiful.


  • SheWolfNLust silver member
    November 5

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    And in heaven our love moves on
    Casting its reflected memories in time
    As dance among the clounds one by one
    Our souls embrace in an eternial love!

    Simply beautifull and I very much enjoyed reading your poem and the way you painted your picture, to find a love so pure is rare but a blessing if one is lucky enough to find it, I have in Pete as he is my angel god has sent me, my favorite part to your poem is

    and cast my soul
    upon your own,
    and weep in great joy
    for having found you

    I tatallly love these lines, it captures how I feel about my Pete


    • Endeavor gold member
      November 11
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      SheWiolfLust


      Thank you for the read
      I am behind on my comments
      but yours was so good, I had to make time

      If you found your love, by any name, I am happy for you
      it is all in how we embrace, the dream we have sought in another
      and their reflection, back to us in kind

      Your opening words are a verse
      Thank you for quoting me

      Rick


  • shell225
    November 5

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    Wow... you have taken my breath away, what a beautiful poem.


  • speakingheart
    November 3
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    nice

  • summore
    August 26

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    Touching

    No need in wondering why so many gave positive comments to this one. Beauty never fades especially when it comes from within.


    • Endeavor gold member
      November 11
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      sunmore


      Lovely comment
      I liked what you wrote

      Rick

      PS: Thank you for the three smilies


  • stef-witt gold member
    July 26

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    This was a very passionate and emotional write, and I enjoyed it a lot. I especially liked the following lines -

    "then someday
    in the evening of my life
    as the sun falls away
    and blankets the trees
    in a final amber glow"

    That conjurs the most beautiful picture in my head. Love is so intoxicating! Thanks for sharing!


    • Endeavor gold member
      November 11
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      stef-witt


      Pleased you could see the vision
      Thank you for quoting me

      The applause was nice tooooooo

      Rick

  • you are so right, love really is lifes greatest blessings.
    your poem is very beautiful, it's more than beautiful.
    i tried to point out one special part, but to be
    honest the whole piece is as lovely as can be. i hope
    to the high heavens that you wrote these words for
    someone very special to you. i hope you love, like
    the words in this piece. you sure have some wonderful
    talent..

    justgot2loveme

    wow so many people read this poem, that's amazing...


    • Endeavor gold member
      November 11
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      justgot2loveme


      Your comment was very thoughtfull
      pervoking to me

      I try to love like my words
      yet we may write anything our mind leads us to
      but in here privatly, where I live and love, my words are compelled to me

      I wrote this for "One"
      but it is for any women, that can feel the emotion

      I read this a lot myself

      Thank you for saying amazing, Rick

  • As always
    touching...


    Passions


  • My Chronos gold member
    July 26
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    Sweet love

  • I KNOW I've said it before and I will say it again...this is soooo BEAUTIFUL
    Your heart speaks such awesome words and just touches the heart of your reader!
    Sigh...
    I wish you the very best of all there is, my friend!
    Many hugs!
    Sandy


    • Endeavor gold member
      July 18
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      Hi Sandy


      What a wonderful comment on this
      Very nice of you to re

      Thank you for your well wishes
      Rick

  • How lovely this is! Thanks for sharing with us!

  • Amazing :)

    I loved reading this. It is trully an amazing piece! Love is a great thing to have..and a great thing to write about when you can write as well as this!


    "and if the golden glow
    of a wondrous day
    shall turn to rain,
    or strife should touch
    your precious heart

    i would stay with you
    to kiss away your tears
    and walk with you,
    laughing within the storm"

    This was the best part of your poem and it shows love In all its greatness- When you love someone you will do anything for them!

    Thank you for such an enjoyable read and I look forward to reading even more of your work!


    • Endeavor gold member
      July 6
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      PurpleLogic


      Sorry I took so long to answer your lovely comment
      Summer is my busiest season for work and play

      Thank you for you wonderful comment on my writing
      Hope you find many more to your liking

      Rick

  • what a beautiful poem of love. When you have the right person in your life, love is amazing!


    • Endeavor gold member
      July 6
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      Gods child40


      Thank you for liking my thoughts on love
      You said a lot in your breaf comment
      Love... is truly amazing

      Rick


  • tsukinaka
    May 9

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    This is good.

    Aside from the capitalization errors, I really love the meaning behind your poem. Good effort in bringing across your message of Love, everyone needs it.

    Also, this poem touched my heartstrings, which is not really an easy thing to do using words and words alone. I hope my comment will be presented as a source of encouragement for your future endeavors.


    • Endeavor gold member
      May 9
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      tsukinaka


      Pleased you were touched by this
      The Caps were not realy an error in this
      I chose not to because "I" was not important
      in this verse. Perhaps, you may understand this

      Rick

  • Sigh

    This write is truely transforming. It melted this heart of iron, and made me question once again if my heart could make room.

    "then... by your words
    and with your love
    i will be found again
    in your heart

    and every pain
    upon my broken soul
    shall pass away,
    with the thought of you"

    This poem is the sort of poem that makes cynical people like me believe once again in love. It is healing, edifying, uplifting, passionate, and bathes the reader's heart with hope. I have been profoundly touched by reading this. I am grateful for the healing tears that flowed as I read this.

    Jo


    • Endeavor gold member
      May 9
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      Hi Jo


      I believe you realy felt the words
      Tears are the greatest complement to a verse
      Thank you for reading me so well

      Rick

  • "then... by your words
    and with your love
    i will be found again
    in your heart"

    this is truly a very BEAUTIFUL write. you summed up true love perfectly.


    • Endeavor gold member
      April 3
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      Hi


      Thank you for reading me
      It is always nice to be quoted

      Pleased you liked my thoughts in words
      Rick

  • Soooo Beautiful

    Just awesomely beautiful and sooo wonderfully written
    This is beyond lovely
    A fine sharing this is!
    Thank you for being part of this contest...I very much loved this


    • Endeavor gold member
      March 26
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      Hi Heavenly Angel


      This is a personel favorite of mine
      so I am pleased to see it on the finalist list
      Thank you for saying beautiful

      Rick


  • Treasure 5 gold member
    March 20

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    I loved it it is wonderfully written, this should of won gold again but I guess you can't win them all. It was a pleasure to read.


    • Endeavor gold member
      March 26
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      Golden Eyes


      I hope the judge likes it as much as you
      I guess I am in the finalist

      Pleased you like my thoughts
      Rick


  • wingdreams
    March 20

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    A portrayal of your perfect love, tugs at the heartstrings...I can feel that you do not want it to slip away.

    • Endeavor gold member
      March 26
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      wingdreams


      Thank you for fealing my words so well
      Your kind to read me

      Rick


  • rollingzen
    March 20
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    well done


  • ilovE him
    March 20
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    this is a beautiful poem!i love it!!

    • Endeavor gold member
      March 26
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      Hi elizabeth


      Thank you for saying beautiful
      Your kind

      Rick


  • anaisnais
    March 19

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    Touching, it's great to find the one special person you more than connect with, one that becomes an existance beyond your own souls.


    • Endeavor gold member
      March 26
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      anaisnais


      Yes, beyond my soul, my life
      to be with my love is, My Secret Heaven

      Thank you for saying Touching
      Rick


  • dillon79
    March 19
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    good


  • estbelle gold member
    March 19

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    I would walk with you
    in my mind
    knowing,
    the heavens cover you too

    I could quote everything I swear
    I love everything written
    so beautiful and soulful


    • Endeavor gold member
      March 26

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      estbelle


      Thank you for quoting me
      A very nice comment to me on this verse

      Thank you for the three Smilies
      Rick


  • Catacomb
    March 17

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    Well, the thing is that this is not exactly my genre, but love is something that every single person, no matter who you are , experience atleast once in a lifetime. This was a great definition of your love, and I enjoyed it very much. Thank you.


    • Endeavor gold member
      March 26
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      Beautiful suicide


      Thank you for reading me
      even though this is not your venue
      Pleased you enjoyed my thoughts here
      I read one of your verses

      Rick

  • You have one of the most beautiful souls I have ever had the blessing of knowing. Your words bring me hope this very day...thank you for sharing this today my dear precious friend...I needed it to be certain...I know this will bless all who read.

    'ssssss
    Suzie


    • Endeavor gold member
      March 17
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      Hi Suzie


      I think it takes a soft soul
      to see a soft sole
      Love if my words give you hope
      Thank you for the hug

      Rick

  • congratulations on the trophies you have won with this beautiful write. i thank you for sharing this with me today. viyanna rosemarie

    • Endeavor gold member
      March 17
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      Hi Rose Marie


      Thank you for your kind words
      it is always nice to have you read me

      Rick

  • pinklogic
    January 31

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    This is a beautiful poem. it took my breath away from the very first verse. you are an amazing poet, having read many off your poems. I will get round to commenting on some more soon.


    • Endeavor gold member
      January 31
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      pinklogic


      Thank you for your kind thoughts on my verse
      I liked your comment
      This is a personel favorite

      Rick


  • lake of dremas
    November 20, 2008

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    i could not send applauses because i've already read it and commented long ago. but the more i read the more i want more


    • Endeavor gold member
      November 20, 2008
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      Lake of Dreams


      That is a great complement to be read more than once
      I liked your comment below
      I wish I could write a poem like this every day
      It is a personel favorite of mine

      I thank you, Rick


  • lake of dremas
    November 20, 2008
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    simply extraordinary

    what i like in your style of writing is the intense imagenary , the use of words sweet simple and so expressive.. your imagination is like the imagination of a magician , a sculpture , a painter , a writer , a lover..
    your poem is so sweet to read , so sweet to feel , and it tooks me somehow , with my mind..
    very well done. i like your style so much.. romance you write is so sweet like sugar.


  • TortureKitty
    October 16, 2008
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    This is such a sweet poem, I loved it.
    This definitely deserves more than just one gold.

    • Endeavor gold member
      October 21, 2008
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      Hi Kitty


      You are kind to se my words in this light
      I thank you for reading me

      Rick


  • Snowing Kisses gold member
    October 9, 2008

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    This is so sensetively written, it is very delicate, it reminds me of an antique wedding dress, it is just so lovely, its words make my soul sing, it remindes me to thank the lor for my own loved ones thankyou for sharing littlefishesone


    • Endeavor gold member
      October 9, 2008
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      littlefishone


      So nice to have you read me
      Perhaps you will read "Forever and a Day"
      written in this same vain

      Pleased you felt my words
      Thank you for the three smilies, Rick


  • Nature Song silver member
    October 9, 2008
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    For all the past seasons knowing that one was in love. Just to have been able to love such as this is amazing. To hold one in our heart so dear, that even death only brings us more joy knowing that we were loved in such a way. As always your words paint such a romantic touch. ~Sie


    • Endeavor gold member
      October 9, 2008
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      Sweet Sie


      You always see my words so clear
      that is the essance of my thoughts here
      Your face has a beautifukl sad peace to it
      I felt compelled to tell you that

      Your friend, Rick


  • Kazytc
    July 25, 2008

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    Woweee how beautifully tender!

    This is just sugar sweet and so deeply beautifully tender, you certainly have pehnomenal depth of feeling and a very powerful talent for writing poems on the theme of love and affection, tenderness and passion. You clearly have a very feeling heart and a very soulful ambiance, as does this beautifully crafted poetic masterpiece, it warms right through and totally captivates and enchants. Beautiful soulful heartfelt sentiments and tenderness personified. Phenomenal and breathtaking, you are amazing. Fabulous fine art scultping in poetic form. You have a fantastic and very unique style and should for sure, be in print, if you aren't already. You are just sooo soo expressive.Bravo love it! Very very well done!
    Poetic Hugs,
    Kaz.
    Kazytc xx
    Thanks millions, for your fab and kind reviews of my work you are very inspiring and encouraging.
    Glad you liked them.
    Thanks Millions!


    • Endeavor gold member
      July 25, 2008

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      Hi Kaz


      I am honered by you many kind words
      I write from a place of humility without pride

      We have lost our adornment of women
      when they became our competers and true equals

      I never did and see you in your finest form
      A treasure to be adored

      Rick


  • sassykitty
    June 17, 2008

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    Aw -you are an old softie! How wonderful to have such intense poetry written about you! I do write about my own particular muse but don't think I capture the sensuality quite as effectively - I'm not surprised this has won. Well done!


    • Endeavor gold member
      July 25, 2008
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      Hi Sassy


      I am an old softy
      An old fassion romantic
      who wants nor cure to modern times

      Thank you for your kind comment

      Rick


  • Stardust-luvr
    June 13, 2008

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    my very dear friend your words light up the stars in the soul and erase the dismay that may overwhelm. It brought me to tears (especially the following lines :
    i would find you
    in my dreams,
    and bring you close in the dark
    to have you as my own

    in secret

    and if the golden glow
    of a wondrous day
    shall turn to rain,
    or strife should touch
    your precious heart

    i would stay with you
    and kiss away your tears
    to walk with you,
    and laugh within the storm

    my dear xx through love and strife if the hope of togetherness is strong enuf it can withstand all obstacles. well done dear and many blessings always xxx

    together


    • Endeavor gold member
      June 13, 2008
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      Star


      Thank you for feeling the meaning of my thoughts, so completely

      I cried as I typed the last four stanzas of the verse
      knowing how the verse would end

      It was all in my mind, just waiting to excape to paper

      You honer me with your reading
      Bless you my fellow lover, of the written word

      Rick


  • AmberMoon
    June 8, 2008

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    I agree with your author's notes, and I can very much relate to the feeling in this poem... especially the 'secret' part. I still know that it can come true... I just have to wait for him. I live for Love.
    I'm glad I read this. Thank you for writing it.

    ~Eva

    • Endeavor gold member
      June 8, 2008
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      Motning Eva


      I thought you comment was very sincere
      Pleased you liked my writing

      Rick


  • michellemybelle gold member
    May 23, 2008

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    HI Rick. I am glad you brought this forward, one of my favorites by you. You say so well what I believe most of us truely want in love, but either don't believe enough to have faith in this, that it exists or can last, or we settle for less out of fear. Maybe it takes many of us experiences to know the differance and know what we truely want.
    Lovely, every word.
    Michelle
    I wish I could applaud again


  • Hidden
    May 23, 2008

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    i have someone in my life that i feel this way 4. in a metorphorical and literal sense to the word "poetry to my ears"


    • Endeavor gold member
      May 23, 2008
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      Leslie


      If you have these thoughts for a man
      You and he are both very fornate and blessed

      Thank you for carring for my words
      Rick


  • Nature Song silver member
    May 23, 2008
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    I remember this poem well...brings tears to my eyes. So moving and wonderfull words! Leaves me with a sigh! ~Sie


    • Endeavor gold member
      May 23, 2008
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      Hi Sie

      When I write, I want to bring forth my own emotion
      yet as a writer
      my best hope, is to have others feel my words with me

      If you have tears, you are there in my words,
      from you own past feelings.
      therefore, I have written something of value, that we may cry together and know

      I thank you deeply

      Rick


  • ears2hearyou gold member
    May 23, 2008

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    you are such a breath taking writer!

    There are a couple contest running right now...where
    sad hearts are looking for hope...if this doesn't feed
    hope...I give up!
    You sure do know how to empty our hearts and fill it
    wisely!
    ears/Seattle BRAVO! BRAVO! BRAVO!


    • Endeavor gold member
      May 23, 2008
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      Evening Kathleen

      Love is a story
      and if we are blessed, the chapters will be written by us,
      over the distance of a life tine.

      We all dream to love and be loved as this
      and it is the trama of daily living, that temps us
      to loose sight of the dream and vision, we begain with.

      Even this reality, can not make me loose my words
      for the wish I always crave

      Love... as is time, in morimorial

      Thank you for your heartfelt comment

      Rick


  • requiempoet gold member
    May 3, 2008

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    I don't really get the love thing, perhaps it's best left to grown ups. Eventually I'll find it. Wonderful poem...though there has to be another word I can use besides wonderful. Still it is a great piece of work.

    • Endeavor gold member
      May 3, 2008
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      < I must screem


      Wonderful is a good word to me

      Thank you for reading me

      Rick

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