The Shadow....
Hunts and follows him full of darkness and pain
She represents his sad shadow hoping to be healed from the rain
Him not being around hurts her to know he's not near
The shadow is dripping due to shedding more than a tear
Turning his back, and leaving the one he supposedly thinks of
Creates the shadow to follow and hurt the girl he love
Due to busyness and not able to display his usual affection
Hurts her so much and gives the shadow an hateful reflection
Weeping and praying for the return of her life and world
Is too much to handle from a heart of a young girl
By him keep doing this may leave her mad though
His behavior makes her....... HIS SAD SHADOW
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Written April 16th, 2006
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that was an amazing poem yours are the ones i love so i will read more of them
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Don't be a shadow, step out into the light. You deserve to be treated as you treat them. This was full of emotion, The Shaker
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oh man this is sad, i guess when you cant see the person your with, you have that emotional love in you always, very touched at this, thanks for sharing, keep up the awesome poetry here...
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It's sad when two people can't be together when they share love. But it's more sad when the love is set aside and the couple go their separate ways. May your heart not ache.
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Real Shit
Whut it dew this yo boi Hakeme tha Dream reppin that 216. i feel your pain. cuz im single rite now and everytime i see a gurl i wanna talk to i feel has if she took a part of my heart with her. But now after reading your poem i have found motivation to continue my search for that specail gurl in my lyfe. -
I really like this. I love how it has a dark feel behind it all. Great Write. Keep it up!
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Thank You!
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this makes me wonder just who creates the shadow that the girl becomes. the shadow bit kinda threw me off at first but once i understood i really enjoyed this read. its beautiful...
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Thank you soo much!! I am speechless by the words that you used to describe my poem! I feel honored thanks again!
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Thank You AJ!
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Wonderfully Done
Oh my...this piece is compelling...Stunning. I love it its wonderful I love every syllable. I usually point out certain lines i like but you'd jus be reading the whole poem again I must read this again. I will point out the ones that stood out the most though..:
Turning his back, and leaving the one he supposedly thinks of
Creates the shadow to follow and hurt the girl he love
and this
Weeping and praying for the return of her life and world
Is too much to handle from a heart of a young girl
By him keep doing this may leave her mad though
His behavior makes her....... HIS SAD SHADOW
simply brilliant. this piece is inspiring, i wish i would have written this myself. Im feel compelled to write something based on this or from this but I cant! thats how good it is. I dont want what ever I come up with to make yours look bad or anything because this is a work of art. Keep up the good work. I look forward to reading more of your works
Your Friend
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I understand what you trying to say and i'm sorry for your feelings to be so sad and hurt but i promise i will make it up to you and just know that i haven't changed the way i feel about you Raven Bankhead
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