Raven I wanna be with you everyday
Im in love with you what can I say
I wanna show you my love from Sunday to Sunday
But showing you my love is hard that has to be admited
Everytime I see you my spirit gets uplifted
Yes we do argue and Fight
Talking to you makes my day go bright
Well Raven you are my one and true love
Everytime I see you I see a Beautiful Dove
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Written April 16th, 2006
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A lovely write. Nice flow, rhyme and tone. Very nice expression of emotion. Nice alliteration. Shelley
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beautiful well written piece of poetry.
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This piece was short, had a fantastic rhyming scheme, and Raven definitely loved it! I bet she is your dream girl of AP and will be joining(if she hasn't already) your contest! Well, the flow was excellent as was the beatuy behind your words. Keep up the great work!
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this is really sweet
i really like the way its short... it's str8 2 the point
its awsum
ravens a luky girl
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amazing!!!
"Yes we do argue and Fight
Talking to you makes my day go bright
Well Raven you are my one and true love
Everytime I see you I see a Beautiful Dove"
Wow that was amazingly sweet!!! Tell Raven she's a lucky girl!!! At the end, the rhyme seemed a little forced, but hey... I'd kill for a boyfriend sweet enough to write me even a terrible poem!!!
Keep up the kick-a$$ work!!!
xoxo
emily♥ -
Thank you so much!!!!
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I agree with my APMum, melodies, this is very sweet, Raven is indeed a lucky girl!
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This is the sweetest poem, ever. I feel like I am tiptoeing through a love scene! You chose the prettiest flowers and the dearest words for this thoughtful poem. Lucky girl, this Raven!
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AWWWW!! I LOVE YOU TOO!!!!! Thank you baby!! Then you used my favorite colors for this poem!!! I LOVE YOU SOO MUCH!!
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