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Natures Lullabye (Sonabs)

Soft graceful serene the sound
upon each wave a melody plays
harmony of orchestral symphonies
soothing the stars and calming the sky

Warmth descends to the ultimate high
caressing tears of the sad and lonely
enticing each soul calling the stray's
breathless in sweet song all lost were found

Beneath motionless waters so profound
love spread invisibly through many days
gave hope to hopeless wishing if only
cover them whole with life without lie

Vibrant colours dancing around
the music of natures lullaby





here is the link for this new form of poetry if you would like to try it
allpoetry.com/column/1949690
 

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this is a poem in a new form i created i hope you like it
Written April 16th, 2006

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  • cerridwen
    June 12, 2006
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    wow, i like this, i will give it a try.

  • heart on sleeve
    May 5, 2006
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    thankyou for such a lovley comment and it is great to write a new form it's fun and a challenge and if others try it that makes it all worthwhile thankyou, you have really made my day
    abigail


  • Sai Babas Lotus
    May 5, 2006
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    Excellent!

    WOW Heart on sleeve! This is beautiful When I saw the form it looked so hard to understand and try out, but now that I have seen the example, I feel I can try it and will succeed. Nothing is impossible to achieve as they say! I love the imagery of this poem and my favorite stanza is the first one. I like the repetition of the "s" sound throughout this stanza. Actually now that I see it closer, the entire poem has the "s" sound repeating somewhere or the other. Your choice of words is very nice. I also like the shape this form took on as you wrote it...it looks like a tear. This was very creative and done very neautifully. The rhyming is also very good. The last two lines of this have such a colourful imagery to them. It is really a nice way to close the poem. After reading lionslove's comment, it makes this poem all the more profound and a piece of art to admire forever. The depth of this poem and its true meaning of salvation is something I did not think of but love it. You have my applause.

    All the best in all you do and I hope to see new forms come forth from you!

    Charishma Ramchandani


  • Kiran silver member
    May 3, 2006
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    Wonderful poem and an excellent new form! I am definitely trying this out!!! Brilliant!
    Kiran
    xxxx


  • misticalDreamwalker
    April 30, 2006
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    checked this out looks great but not my style i like to have a poem that is a story/poem twist and paints a story pic and mine is free verse style, any ways great job ~corrupted


  • AerinAlanna
    April 29, 2006
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    I like the format, but I would probably use iambic pentameter or iambic quatrameter to keep the olden feel. Great idea!

    ~Amanda


  • Equinox Asylum
    April 29, 2006
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    Very beautiful poem. I do love the new format. I would like to ask your permission to print this poem so that I may try this myself. I will list you as the inspiration. Once again, this was beautiful.


  • Shandilliahosen
    April 29, 2006
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    Worth a click

    I quite like this, the form makes you think. It is fun to try and read it aloud in such a way that the rhyme scheme sounds more prevalent. The poem itself has a well developed theme.

  • Listfully Forgotten
    April 29, 2006
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    i really like this form it doesnt take away from the meanign wither GREAT JOB ABAGAIL


  • dee of navar
    April 29, 2006
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    lovely

    This peace flowed beautifully. This new form is nice. Your diction was wonderful. Great job!


  • petrichor
    April 29, 2006
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    I read your column and although I found it confusing at first I understood it. Seeing some one actually write like this makes it so much clearer. I loved this poem especially the last two lines because I love the word 'vibrant'. I like the soft gently feel this had to it, which is only natural because it's a lullaby, but it's excellent.


  • Sonja
    April 17, 2006
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    Very nice new form Abigail. It is interesting how we could play with words, always making them meaningfull in some special poetic way. This poem is full of beautiful used pictures and colors, but, I am already used to see all kind of poetic beauty on your site.
    ~Sonja~


  • Lionslove silver member
    April 16, 2006
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    excellent!!

    i totally disagree with the line about the strays. it totally fits!! this whole thing was magical to me...almost like a salvation message via water being spirit. this is an amazing piece that flowed ...well...like water...and, just...wow!!!

    "cover them whole with life without lie" ....fantastic line too!! and just again...all i have inside me is this feeling of "whoa! and wow!". i just totally love this!! it's tight and flows with unique arrangement.

    thank you for this wonderful piece!!!

    all the best and keep writing this awesome stuff!!

    your fan.......Lionslove.

  • flowerfairies
    April 16, 2006
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    i do like it, it's different and i may try it, it has a nice flow to it but the line
    calling the stray's
    i just did'nt like it, it did'nt seem to fit with the other words you had also
    through many days
    this bit seemed a tad forced, it's a new form you have made so it may be a little tricky at first
    but a great try and a nice thought behind the poem
    ebony

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