Red and sore eyes
Are what I see when I stare into the mirror.
Two red and sore eyes look back at me.
The girl looks scared
Frightened
Left alone
Yes. She's been crying.
Her lips are trembling, trying to hold the tears back.
I Watch her as she takes a deep breath.
I can feel the air all the way down in my lungs . . .
She lifts her hands to dry the tears off her cheek
They shake
I feel a cold hand sweep carefully on my face
and I realize that the girl in the mirror
is me . . .
Author notes
Someone really close to me said this horrible thing to me a few days ago. Something that made me scared. This poem is how I felt that night.
I know this poem is weird, it's bad, really not good at all. Everything could be better. It might be confusing as well. I don't know. But it's how I felt, a feeling I will never forget.
Written April 15th, 2006
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Wow u expressed ure self very good in dis poem da emotions was outstanding i loved dis poem way to go wit dis here bravo awesomejob and well done keep up the beautiful work dis is here wonderful holla back Peaches
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Why Thank you Julie
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Just brilliant... describing yourself as seen in a reflection ie a mirror is an old trick that always works - as long as it's original in some way. This definately has some of Maggie's style in it, I can just tell. And it is that which makes this so special.
Well done, a very sad write.
Julie xxxxxxxx
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Aww Thank you hun!
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Beautiful, amazing, just fantastic.
Great write as always.
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Thank you
Oh yes, thanks for telling me, just edited it now
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Needless to what you have said about your poem, i think this poem is really good, i could almost feel by the writting of your poem what you have felt but should it only be Red instead of read..?? Anyways other then that its good
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