I kiss your hands and I marvel
I make love to you and I wonder
Is that really Love?
Not that I don't love you,
But do you really love me?
Never have I been loved before,
But I adore you.
You touch me and I am desperate
To preserve that feeling forever
I need to keep your hands in mine
Throughout The eternity
You kiss me and I yearn to keep
Our mouths locked in forever
I want to capture your manly sweat scent,
Your gaze, your embrace, your voice and your
Body in mine.
My heart and soul feel ecstatic
Love is too much for me
Why do I feel I don’t deserve you
When you say you don’t deserve me.
How can I keep you my love?
I scream my fear and horror
At losing you.
You tell me I am secure
My fright incomprehensible for your
Mind and soul
But to me it all makes sense
Because you left me and the world
Heart and soul
Author notes
Option 4 in the contest
To the fear of losing any of my beloved. Pray God be kind to us
Written April 14th, 2006
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very good. i like this alot. the detail made the poem so much more clearer and strong. awesome job, thanks for entering! :]
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Love is never equal. Its always about ten to twenty percent off on either side which is a sad and scary truth.
I like how you wrote about something that everyone in a relationship probably feels. I know I do.
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I want to capture your manly sweat scent,
sounds kind of horny there
I kiss your hands and I marvel
I make love to you and I wonder
Is that really Love?
Not that I don't love you,
But do you really love me?
Never have I been loved before,
But I adore you.
Most of the time we wonder if love is being reciprocated because we fear that the person may not love us the same. In a way, it sounds very true, but we should also we are bonded with whomever we may share our heart with. I don't believe that we may give too much, or not recieve enough in a relationship. I just believe at that particular time, maybe that is all we need and not more. Love has to gradually process within oneself...
keep up the great work and thank you for sharing
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what you see is totally right
but sometimes one has to resort to rationalizing one's love, giving too much and not being reciprocated such love kills love on both ends, one end becomes sick of giving and not receiving or receiving little, and the other devalues the one who gives more and takes that person for granted, so it is not a sane relationship, but we see it all the time.
here I rather talk about someone who really loved much, and then left, left the whole world. May no one pass through that.
Thank you so much for reading it and commenting
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Strong show of emotion penned in these lines. The last line wraps things up nicely and lets the reader into a sad place. Sometimes that isn't easy to do. Thank you for entering.
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Ah steven sounded this way when we first started dating and I often ask that of msyelf to who I get close to as I feel unworthy.
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Good luck and thanks for entering.
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Thank you dear for allowing me in. i dread the fear that comes with moments like that when you feel so helpless and cannot but embrace your beloved, even the embrace wouldnt help and if he is far away, that is even worse. thanks for taking the time to read it dear.
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wonderful
Hey, you did a very good job of depicting intense feelings in this piece. A lot of people can relate to this (including me) and that is always a good thing; it makes it seem ten times more real than other people's poetry. Thank you so much for entering this in my contest, I truly enjoyed reading it! Good luck in the contest
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Very deep and truely heart felt, i love the imagery in this!....Thank you for entering my contest and good luck!
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God, protect us
Since you lost your favorite aunt -- I hope no others. --Ellis -
nice word choice. very very well done.
it has a nice flow to this, and there's this hint of painful flow right from the heart...
i like the hint of sexual flavorto this. i guess it gives it a little more power, since the poem itself i snot like... raw love. It hold a lot of feelings and emotions that hurt.
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Thank you dear, you are really giving me a boost with your wonderfully kind comments.
thanks and thank you for letting me in -
Absolutely Beautiful!
wow, such deep emotions and words, what a beautiful and strong write! I loved how brutally honest you were in this, and I too have felt like this before, love is like a flower, so is life, if you don't nurture it and give it what it needs it withers and is gone forever....Great flow,words,and imagery, you write like a pro!!!!!
Thanks for entering this in my contest and for sharing it with me!!!!Take Care and keep writing! Clearly you have a gift!
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this is a really powerful, amazing write. I hope you's two never lose each other. Great poem, and thanks for your comment on mine
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It is a powerful strong write, and i feel it too with my beloved, I fear of losing him, of him leaving me like the others have, I dont think I could take that pain. I think everywoman has these fears for a lil while. Stay strong and I hope your love will last and stand the test of time
xoxoxox
Celeste -
Thanks a million. you really do encourage me. and please if you dont like something of my work, please be critical and no problem about diplomacy, dont worry, it is all for the good.
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Powerful Write
Wow this is a powerful strong write, a show of your talent this is a winning poem also so glad to have found you I love to read good poetry !!! I applaud you and your work on this one a really great write (Ranea)
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