Standing on the edge, staring down
into the endless pull of darkness , that is now my heart
afraid to go forward and too afraid to look back
holding onto the memory, of the Faith, that September brought
losing the trust, I promised to you
with no thought, breaking the heart
of the one who owns my soul
the only love, that has ever been true
words are used like fire,
burning my skin, I can smell the pain
waiting silently, for the flames to subside
and for the words, I long to hear
crimson tears, stream down my face
aware of the pain I've caused
wanting to turn back
knowing, that your love will never be mine
I will always mourn the loss
of the most beautiful heart I have ever loved.
Author notes
I am sorry for the pain I caused. My heart doesnt deserve your friendship and my soul deserves to hurt forever. The tears, will never go away.... Your shoelaces will always be untied.
Written April 13th, 2006
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this is beautiful honey
I will always mourn the loss
of the most beautiful heart I have ever loved.
i hope one day the pain eases and you can breathe normally again...take care... fantasticly penned
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This is obviously a very personal poem, but I don't think it works very well. there doesn't seem to be any flow to the piece and that can be very distracting for the reader.
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Thank you for your comment. It's all about writing style. Some people like structure, I like free verse
Take care.
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Sad and Beautiful!!!!!!!!!!!
Criss, My dear sweet friend, this is so sad and yet so beautiful at the same time. Your soul does not deserve to hurt.
You have a beauty that others can only wish for. You are pure of heart and it is seen in your words that grace the pages of All Poetry. You never disappoint your readers and it is so good to see you have written again. Your powerful words here created very vivid imagery, I felt the pain within as it leapt from the page to my heart. We all feel this way in life at one time or another. As long as you have hope then faith can never be lost. It may falter a little, but it will always find its way. You write from your heart and that is the best place words can come from. Thank you for sharing this with all of us and please be well. You are loved always by so many. I hope to see more ink flowing from that pen soon. Love you always, Joyce
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Very good
Rich poem with rich images and brilliant communication -
Forgiving yourself for causing someone else pain is the first step to letting yourself move on. Apologizing is of course important as well. You have done so magnificently in this poem filled with emotion and regret.
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terribly sad and soooo full of emotion. I really enjoyed reading it
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Very well explained thoughts and feelings.
A very sad poem, alive with such poignant memories. An outpouring of such despair. Well produced and well constructed. Hopefully the memories will fade and a new love will be on the horizon. Nice read indeed. Love Mrs Moonraker -
Wonderful write, the heartache, the pain, it just reaches out and touches the reader. My your heart one day heal and experience the love again.
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You are a very strong person, to be able to turn the heartache you are undoubtedly suffering into such a tremendous write of searing emotions. It also takes great courage to expose oneself so honestly to strangers, and you have laid yourself and your "fault" bare for all of us. Thank you for that. If you have shown this to the one to whom it was directed, then you are extremey courageous, because it takes great guts to admit when we are wrong and to apologise so publicly. I do hope writing this has been some sort of catharsis for you ... and that, even if the breach isn't healed, you can gather yourself together and go on from here. Peace and light.
rose
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Very painful write...such raw emotion so vividly painted with your words...I'm certain you don't want to hear this, but...You stated this was the most beautiful heart you have ever loved...and perhaps it is...to date...there is one that is more beautiful out there for you because when it's meant to be your hearts will combine and make this past heart look like a stepping stone to greater things to come in your life...keep up the great work, many blessings to you.
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We all cause pain at some times in our lives and wish we could turn the clock back.Unfortunately that is life and we have to try to learn from our mistakes.That doesn't mean that there isn't forgivness and when you really mean sorry it can heal a lot of wounds.I hope yours heal soon, Ros
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this is...amazing. Thank you for sharing your talent with all of us..i look forward to reading more from you soon
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right now im crying ...not just cause the poem. this remind me of the one i fell in love with and how i just found out today he was engaged to someone who is using him. nice911
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Great write.. Really deep..
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I will always mourn the loss
of the most beautiful heart I have ever loved.
this is so sad for me to read. i know that so many of us mess up at times. i think it very honourable of you to write this for the person it is intended for. if it was to me, i would more than likely give you a second chance. the only one i would not is my cheating ex-husband. he did not love me anyway so i do not have to worry about that one. your write is so very heartfelt and almost painful to read. vilanger
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"Standing on the edge, staring down
into the endless pull of darkness , that is now my heart
afraid to go forward and too afraid to look back
holding onto the memory, of the Faith, that September brought".
This is my favorite part of the poem and I think the strong point of it. This reminds me of how I've felt a lot lately and I can relate to what your saying. It hurts so much to have the one you love break your trust and not be able to trust them again and to basicly loose them. But I hope everything works out for you and things will get better. Anyway, excellent work and keep it up!
Blessed Be.
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Amazing
It a hurtful write, sometimes things happen for a reason. Search within your heart to see the true motative why would someone cause such pain. No matter what happens in your life you will always have a friend with me.
Much love always,
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